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Reviewer: redcars Signed [Report This]
Date: May 04 2017 7:22 PM Title: Chapter 5

wow :o thank you for making my day this was so much fun to read again but its over so fast again lol, have to read it again... maybe do some smaller shrinking plots and then together with a tf. what if someone turned smalle than an ant and then turned into little skin dirt under Sammys forskin, must be hell of the mix of swet, urin, and cum, or into a dingle berry around his asshole or so small the size of a dirt particle then becoming a tiny little part of sammys underpants in his ass area or front part. I liked the m&m part so far the most maybe another like that, someone turn into a gummy bear in a package around lots of others? maybe some animal tf? hope the story never dies so many good things can happen and the characters are just so good, I love sammy you created such a good person he's the best and I just love the bad guys suffer through the plot, especially if they are some assholes.

Reviewer: arselover Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 04 2017 6:59 PM Title: Chapter 5

The Coach cought fighting for his life just inches away from Sammys penis, getting hard, anc hi getting a boner sitting in class was so damn hot. Please more of this horny puberty things. Also in this style was so great the party, maybe another party would be cool, then things like maybe getting a morning wood, or a boner standing in school bus (was no place to sit and the bus totally full) behind a hot girl, who bounced her ass against Sammys crotch. Then what if someone got turned into smega and Sammy not showering for two or three days like the typical unhygenic teenager, maybe in a rush of getting late to school, after he woke up with a morning wood that would be good. Someone turned into thick phlegma, Sammy got stuck from in his sinus and he swalloed the phlegma ball down and it slowly sliding down his throat sitting in school. Please more gross stuff like this it's so hot combined with the school plot and around puberty. The part with Sammy taking a shit and before a piss was the best of the whole story so far, more!! The ironc of giving the Coah false hope, two times, was the best, of him actually thinking HE was the reason stimulating Sammy and giving him a boner and maybe "dry erection" lol, where in fact, it was all false hope, and his tiny insignifant being was never more than a littl tickle, no it was the teacher who gave Sammy the boner, and then also a hand job. Would love to see more boner in school or public places, morning woods, and tf around them in nasty ways. The idea of the straight Coach being humiliated like his, of inches away of the wet humid boner of Sammy, and inches away from his ass, sitting in classes, was so good. This story is just hot stuff. Can't wait for the next part. Please more gross parts!! Would welcome an arse gross tf chapter again, the party one was just too good.

Reviewer: camehere2 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 04 2017 4:32 PM Title: Chapter 5

not as unf as the last chapter with the party and bathroom ending, but still i came. but it will be hard to top the party chapter that one was just unf big time

Reviewer: Gogblo Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 04 2017 3:36 PM Title: Chapter 5

The chapter was really good and all and had some really good parts, for example the boner part, but I found the teacher giving Sammy head just off. I can't imagine something like this happening on a normal school or teacher/student realitionship, just didn't fit. Would had been way better if she just told him its normal and all and than thats it. And Sammy jerking off later at school having blue balls. I think the Coach ending as a cum stain on Sammys bed cover would had been great, or Sammy wiping away the "cum" with one of his worn dirty underpants, letting them drop on the flor next to his bed, that would had been a more fitting end for the Coach.

Reviewer: ILike Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 04 2017 2:25 PM Title: Chapter 5

Don't make Sammy aware of the things he did, that would ruin his 'good heart'. It is so much better to hink of those bad guys turned into nightmarish body parts and Sammy goes through his day withouth any thought of them. Speaking of heart... how ironic his name is Heart! That was such a cool idea, so fitting. I liked how you make Sammy sorrow and feel worried all the time, even he didnt do anything bad, and how he was all hope he is fine, and I am sure he is fine and all. The last part: it would kill Sammy if it turned out something bad happened to the Coach. I had such a good laugh. Also glad Lucas didnt find out, I dont want the friendship be ruined or break between them. As a ittle wish, dont let Lucas die. Also dont make Lucas become gay, that wouldnt fit in the plot. It is such a thrilling little teas Sammy has these feelings for him, maybe a part of Lucas starts to talk with Sammy about chicks and Lucas actually has no idea about Sammy being gay or bi. I also thought after this chapter, Sammy could be straight too but just a heartly character. Hope the police will move away from the school and wont play any role anymore, I would like the plot continue without this, having them go into other directions. I just loved about this story the most this school atmosphere and everything, let it continue like that. Maybe make a few tf more suffering with them still be aware of whats happening especially in cruel parts they became, that would be cool. Thanks for writing,

Reviewer: mikeesan Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 04 2017 2:03 PM Title: Chapter 5

I forgot I found another picture how I imagined Sammy look like in that bunny costume: 

http://i.imgur.com/CCVmpPz.png

 Especially with those tight strech jeans, and it's just so cute, maybe though with a bit of a more twink looking facial expression like Nai from Karneval:

http://i.imgur.com/3CNVTSf.png
http://i.imgur.com/QzDa0CV.png

I also like the skinny bone structure of the neck and throat muscles and adam apple, that would be awesome if you could describe Sammy more like that.

Reviewer: gtsfan91 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 04 2017 1:34 PM Title: Chapter 5

idea with the testicel and the coach into cum, really enjoyed it, especially of the in class part. sammy turning red was the best part; i saw it totally in my mind of him standing in his skiny clothes and the boner down visible so "hard" and him turning in total shame, please more like this. let him say unwittingly if possible, i like these kind of stories the most. i never really read any no unaware taged stories. keep it up. hope to see more scat and watersport parts again.

Reviewer: mikeesan Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 04 2017 12:51 PM Title: Chapter 5

!!!! :] You made my day, so happy I just read a new chapter of this epic story.

I am not bothering you too much with ass long messages like my previous, I truly hope you liked all the ideas in those and will use them eventually though, that would be AWESOME.

This chapter of course had epic length again, everything written in the same awesome style of yours. So of course I will vote it 5 stars, how could I not!? The chapter though was a bit of a downer for me, I think it had a few logic flaws, which in the past chapters, never happened. Actually the insane flaw of logic in this story is what drives me loving it so much, in combination also with, and which is very important I want to say this: Please... please please my god I am begging you, let Sammy stay unaware!! It's what making this story a jewel out of a sand of ordinary stories. Please dont change it. I saw the first line of you thought of changing it, and my heart dropped. It would totally destroy this story. Please dont change it.

Here are the logic flaws though which were a bit of a downer for my taste:

"Price laughed, "Did you see the kid? I bet he can't even lift 10 pounds. How's he suppose to take down a 200 pound kid and get him out of the school or a party full of kids? No, the kid didn't do it, but he's involved in it. Who ever is behind this has to be close to the kid.""

I think it would had made way more sense, if the police guy said something along after seeing how weak and what a wimp this kid was, like, did you see him, of course he has nothing to do with any of this, and they would totally cut him of the list. Saying he was maybe still connected to it was a bit unrealistic in my oppinion.

The second, and totally unlogic part was with the teacher. This was totally a downer for me, of her suddenly giving Sammy a play and then even a blowjob, as a teacher? It was so... meh. I loved the idea of someone giving Sammy a blowjob though, but a teacher of his class, just doesnt seem right to me. I hope she will disappear too, which maykes sense of Sammy thinking she got worried maybe getting in trouble, fired, or even in jail of what she did to Sammy.

Then I also found the testicle idea a bit of a flaw, it would had made sense maybe if the couch became a spermia, but then he couldnt "ticke the prickle" hahaha.

These parts were like feeling of me giving a bit of a 8 out of 10, but then..., the other parts totally made good for it again, for example the "boner in class" idea, was SOO DAMN GOOD!!

"Sammy felt his penis starting to grow as he did his best to not think about anything sexual."

All these lines around that part, and how it were going soft again, then grow, and everything was so damn written epic. And it fit perfectly into this high school plot. I actually remembered I once got a boner too, or maybe twice, in school class and it was horrible, I felt so embarrsed and tried everything to hide it, LOL!

You could had made it even better of writing out how it would totally form and expose through Sammys skinny streached skater jeans.

I loved the wet spot down there part too.

Then of course everything of the itro, I btw LOVE this soo much. You do it in every chapter, writing out these parts of Sammy going home, making homework, eating, going on the bus, changing clothes, classes, and everything, is SOO interesting to read, seriously, I love it. It fits so perfectly in the high school style, and just makes this story amazing.

Then also how you made Sammy feeling cocnerned and everything, totally having no idea he was "behing" those missings and how he even came up with dont worry, I am sure he just broke his phone, and all this, fantastic. I love how you make Sammy caring so much and literally make him a person who "coudlnt harm a fly" (which actually would be so ironic of those two fly tf ideas I spoke about lol!", maybe thw two cops turn into flys visiting him again). I could also see, maybe one of the flys ends as a smear (still lviing after smashed) on a rolled up comic magazines of Sammys, and the other, half smashed, Sammy feeds to a pet of his, maybe a frog in an aquarium, or a gold fish. Then the first one could maybe be detached, his head falling of, and like in insects, those body parts still live a few moments along, landing on Sammys soft pc chair (maybe he has these really girly ones, with a Mikey Mouse styles Disney child chairs lol), and Sammy plops his moistured boxer ass on it, doing homework, maybe even jerking off. I could see this scenary totally be awesome of Sammy looking through the aquarium in his boxers and tshirt, smiling, and go along pal, I have a snack for you. Maybe even more ironic of them had before in biology class about how digestion works in fish or frogs.

Then of course I would sitll love more than anything the anus tf plot idea. And also maybe not loosing conciousness of this tf, which would literally mean ... hell, for the person, forever.

Please dont change the style from unaware to aware, it would literally kill the plot. I am still giving 10 stars for this because of the great parts in it, and like I said, I loved the blow job idea lol, not that much of it giving by a teacher though. Also the boner in class was epic. And just tha carying nature of Sammy, so sweat and just amazing.


I could also see the police now suspecting the couach and blame him, that he has to behind it, now after his vanishing!! And it would fit so well of Lucas may say like what an asshole, that prick was some kind of perverted freak or something, he must be behind all of their missings.


Go on, this story is my favorite, and I hope to say way more chapters, please dont end it too soon <3 Thanks for this awesome chapter again!!! 

Reviewer: mikeesan Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 26 2017 1:00 AM Title: Chapter 4

HeY!! Hope you liked my ass long review, ha. And youll have time again soon to continue, just can't wait. This chapter was just so good, hope you liked my ideas and would love so much to see them happening in future chapters. So glad this story changed into scat and watersports, I had wished a lot for it to happen. This is truly by far the best story you wrote so far, and it will stay just a favorite of mine forever.

Reviewer: zol Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 17 2017 3:52 PM Title: Chapter 4

wiped out by a fart was a foul idea, mostly my favorite part of the whole story so far, more like that! and then becoming the boys colon, more like this! and the best Sammy being unware about it, was even friendly towards this prick. the drunken party plot was also great.

Reviewer: Gogblo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 14 2017 8:12 PM Title: Chapter 4

I had such a goodtime last hour reading this and the one before, I had to read several lines lots of times in a row because how good it was. This is one of the best works I read on here. Hope to see way more chapters like this, nasty kinky and vulgar plots are the best.

Reviewer: Gogblo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 14 2017 8:09 PM Title: Chapter 3

This TF is so hot, so realistic, so good, the vore part was one of the best I read, too many authors leave those good parts out of the shrunken guy screaming in pain, skin melting, having his skin melting away, and I loved your realism of where he banged against the acidic stomach walls then realizing that was a bad idea. And the casual burp of Sammy withouth a clue of what was going inside of him.

Reviewer: six006 Signed [Report This]
Date: April 14 2017 3:32 PM Title: Chapter 4

culdnt think it could get so much more... scatbulous meaning just hot, what a stewing ending lol, waiting for the next installment

Reviewer: gtsfan91 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 13 2017 8:18 PM Title: Chapter 4

after the vore and food tf, this even better. dirty plots are the best, scat and watersports is really a turn on, especially of the nice nature of the protagonist and how he has no clue of the things he does unwittingly

Reviewer: redcars Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 13 2017 5:09 AM Title: Chapter 4

keep up the great work! last chapter was stunning. maybe turn someone into a dogs ass hole, what if lucas had a dog, that would be so funns of lucas annoyed of taking his dog for a walk and be like come on do your business, typing on his phone holding the lash.

Reviewer: ILike Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 12 2017 10:03 AM Title: Chapter 4

wish i were given powers like that in school. was bullied a lot during school, that would have been fun. liked even more

Reviewer: adamnight Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 12 2017 7:35 AM Title: Chapter 4

The story continues in the same way as Bully for You, but goes beyond. For Bully for You was already one of my fav' stories of 2016 and now this one has good chances of becoming my 'THE best of 2017'. Bully for You had a bit of an unsatisfied ending and it was just the best decision starting this one, where the nuisances missing in Bully For You, this one does it better and became better over time, fast. Super last chapter.

Reviewer: mikeesan Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 12 2017 5:47 AM Title: Chapter 4

I didnt plan this becoming so long, but I just had to write on. And had to split it now into three parts.

I just cant describe to you how great this chapter was, and how much fun I fad reading it. Hope you had same as much fun writing it, and lots of more will follow in the same style. You just know how to do it write, and how to make Sammy react, speak, and the bullies around him. Everything is just so good already, I wouldnt need to give you any advise to improve.

I loved how Sammy was in this giggling state, like you would be after throwing up, and then felt better, and was just giggling but also really soon would fell in this dream state and sleepy.

I liked the part where Sammy whispered in falling asleep "I love you Lucas.", and Lucas just walked out of the room in the correct timing. I find the idea so much better, of Lucas not knowing that Sammy mostly was gay. Hope you wont change it in the plot. I find it way more appealing, if Lucas was straight. Also please dont kill Lucas off during the plot, I like him same as much as Sammy already.

The last third of the chapter starting... the dessert, in the form of "chocolate dessert". But before, the second best part of the whole plot (I have three favorite parts, the first mentioned above with the vomitting, now here the second, and the third coming up). Of how you killed Vince. It was the most degrading, humiliting, "meaningless" form imaginable. Making it so damn good. The idea of Vince dying because of a toxic foul fart was suddenly rocked into Sammys rectum, from the horrific depth of Sammys intestines. Filling it like a balloon, then *ppfff*ing it out of the slimy, hard closed wringled anus. Sammy totally blissfully unaware, feeling just good and rubbing himself into the blanket... where at the same time:

All those chose of words like "tunnel of death", the dark gurgles from digestion "defeated as he could only listen to Sammy digest whatever it was he ate last.", which was again such an ironic hint, because of the digested remains, now caked into turds, lurking around those dark tunnels, containing the digested remains of a banana, some M&Ms, chips a sandwich... and Chad.

"Vince felt a rumbling in the distance"... and then the pressure change, the foul fishy toxic gas inflating the "sack" aka Sammys rectum, and Vince literally being gased out in a gas chamber. Missed a bit of things like him vomitting his guts out, maybe even him pissing in the process , spastiically on the "floor", whimpering and screaming for his mommy, and as a contrast, Sammy just feeling good and falling sleeep again. What a way to go, I would love to see more like this in upcoming chapters.

And now the third best part, and I know I should come to an end. I will try my best :) I just love, love, love the idea of Vince becoming the iner layer skin of Sammys rectum. This is just such a damn humiliating and tortures idea. And how you did it...

Vince realizing at first he was "dead", thinking it was over and he could even have some fun of being a "ghost", and then how you made it so much worse, is just so good. How he was like "at least it's all over, it cant get any worse like this"... WRONG!

The idea of a silo sized turd, slowly..., "walking" over you, literally breaking and smearing your body into a thin film, was incredible. I cant think of a more nightmarish concept than this, actually I can ehe, more about it at the end of this. You thought of mostly everything agaon on here, like the mentioning of "solid/semi-solid" hinting that the turd had some soft creamy parts of course too.

One "bummer" though, I would love in upcoming chapters, that the transformed character doesnt lose his conscious, and would literally eternally suffer in "hell". Because of this being a fictional story, like an anime, the characters also wont get older if you dont write out, and they would "always" stay this age, and the characters meant to be suffer, suffering like in an eternal hell place, especially like here. I couldnt imagine some worse place, of becoming the inner skin of a boys rectum, meant to have turds "parked" on top of you every day, and then slowly slide over you, sliding over your "mouth", inside of it, the horrible foul fishy smell, and him "vomitting" everytime, screaming in his mind, and the boy outside, jsut casually taking a dump, withouth the slighest idea of the horrors his bodily functions were doing at that moment to a previous human being.

As a closer, I liked how you made Sammy feel a bit shy and uncomfortable actually using Lucas toilet gor a dump. I always felt the same way when I slept at a friends but also felt beter afterwards and just forgot about, literally the moment when flushed the "problems" away. I feel so connected with this story, it's insane. It's like you make the reader go through high school again, but with a nightmarish scifi twist. Making this story so great, and already unforgettable.

Coming to an end, I hope you liked my "little" review :) Hope to see the story continuing like this, and have lots of more future chapters. I would just LOVE more than anything to see maybe a teacher becoming Sammys or Lucas anus, which was actually the one thing I mentioned which would be even... worse. Of still being alive and feel a turd "vomitting" out of your mouth and throat from your "stomach", how it slowly was pressed over your tongue, your senses, and your mouth had no control anymore, just spastic moving in the contracts of the "owners" body.

Then the idea with some jocks turning into tiny half fly half human hybrids, like in the movie The Fly, fly body, fly size of course, but with their human heads still attached, and theym trying to get help from mostly Sammy and Lucas in school, maybe even following Sammy home, and meeting a horrific end of course, as a smear on a rolled up magazine, or even worse. It could also fit because of insect "blood" not being red but also be blueish sometimes, so it wouldnt even notcied by Sammy at all.

Then I had the idea, of someine turning into a few droplets of "water", maybe a chemistry project homework, in a test tube. Then Sammy accidentally let the rube drop or roll of his desk, the fluid dropping to the desk or floor. Shit! Looking around seeing no tissue to wipe the fluids off, Sammys notics a used boxershorts of his on the ground next to his bed, and used it to wipe off the tiny droplets, there no harm done! The poor liquid boy screaming, of ending in the worst place of the hew "home", in the inner back area of the boxers down where it would touch the asshole, when forming a wedgie. The next day Sammy would also wear this very boxers in a sleepy state stepping into them.

Another idea, there was a bicyclist day at school, of the sports period, making a bicyclist race. The could be a very dramatic and unfortunate event for one of the "cool", of course sport and cocky jocks, ending as a small portable toilet box, something like this: 
http://i.imgur.com/AKdlGhJ.png

Which were standing on tables during the race course together with drinks. So the kids wouldnt go into the wild and pollute the enviroment. And as worse as can it get, the cocky kid becoming one of those and used by Sammy, feeling even embarrassed to go "in the wild" and taking a dump. Filling the tube behind a closed curtain, plopping in the stained toilet paper, closing it, coming out, and throwing it in the next standing waste bin, happily feeling better, moving along on his bike.

Thank you for making my day with this chapter, I actually didnt expect so fast to see a new one. Hope you have a nice upcoming Easter time. Hope you liked my review as much as I loved this chapter. Youre my hero. Have a wonderful day!!!

Reviewer: mikeesan Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 12 2017 5:46 AM Title: Chapter 4

I just had to cut in half on here, fearing it could become too long and maybe wouldnt go through as a comment. Also making it mostly better to read. I am just in love so much with this plot, and hope I could give some something back as this review.

I just loved the idea of Vince shrinking to the size of an ant, and landing in the toilet, the drunk Sammy using it to take a leak. And you didnt just write it out in a "boring" way, you added punch after punch after punch. First, the humiliation of Vince landing in his own piss. Someone would have to rescue him... oh thx god someone is co... and then the ultimate humiliation... the one person Vince hated in this house right now, suddenly came into view, mostly distorted from down below, the image warped, from the eye point of view of a bug... Sammy, in his shorts, bunny tail, bunny ears, bunny mask... looking into the toilet, not seeing anything, and then.. nooo!! Moving his hand to the front of his pants, lowering them, and his underpants. I died at that point, it was just so good.

But before, things like "Vince chuckled to himself at how drunk the light weight must be." making it so much better, Vince not realized at that part what was about to happen, and laughing like a typical jock about some lower twink... until...

That would have been such a horrible view for Vince to suddenly look up to the boys in his underpants, and then, pulling them down too. And at this part Vince literally going white and in shock nonoNONONOOO- suddenly was hit in his face, with this acrid, yellow, foul, salty HOT liquid.

I just loved everything, of how you made Sammy literally "hit" Vince several times, in the face, when he got up from under water, screaming, getting again a foul mouth full, gagging feeling swallow after swallow going down his stomach, feeling sick... and then, being vacuumed literally to the epicentre, by the stream, like a sucking current, and HIT... the hard stream literalyl hitting him like a truck. I could see how this water stream msut be hard as a wall at this size and at this speed and from that high it fell down, this is what makes your work so good, because of how logic it is.

And from here... the chapter became unforgettable.

I dont really know where to start, there are so many things which I would love to talk about. Sorry sorry sorry, I guess I am so much alike Sammy :x

How you made Sammy speak, in that drunken, cute way, was INSANE and soo fitting, it was so mocking poor Vince, and plausible and just so great. Especially I noticed how you tried to chose the words, in a ironic double meaning, for example here: Sammy pouted, "Butt... it'z fun hear.", butt indeed...

I just love ironic double twists more than anything, and I hope to see this style used again in upcoming chapters.

You totally thought of everything, I had such a good laugh, when Sammy actually meant to get help, but had his shorts and underpants still down, and was walking like this to the bathroom door, Vince calling for him in the... last... WORST moment. I just love thise bad chose of events so much, because if Vince didnt have called after Sammy, nothing of the horrors followed after this would had happened. So indirectly, it was all Vinces own "fault".

I have to say I was a bit worried at first, because you made Sammy aware of Vince. But then again, you showed what an fantastic author you are, coming back with "plan b". And you SAVED the plat in so many ways, making it so much better. The whole idea of the mental blackout, and how it was triggered in the WORST TIMING. And it's sooo logic and plausible again, because those blackouts literally happen when you vomit, which fired and deleted your brains neurons. The body just going "nope", and sending the command to your guts to throw up, and your memory literally gets wiped in that time too. So it was literally the worst timing, for Vinc to shrink and to get noticed, because of Sammy throwing up, the whole thing "didnt happen" and Sammy had no memory of a ant sized Vince and plugging him in his ass. Fantastic...

How you made Vince suffer in this chapter is beyond anything, it's just the best scenario you came up with so far. Not just was he literally "pissed on", no, also pissed in his mouth, how he was also smeared in someones, a twink, a losers, ass.... and... worse was yet to come.

What I loved at this part, where Sammy accidentally let go of Vince and him hitting the surface of the counter top, hard. I just scream literally inside of me, how good this all is, and of how many things you tried to make this perfect. And then even better: Sammy looked hurt, "I'm sworry. You don't have to be sho mean..." ... Sammy even tried to apologize, totally mocking Vince in that perspective though, and instead of Vince getting some kind of "redemption" he would be "spit" and literally "shit" in his face, as a "reward", oh so good. I love these parts the most, it happened before in the other chapters, where Sammy apolizied, but then the shrunken/transformed guy wasnt spared, and got things made out even worse for them, and totally unaware to Sammy.

The play of words at this part is just incredbile, and I hope to see it again in upcoming chapters. And the best is, it was all just a funny joking event, and now it was "Sammys" time to laugh at the jock, without any knowledge though because of being so drunk.

The mirror part of Sammy spreading apart his ass with one hand, oh I loved it. And how he slapped his butt, and taunted the little "bug" in the other hand... "Wooks lik there's a new predator wround here."... so damn good. It was even so ironic, because of the lion costume of Vince, you literally thought of EVEERYTHING in this chapter.

The whole nightmarish concept is just so good, please, I hope it isnt the last ass plot, it's just so damn good <3 Especially what is following, I loved your other scat plots also before so much in your older stories.

Everything was so damn good, of where Vince head and neck nearly poped, because of the simple small pressure of a  single finger, pressing from behinds Vince head. So Sammy wouldnt heven have registered kil nearly popping Vince neck in the simple little pressure of his finger. Then where Vince thought Sammy was "finished" and him wanting to scream... things became just hell for him, and the plot became it's highest point.

What was also so good to think about it, was how Sammys anus would mostly be "glued" with this viscosity honey like ass glue, a mix of sweat and anal glands secretion, accelerated by the alcohol, the dancing, the humid air in the party rooms. I could just imagine what kind of hell it would have been for Vince, to get a mouthful of this "honey" into his his mouth. You could have written it out even a bit more, of him feeling bale coming up his throat, him trying to prevent to vomit. Maybe in another upcoming chapteR!!

I just LOVE how you switch positions between the characters, it's such a great writing style, and here comes actually the highlight of the chapter, at least to me, it's just incredible, because of the double irony:

"What Vince landed on was something he didn't want to think about as the odor from it reminded him where he was. Wondering what that was, he heard a muffled noise that sounded like someone throwing up..."

Oh my god! Most readers wouldnt notice the double irony on this part mostly but it'S just insane. Imagine Vince falling face first, into those disgusting smelly filth on the "floor", and him opening his eyes in a shock, his shaking fingers goign to his mouth, trying not to vomit... sh-sh-shh him shking, wha where am - wha- *gag* is *gag* this- and then, PENG, like someone was answering him *throwing up* of Sammy outside. AAAAAAHHH! THIS IS THE BEST PART!! Imagine Vince getting a mouthful of shit in his mouth and someone was standing next to him watching it, and the other person vomitting because of what he saw, mocking, taunting, laughing at Vince indirectly, without even meaning to... THIS IS THE BEST PART!!!!

Reviewer: mikeesan Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 12 2017 5:44 AM Title: Chapter 4

Ok, I don t know where to start ... a second chapter out so fast? That took me so by surprise, what a great surprise... first, this is the best chapter of them all. Chapter 3 was already on such a high level, but this even topped it.

Longest chapter of them, 3 was already great, I love longer chapters, and you put so much details and love into this, it's IN-SANE!!! I hope I can review about everything which came to me while reading this epic chapter, hope I dont miss anything out, so lets start!

The intro was again really good again, same as in chapter 3 with Sammy waking up with a bit wet underpants. Here, with his mom had bought a package of peanut M&Ms and Sammy froze for a moment, this was a good laugh already. I just love so much, how you developed this story, of things "going wrong" leading to Sammy forget things, think of them as dreams, and in this chapter, you put a new epic one out, more to it later. Please continue in this style, it's soo much better Sammy not being aware about the changes happening around him.

I just love the unfair aspect of it so much, 'Shrugging it off Sammy forgot all about the M&M's and went about his day.', where the remains of Chad and the food which was eatin with him were at this moment mostly in the lower end part of Sammys small intestine, being entering his large intestine mostly. And Sammy literally "didnt give a shit", or will he? ehehe, no, worse, he was totally unaware about the horrors he put those people through. And you make it even better, because of Sammy being such a nice, twink, "gay" character, always polite, smiling, and being literally the "loser" of the school, skinny, no muscles. More about this a bit later.

I have to sum up faster, just talked about the intro, and the story didnt even start and I hve already said a lot. See this is the reason why I am so on love with this, because you put so much details into your work and in between the lines, it's just insane. This story is now already one of the best I ever read on here, especially chapter 3 and 4 added to that.

The idea of the party being a costume party, fantastic... and how the fun part of the chapter begins, and it was... was, so much better than I imagined everything in my mind, which could have happened. I actually thought a lot since chapter 3, what would happen at that party. But you wrote it out so much better, than everything I thought of.

Sammy going as a bunny, AAAAH, epic!! You rock man, bunny ears and tail, I have it so vivid in my mind, fitting so perfectly with the character Sammy in a whole. And also the makeup, whiskers and a bunny nose, I just loved that ideas so much... I could see him actually like this:

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but with skinny fitting shorts, would make such a hot outfit.

And then you did it so much better of what I had in mind. I already knew something like this would happen, of the boys at the party, the owner of the house, all those sports dudes, straight of course, all now best buddies with Lucas, and them would never had invited such a loser like Sammy to their cool high school party. And now... Vince opening the door, and... PHAHA! Looking down on this bunny boy. Such a great part.

The best was how Sammy wasnt totally not realizsing before or it didnt came to his mind, this could be a bad idea. It's so realistic, because of he had all butterflies in his tummy because of Lucas invited him, and I actually did something like this before, where I just thought in one direction, not seeing other possibilities.

Best part to this point: "The only way your getting into this party is if you and me, go over there," Vince said pointing toward some bushes. "And I pull my pants down and you suck me off. Then maybe, and just maybe, I'll think about it."

What a fantastic idea!! I never even thought of this, but it fits so perfectly. I love humiliating parts like this so much, and it fits so great. Could see straight teenagers like this actually tell "fags" to suck them off, and make a fun out of it, or even worse, even go through with it. How horrific Sammy must felt at that point, and everything what happened later in the chapters is such a perfect backfire at Vince. This chapter is just so amazing in so many levels, it's just insane...

Loved how Lucas stood for his friend, for a second I was a bit afraid of them leaving, and the party plot was canceled, but you, as before so many times, came to the rescue with a "plan b" and saved the moment. I think I hvent said this before, but you have this fantastic talent, of making surprise parts. Your plot is so interesting, and not just going into one line, always going path a, path a, path a, like so many bad authors do on this site. You have just a damn high level of details, character depth, and intelligent plot. You could be an author selling your stuff.

I was so glad at this point, literally screaming into my computer screen, YES! So glad you made them enter the house, and the party would get started. And then totally such a great idea, of the boys cheering up Lucas, literally leading them away from Sammy, having lost sight of where the boys went, and then Vince kicking Sammy, landing on his bunny butt, and how he felt hurt Lucas didnt notice, but just "swallowed" it. I also loved how it was literally eating on Vince, that this fag and loser was allowed into his home. This would make everything so much even better of what would happen afterwards. It's not just unfair, it's truly mean, of Sammy being such a nice character totally unaware of the horrors of those bullies, who though just deserved everything of it.

You have this great talent of not "just" making one point, no, you do several, and this is the difference in this story to others, making it a 10 out of 10. Here, it is literally a hit in Vinces face, because it was his home where the party happened, and then he ended as this bunny boys .. rectum in the end of this plot, LOL. I am literally dying the whole review already coming to this point.

I try to move fast forward a bit, because of this became already a bit long. The idea of Sammy betting drunk was a perfect twist, and perfect idea. Because of the "mental blackout" later in the plot, adding to the continuous unaware aspect of the plot.

How you made Sammy speak and react, because he mostly never were drunk before in his high school years, was just amazing. It literally reminded me on myself, when I had my first high school party, and it was sooo damn ironic, because mostly everything in this plot happened to me too. Not the shrinking part of course hahaha. But I also got so drunk that I had to throw up, and then waking up the nest day, I didnt remember much anymore from the night before. But I also remember I spoke in such same silly ways like you made Sammy speak, and it was so cute, and fitting at the same time... and, so humiliating and cruel towards Vince.

And making it again follow logic after logic, after drinking so much at a party, it's obvious the teens using the bathroom a lot. Just loved the idea of Sammy not wanting to stand in the line, mostly because of being so drunk, searching for a 2nd toilet in the house... the home, of Vince, who, of course would use his own, private toilet too upstairs. FANTASTIC idea of where the transformation / shrinking happened.

And from here, the plot became god like. It was honestly one of the most thrilling and hot plots I read before on here. I always loved your more cruel tf plots in the past, but this is just a master peice, and I hope this story will have lots more in this same style. Please dont end this story too soon, there are so many things coming to my mind, having lots of future chapters. Also hope you wont "ruin" the story of boring "sex" between Sammy + a girl, that wouldnt really fit in the flow of this story, and there are enough others on this site. This story is literally like a sarcastic, dark ironic Halloween story, like Tales from the crypt or the Goosebumps books, and I always wished to read a story like this. Youre truly my hero and my favorite author.

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