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Reviewer: MacroGod Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 12 2019 12:24 PM Title: Chapter 5

YES! Finally Sarah is starting to realize her true place as a goddess! ;)

 

Reviewer: Paris Green Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 10 2017 8:18 AM Title: Chapter 5

I've been enjoying the story so far. You have a good grip on pacing which is good because having Sarah instantly going from sweet mother to ramaging villan would have resulted in a significant drop in quality (people don't exactly become murders the moment they're given the chance). I guess with Clare you give the idea that's she's rebellious to begin with, which I guess would explain why she's so willing to kill after becoming a giantess. I'm not quite certain that Sarah will be completely on board after chapter 5 but having her defend Jason was a good way to get it started. I expecting her idea of "acceptable" victims will become more and more generalized as the story goes on (or not, depending on how you spin it).

I've got a few things I'm hoping will happen (Sarah and/or Clare interacting with Jason's teenage peers comes to mind. Other than that I'm greatly anticipating what comes next.

You might what to comb back through a few of your chapters because I found a few errors (e.g. using "she" when Jason was talking).



Author's Response:

well, tbh, im just kind of going along at a pace that keeps in interestng. if i did a realistic pace on how someone would actually go from soft and cuddly to murdery murderface, it would take too long, imo. Thanks for the suggestion/review!

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