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Reviewer: ShrinkJoe Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 06 2019 8:58 AM Title: Chapter 49

Personally, I like all the unaware stuff, it's why I keep coming back to the story. Not that I discourage being aware at all either, but you write unaware scenarios so wonderfully. However, I do understand what the people want lol Good story so far, can't wait to read more.



Author's Response: Well, thank you for you kind words and for keeping with it. Unaware scenarios are probably my favorite interaction, and most likely all of my stories will involve it to some capacity. I just need to remember to write for my audience.

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: August 06 2019 12:56 AM Title: Chapter 49

Whoa! I can’t believe I missed your reference to my suggestion! You gave me a hint, and I completely overlooked it! I’m so glad you mentioned rereading the Mrs. Carson parts.

So I was reading the parts of Mrs. Carson this chapter and I didn’t notice anything while she was taking out the recycling. However, later in the chapter when Rachel finally came home, I just now realized that Mrs. Carson was sitting in her “favorite chair” in the living room!

Not only that, but she was reading a romantic novel which I can only assume was turning her on in that chair while wearing that nightgown. Imagine if she was reading a book about a sexy giantess playing with a little guy. I’m getting excited as if I’m unraveling a mystery.

Chris is with Sue Ann now, but after reading that scene again with Mrs. Carson, I kinda want Chris back in Rachel’s house again. Haha. I’m just imagining Chris finding that chair, most likely the butt imprint still visible on the seat with a wet spot in the middle. Whew! I’m getting flashbacks to that suggestion now.

Thank you so much for pointing that out to me! I try to mention everything in each chapter that stood out, but for some reason, that moment didn’t click in my head.

Now I’m super excited for what you have planned for Mrs. Carson next chapter!

Author's Response: I’m glad you skimmed the chapter again. Just pay attention to Mrs. Carson and what she does and says in the next chapter. I hope all will come to fruition by Labor Day. Until then, stay tuned. 😉

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 05 2019 9:59 PM Title: Chapter 49

Well, well we’ll. Another chapter, another person that Chris has a chance to get intimate with. I will say, Sue Ann is someone that I have been hoping Chris gets to be with for a while now. However, I kinda forgot how she looked and such. I’m aware that Chris likes her, but I kinda forgot her age, body and demeanor.

Hold up, so Chris just bounced out of that trash bag? I thought Rachel tied it up tight last chapter. Perhaps Chris was so tiny, that he got through the opening? I’m not sure. But knowing Chris and his “lucky bounces” he tends to escape situations and get stuck into other problems often.

Love the drawstring aspect when Chris was hanging on to Rachel’s pjs and bouncing onto her crotch. I wished that was Janet in her nightgown instead that Chris was bouncing off, but we know Chris has an eye for Rachel.

So Sue Ann is back. I remember when the only girls were just her and Shannon. Back then, Sue Ann was easily my favorite giantess. Now.... not so much. I mean, there are plenty of good options here. We got Noreen who has a gym body, then Janet who is a sexy milf, and then Sue Ann who is the hot baby sitter. I’m a big fan of all 3, but I’m not really sure who is my favorite. I haven’t seen any of these ladies actually talk to the tiny Chris, so it’s hard to say. It’s all about personality at this point and with the story mostly unaware, that’s hard to decide. Maybe since Sue Ann seems to be alone in her own house, she might be able to be the first one besides Shannon to be aware of Chris and then she can keep it all a secret from everyone including Rachel, her new spy buddy.

But back to this chapter. So Sue Ann is stalking Shannon, but since Shannon isn’t really doing much other than planning Chris’s capture, I doubt Sue Ann will gain any intel. Rachel won’t either since she won’t see anything while Shannon is inside and is even “banned” from Chris’s house.

Hmm. Shannon has a tracker on Chris.... doesn’t she? So did she track Chris traveling from Rachel’s house to Sue Ann’s?!!! Now that would be crazy! Battle of the babysitters!

So there could be a few ways things can go down where I can predict. I could see Chris remains unaware, Shannon shows up, demands Sue to tell her where is Chris, Sue Ann is confused and thinks Shannon has him, Shannon then could realize that Sue Ann is telling the truth and waits for Sue Ann to leave the house, or Shannon explains that she can track Chris and accuses Sue Ann for kidnapping.

I’m sure there are other ways it could play out which I can’t think of at the moment, but those would be my best guesses.

So Sue Ann tells Rachel about her plan and then initially refused to let Rachel help her. Lol. What’s the point of telling Rachel everything when you don’t want her involved? Of course Rachel will be interested after hearing her plan. That sequence could be re-worded in my opinion. I liked how Sue Ann finally lets Rachel join on with her plan. Basically a spy for Sue Ann. Nice!

When Rachel crushed that “bug”, cmon, we all knew that wasn’t Chris. Lol. You still didn’t make him grow did you? He has been the same minuscule speck that has been carried like a bee carrying pollen. Would love to see Chris grow to that “bug” size.

Chris then winds up inside Sue Ann’a car, alone with his sexy babysitter. The whole journey where Chris tries to get to Sue Ann in the car was unnecessary in my opinion. We could just have Rachel swipe Chris off, and he lands at Sue Ann’s feet by the pedals. While I do like Chris’s adventures, reading about him walking around a car isn’t really that sexy compared to Chris trying to climb the leg of a giantess. I appreciate the details of the layout of the car, but I would rather have Chris gaze at Sue Ann and describe the layout of her figure, if you know what I mean. ;)

One small detail I liked which was random was when Rachel told her mom that she going to get dressed and Janet said “hunh” in response. I really could picture it. I think it’s more of a “huh” but I guess it doesn’t matter. Point is, I really felt that scene play out in my head.

So Chris’s next adventure is now with Sue Ann. I remember when Chris was with Noreen and Shannon came back looking for him. If Shannon doesn’t track him right away, no one will look for Chris leaving Sue Ann to toy with Chris herself. Now that would be fun. The fact that Sue Ann earlier said she wasn’t brave enough to stomp on a bug barefoot is clearly foreshadowing when Chris becomes big enough to be a bug sized human at the feet of Sue Ann. While I’m not exactly the biggest feet fan, I’m really excited for Chris growing to this bug size that is referred to a lot in this chapter.

I can’t help but agree somewhat of what the other reviews are saying. There is a lot of Chris doing random stuff with the environment, but not much action with the giantesses which I believe is what most people want to see and read about.

During the Shannon chapters, Shannon was constantly humiliating Chris and playing with him and never letting him out of her sight. You know I’m not the biggest fan of Shannon, but the stuff she did was way more entertaining than Chris climbing through grass, interacting with a dog, getting stuck in a drain, and then ending up in a trash bag. We could replace that with climbing through public hair, interacting with Janet, getting stuck in her panties, and then getting stuck in Rachel’s boobs. While some of that stuff I mentioned happened, it feels like Chris spent more time with the environment rather than actual people these last few chapters. (For example, when Chris was exploring Sue Ann’s car.)

So the story is going longer that we expected, right? So let’s have some chapters where a giantess interacts with the tiny consistently at his current size to make it entertaining. I’m sure most people read this wanting to feel turned on rather than actually knowing the story. Yes, the story is important, but the sexy stuff is what sells and makes people go “wow! That was hot!” Even I had a feeling like that here and there in this story. Last one was when Janet used Chris on her dildo. Seriously, that was amazing!

I can see you like to keep Chris at this small size still. It’s hard for me to think of how a giantess can interact with a tiny at this size which is usually why I like them bigger. However, if you do intend on keeping Chris this small for a few more chapters at least, then maybe we could get some sexy Sue Ann body exploration scenes or something. At that size, she must be a goddess to him.

In addition, I see you also want to keep it unaware. This doesn’t have to result in Chris being on the floor calling for help all the time. (Chris has called for help way too many times recently. Lol.) Chris could somehow wind up on Sue Ann’s person and she won’t even notice due to his size. If you make Sue Ann aware of him, we could get some sexy dialogue back. One thing I loved about the Shannon scenes were when she was telling Chris what she will do to him for punishment, when he escapes and so on. If Sue Ann could pull something like that, then that would be new and sexy. I imagine her to be the more gentle giantess, but since we are just meeting her officially, you could make her have any personally you want.

While others are requesting for more story progress, I think it’s more of them wanting you to get to the sexy parts as soon as possible. Last sexy scene was the Janet scene and that felt like a while ago. (Months ago). It’s like watching porn, but you just see the foreplay, and then the next upload is more foreplay and so on. Most stories that I favorite on this site are usually ones that have a chapter that I find irresistibly sexy. There has been 2 chapters in this story like that for me, but they happened a while back ago.

The last big story progression moment was Shannon inviting her ex, shrinking him down, and getting more of the shrinking potion. This was just one chapter. It was new, exciting, and strangely a turn on to know that there is a potion to keep Chris small forever. I loved this chapter and that chapter wasn’t even a sexy one! Now imagine a sexy chapter that happens to be that deep. You have the potential, I just think you need more erotic chapters with that level of detail.

Right now Chris is in the lovely home of a sexy babysitter that he has a crush on. Take advantage of this and create a sexy chapter for us to enjoy. No need for another “climbing to get attention” chapter. Let’s change it up a bit and go full throttle with Chris at the mercy of this hot woman. Chris, could grow a bit, Sue Ann could be aware of him. These are just two factors that could make this chapter and the next few chapters even better.

I really like this story. Right now it’s around an 8.5/10 for me. However, you could bring back that spark that this story started off with by adding a surprise sexy chapter next time. It’s clear you are slowing down the story to add more details, so why not add another sexual encounter with another sexy giantess. It doesn’t have to advance the plot, but I’m sure others wouldn’t mind some erotic action.

So my tip is to have something sexual that readers can look forward to. Chris traveling from a trash bag to Sue Ann’s car isn’t that much to enjoy. Its a great setup if Sue Ann’s house is some sort of sex dungeon. Actually....that’s not a bad idea. Just have Sue Ann accidentally carry Chris down to her basement and we get Chris’s reaction to see her dungeon. There could be all sorts of tools, chains, locks and kinky items there that could make Chris’s innocent eyes go wide. It doesn’t change the plot much, but it would be hilariously entertaining. Its random, but hot. It might give the readers the idea that Sue Ann is a freak in the sheets which makes Sue Ann finding Chris a much more exciting moment.

Sue Ann is basically a new character. I may have mentioned this before. (Wow, this review is long, but I love discussing this story!) Since we don’t know much about her, you can make her character any way you want. To me, sexier the better.

I hope Chris gets some action next chapter. I swear, if he is on the floor by her shoes calling for help... (sigh)... well, I might have a chuckle, but it would be another redundant theme in this story.

Your plot twists are great, especially that Shannon scene where she shrinks her former boyfriend. (I keep praising that scene.) Now let’s combine a plot twist like that with Sue Ann. Let’s say Sue Ann is actually the current girlfriend of the guy that Shannon shrank. Sue Ann knows that her boyfriend gave Shannon some of the shrinking potion and is actually spying on Shannon, not just for Chris, but also on her boyfriend to see what happens. Meanwhile, at her house, Sue Ann actually has her own share of the potion and used it on some unfortunate guys that she met. She explains how some of those guys harassed her and she shrank them to be her slaves/pets and keeps them locked/tied up. Chris grows to (let’s say) and inch and he discovers some of these shrunken guys all tied up. They are all shrunken like him, but they are a double his height, about 2 inches each. He talks to them and they beg him to free them. Chris gets scared and backs up and spots a boy around his age on a separate table. The boy, also tied up, begs Chris to free him. Chris listens to the boy’s story as he explains how his friends made a bet with him to spank Sue Ann’s ass. He did it, and immediately, she tugged him by the ear around the corner of the next building where none of his friends could see. By the time his friends came around the corner, all they saw was Sue Ann. The shrunken boy, stuck in Sue Ann’s cleavage called for help when his friends showed up. However, his friends got scared when they saw their friend missing and didn’t even attempt a rescue or even ask Sue Ann about him. Chris feels sorry and decides to free him. The boy gets free and thanks Chris. Chris smiles, but then screams as the boy tackles Chris and ties him up. Chris was no match to the boy who was twice as big as him. Chris was tied up and left exactly where the boy was originally and yelled at the boy to untie him. The boy left the table, leaving Chris alone with his thoughts. That’s when Sue Ann’s footsteps made their way into the basement. She glances at the two tables of men and smiles, glad that none escaped. From her perspective, an inch difference isn’t much to Sue Ann and Chris knew it when she walked over to him with a grin on her face.

I don’t know about you guys, but I got excited from that little tale I just wrote. I guess I have a new tip for you. Write something that turns you on, and it probably will turn us on. (Ok, that sounds weird, but you get my drift.)

I can’t wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response: First and foremost, I want to say how much I appreciate all your reviews, suggestions, and feedback over the course of this story. If I’ve never said it before, it’s YOUR reviews that I’m always on the lookout for whenever I post new stories/chapters. I’m taking your latest suggestions to heart and will definitely keep them in mind in future stories and chapters, and I didn’t realize how long it had been since something juicy happened. Hm, I might have some adjustments to make in the next chapter.

Now, as far as Sue Ann goes, she’s more of a kind, gentle giantess type. I don’t see her character as being cruel to Chris if she should find him at this or any small size. Rachel, being a teenager, might find the situation somewhat amusing, but ultimately, she really cares about Chris wouldn’t do anything to purposefully hurt him. I actually think the alternate chapter I posted with Rachel gives a pretty accurate description of her character and demeanor. I really wish I wouldn’t have had to split up the last chapter with the next, there’s so much coming! But I won’t spoil it. I think you’ll be very happy with how it ends, so keep checking back. As always, thanks for reading!

Reviewer: Mr in A suit Signed [Report This]
Date: August 05 2019 6:59 PM Title: Chapter 49

All right... I like your writing and how you discribe the scenes and Chris perils a lot. But, I am not gonna lie, it's very frustrating that after months of waiting, he just waltz out of the Carlsons house without being noticed when everything worked in that direction - the dog and Rachel dreams. Chris was noticed before and with less than half the effort we saw in this arc. Moreover, even if he gets noticed now by Su Ann, it will not be the same, because I (and probably others) have waited in suspence for the characters to grow (no pun intended kkkkk) as to move the plot and that didn't happen. This chapter was anti-climatic.

That said, in past comments you pointed the importance of Rachel and her mother for the plot as well as Chris development. So, I will trust you know where the story is going.

Do you think the story will end this year? Please, don't get demotivated. Keep up the good work and thank you for all the effort you put in describing the scenes.



Author's Response: I know things are getting long in the tooth, and I do apologize for that. I guess I just had so many encounters that I wanted to put into this story, that I sacrificed the plot to do so. This project has been a learning experience in many ways, and moving forward, my stories won’t be written like this anymore: I prefer to have the main character be noticed at least a good portion of the time. I think the biggest problem now is having so little time to write over the past several months, but I’m back to writing a bit more often now.

As far as the story goes, this chapter was supposed to be a major turning point in the story, but it got to be so long that I felt I had to break it up. I’m getting SO close to the end that I hope the number of chapters left is limited, but we have just a little further to go. Thanks for reading, and check back at the end of the week for more.

Reviewer: iambeowulf Signed [Report This]
Date: August 05 2019 10:36 AM Title: Chapter 49

Can we PLEASE have Chris discovered already? This is dragging on forever!



Author's Response: Yes, I’m well aware. As I’ve stated on other responses, I wasn’t expecting this story to be so long, and my outline has been finished for some time now; deviating too much from it would’ve extended this story potentially indefinitely. From the feedback I’ve received, I’ve decided that this will be the last story of this length that I write like this, where the main character remains undiscovered for the majority of the story. I’m still going to post/publish stories, however, but try to leave myself more open to changes if needed. I can assure you that I’m approaching the end of the story, and I really want to get it finished and move on to other projects.

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