[Report This]Date: October 24 2016 5:28 AM Title: Chapter 1
I really enjoyed this chapter-- it's nice to see Ally and Eli working things out between them, even if it cost Eli his pride. The poor guy though! As much as Eli doesn't want to shrink again, I'm really keen to see how the story progresses when he hits the 3 foot and under mark! Can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thanks, Random! At his current rate, he should be getting to that size (or smaller) fairly soon.
Date: October 23 2016 2:08 PM Title: Chapter 1
I just picked this story up today and I have to say I was very suprised.... the details you use and the character variety are strong and the story is well written as well. I know you have a bad habit of leaving some stories unfinished but I do hope you can keep this one going till the end lol
Author's Response:
I'm determined to finish this story, and then at least one of my other stories before starting a new one. Thanks so much for the review, MadHatter!
[Report This]Date: October 20 2016 5:17 AM Title: Chapter 1
I've officially become addicted to this story! Parker sounded like a fairly innocent character at first, but now I'm having my doubts after Eli's sister's comments... And I'm sure it'll only get more complicated when Eli confronts her about having a premie dad and cousin (which would be super cool if he got to meet them!). Still, I feel like for now, Parker can be trusted. I just hope Eli notices if she starts acting strangely/possessively around him. All in all an amazing job, I wish I could write as well as you!
Just a quick question on the side: how small do Premies get? Is it 6 inches?
Author's Response:
Thank you! Final premie size is three to four inches.
Date: October 19 2016 6:01 PM Title: Chapter 1
I am straight up jealous that you're writing this story and not me. I love it.
All fantastic characters, and I love the way their tendencies with Eli while only slightly shrunk portend for how they'll treat him down the road, from his sisters' bossy insistence to Parkwr's mildly predatory affection.
Just super great.
Author's Response:
Thanks, sir. Your stories have been an inspiration. Looking forward to your next work!
[Report This]Date: October 15 2016 8:57 PM Title: Chapter 1
The stories that you weave are incredible and so believable! You are an incredible story teller, and I cannot wait to see how Parker plays a role in Eli's life moving forward, and how she will feel about him getting smaller!
Amazing story! Keep on keepin on!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the encouragement, newb!
[Report This]Date: October 09 2016 2:46 PM Title: Chapter 1
This story is very well written and I can't wait to read the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thanks, SoinaGirl! With luck, it'll be out tomorrow.
[Report This]Date: October 07 2016 8:29 PM Title: Chapter 1
I absolutely love the idea behind this story! It has that realistic feel that most micro stories miss, and you've described Eli's mental approach to the shrinking gene so well! Great work, and I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thank you, Random! I prefer realism, even if that means making it less of a 'story'.
[Report This]Date: October 07 2016 5:18 PM Title: Chapter 1
I like the idea of the -s l o w- shrinking effect. I also like the 'text messaging' in the opening part. Lol! (Shaving his pubs) Ha! I love it, ...sounds like some of the trash talk my H.S. bud's used to talk. Also, the underlying fear that Eli feels is projected very well. And, Simultaneously, ...the way that his sister, or (step-sister) finds it thrillingly arousing that he'll become so small that she could actually pick him up, inside her hands, and play with him however she wishes...
can't wait for the next chapter...
Author's Response:
Thanks, midnight! There are 4 chapters total at the moment (you described chapter 2 so wasn't sure if you noticed). I'll occassionally post multiple chapters at once, depending on length, story continuity, etc.
Date: October 06 2016 1:15 PM Title: Chapter 1
I
LOVE
THIS!!!
Such interesting dynamics. I love that there are a ton of potential fun, embarrassing situations without introducing a sociopath character.
Winter is great. She seems to just want her siblings to give her attention.
Author's Response:
Thanks, realIRS. Your writing has been an insipiration, reminding me of how much fun it can be to read/write PG-rated material. I look forward to your next work and congratulate you on publishing Erica's House!
Date: October 03 2016 11:24 PM Title: Chapter 1
I think the PG rating is apt given the age of the characters and also allow you to explore the interactions between the siblings more. Great to see you back with another story!
Author's Response:
Exactly. Exploring those interactions in a 'realistic' way is probably my favorite aspect of writing this story. Thanks for the review, Nostory.