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Reviewer: sok06 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 27 2016 1:41 AM Title: The Fun Begins

i loved the last chapter. i really hope in some more foot action :D



Author's Response:

Oh yeah, they're definitely be a lot of that. While there will be many different categories in this story, vore/mouth play and feet are by far my favorite two

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 26 2016 4:58 PM Title: The Fun Begins

Best chapter so far my good man.



Author's Response:

Thank you!! I'm definitely striving to be better

Reviewer: midnightwriter85 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 26 2016 7:08 AM Title: The Fun Begins

One suggestion: whenever you switch to a different perspective, use a bar of some type like - *** or ... or ~~~ . I order to separate the different scenes.

 ~ not to be a nit-picker but, just a suggestion...

Whenever I'm reading it, and I have to 'stop' to figure out where I am, it kinda interrupts the flow of things, ya know?

Great chapter, though, ...Caitlin's casual teasing might get out of control, I hope! ;`)

Can't wait for the next installment! 



Author's Response:

I might sometime in the future, thanks for the suggestion!

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