Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: January 24 2019 3:22 PM Title: Chapter 36

My goodness, Shrinker 82. You have certainly improved as a writer since you started this story and the biggest difference is how much detail you add to each chapter in addition to the actual plot.

When Chris was outside, you mentioned that he looked up at the sky, thankful that there was no rain. That is a very good point, and the average writer wouldn’t mention such a detail that could deeply affect the story. Rain for tiny Chris would be deadly, especially at this size.

I also, love the “Bug’s life” movie reference with the bird and the beetle. In Bug’s life, the bird saves the day and in this story, the bird saves Chris’s life as well. I loved that movie, and I’m glad you mentioned that.

This chapter felt much longer than usual, and I noticed you put that in your chapter notes, so I’m excited that this just the first part of 2. I’m a big fan of authors who post long chapters, so that way I don’t just breeze though them. And since I really enjoy your story, I want to read more.

I think this is the most we saw of Sue Ann in the whole story, haha. I wonder what she was thinking as she left Rachel at the park. I doubt any giantess ideas came to her head, because in reality, the thought of someone shrinking seems comical.

Glad we also got to see Mrs. Carson get some dialogue as well. I love how you described her. A busy mom with lots of work, and sounds like she is in need of a stress reliever, and I think I know who (not what) would be the best solution.

When you mentioned that she sent Rachel out to the park, I thought Chris would just wander inside their house while Mrs. Carson was home alone. Perfect time to give her company. But then again, I would be getting ahead of my self.

In addition, I like how you had Mrs. Carson tell Rachel to go find a boy to play with. I feel like most mothers would be more cautious to just let her teenage daughter go out to find a boy, but I get the sense that Mrs. Carson isn’t your typical mother and she would love to see Rachel bring home a young teen boy so Mrs. Carson could teach him some manners before letting him hang out with her daughter. Something tells me that Mrs. Carson wants a young man to fool with. Haha. She gives me a naughty vibe, I love it!

One other thing I noticed was that Shannon mentioned that the potion will start wearing off around Friday, which is also the same day that Rachel and her mom plan on going to the movies. It can’t be simply a coincidence that Friday was mentioned twice in this chapter, right? Lol. I think I see some foreshadowing going on.

Whew! Story wise, I love how so much happened in this chapter. Lots to talk about and with so many characters. Can’t wait for the weekend chapter update!

Author's Response: Thank you so much, TomSpeedy! I was really worried the readers wouldn’t like this chapter due to the lack of any juicy encounters, but it seems to have gotten several positive reviews, so I won’t be so apprehensive if I do any more like this.
As I said way back when I started, Sue Ann is going to start having a much larger roll in the latter half of the story, as well as Rachel. Mrs. Carson will also play a role. There is a very specific way that the events of this story are going to unfold, but remember, if the story doesn’t quite go in the direction you’re expecting, there’s always the alternative story arcs. Heck, even I didn’t expect the story to go the way it’s going; it just sort of evolved over time.
I will say that you’re right about one thing: there was some foreshadowing in this chapter but that’s all I’ll say for now. This story has evolved to something much larger than anything I had originally imagined. What started as a simple outlet has become so much more. This definitely won’t be the last of my stories!

Reviewer: Sheograth Signed [Report This]
Date: January 23 2019 6:30 PM Title: Chapter 36

Great chapter!

I liked all of the different concurrent plot developments. But I really hope that Shannon gets what's coming by the time this is over. I guess I just really dislike her, or at least how she treats Chris, since the problems are almost always caused by her even if she still tries to blame him.

But I'm sure you're intending to write her that way, so you're doing a good job.

Hopefully Sue Ann actually manages to save Chris.

Keep up the great work!

Author's Response: Thanks! As I said previously, part II of this story is going to have more chapters like this, but there will be plenty of time focusing on Chris’s predicaments as the story progresses. This is also the point when you start seeing Shannon’s true colors, as well as the effects she has on other characters besides Chris.
I know that everyone just loves getting to the good stuff with stories like this, but I really like to set up and develop my plots, and sometimes it takes longer than expected; it’s just how I write. I like details in my stories, and I think it makes for a better and more realistic reading experience.