So happy you wrote back :) I totally understand about the commission and time. And I wont wind, you just add to this story, and some when in the future, you can accept a commission maybe. Maybe you can set up a second email on gmail or something, you can out on your profile, so I could mail you. That way you dont need to publish your mail email if you dont want that.

I have to say I forgot to mention so many epic parts, for example this one:

"Sorry," Ashely whispered through his fingers as he covered his face. If Ashely survived this ordeal he would have to apologize to her. This was so unforgivable... using Clair's bathroom like this... how disgusting.

This is so fucking ironic. Because you first think, huh, what? Apologize to her? And you think Ashely means Tory ... but then, it gets clear, he means Clair, of trashing her toilet like this, and then I had to laugh so hard, you have to idea. This is soo PERFECT and EPIC and I love your little ironic details like this so much. Think about how MEAN it is... he is not thinking to apologite to the girl under him, no, hes literally killing her right now, did already that random guy, and now hes like holding his hands in front of his face and maybe even got a bit red, and feels emberrassed... of USING HER TOILET. Omfg... this is PERFECT. Mostly the most ironic part of the chapter, and some readers may not even notice it.

I just love how Ashely doesnt give a shit literally, about all these random people he kills. It is so perfect, how he got the idea of using a shrunk person to unblock his poop blockage... lol. And how he not even thought, the girl would survive, when she came out, so the "agreement" was already absolote to him, to "set her free", and I just fucking love this cruel word play. He never agreed to grow her back, he just said set free.

I am not sure if I saw some little mistakes, I think I saw some here and there, where using the word she or you flipped Ashley for Clair or Tori, maybe I am just wrong and I misread that.

If you continue like THIS, then the story becomes like a master art work. IT is already your best you ever wrote. And let me say, mostly the best transformation story I ever read on the web. And I hope you stick to dark cruel transformation. I like shrinking, but TF is just even more cruel and amazing. Especially for these SAW like games, with the fly? Maybe you can do another one with a FLY or cockroach.

But I would love most seeing more ass and scat work, they are just the most horrific, you mostly can do to a person. Turning someone into Phils or Ashely anus for example, and Ashely loses ability to talk or hear that person, maybe my accident and hes not even aware, or it is some dark twisted play, like with the fly.

Then a flish light of course would be horrible, and then even maybe using it again in a later chapter, of it becoming a toilet vessel, because the dorm one is cloaked, and it is used to take a shit into and throw it away afterwards, it was just a made in china flesh light, right, just $10 maybe ? You can always buy a new one.. right? Right?

Ending as a cum stain or IN one, shrunk to micrsocopic size or the size of a flea or dust mite... and the cum stain crystalizses... on someones boxershorts or bed cover.

Ending as a M&m and eaten inside a box of hundreds real M&m. Or ending as fish food, fed to one of the dorm mades fish pet, maybe ended as a grub inside a Jar with the words "fish food" on it, and watching the boys talk from inside, and one is like hey can I feed your fish, sure.

Ending as a condom. The escort mind control and giving blow jobs. Ending as a fart. More bugs tf, like another fly, cockroack, ant, lost in one of the dirty teenagers dorm rooms.

Another toilet concept, where is directly shit in someones "mouth", like this flesh light idea, or into some cup or bottle, because they are maybe on a biking day of the college and one had to take a shit outside.

I would love that escort mind control one, also another bug one, maybe fly or baby cockroach.

I have to protest and say though, it wont be another thing. I honestly had hoped you would do a real scat plot but this isnt appealing so far to me. So it wont be a reverse. I would honestly wish for this flesh light plus using it to take a shit into the most.

As commission, it would mean the world to me though. Because honestly, youre the only author I ever met, who could write out some ideas of mine I have like over 10 years, andnever found a good author for them.


This is also the best chpter of length btw and you made my weekend so much better with this, I read it now 3 times and just love it.

I was so hoping and hoping for you maybe get some time to write a new chapter after you wrote back that other day, that youre thinking of a good plot. And what you came up with is outstanding. It is the best chapter of them all I must say. The length, the plot twist, everything is just exctasy. I noticed most all the little ironic word plays you used, and I just loved the ending idea, with Ashely using that specific toilet. And his play with it:

"Oh don't worry. You can clean that bathroom when you feel better. It's the least you can do," Clair said. Ashely laughed, "Deal." Ashely laid down on the coach with his head in Clair's lap. "You know, he sure can take a beating."Clair frowned, "He?""The toilet," Ashely clarified what he was talking about."Oh," Clair said and now realized what he was talking about. "Ewwww, that's disgusting." Ashely couldn't help but laugh at her reaction. "Just next time you need to use him, bring some air spray. I could smell it from out here, I can't imagine what he just had to go through."

"He"... that was already such a classic in the other chapter. I just love that so much. And how ashely gets turned on by these games. I just loved the fruit and fibre eating so much and I was already at that part like, omg, what is happening, what will happen.

The dark foul play was obviously epic, of "LET ME OUT! YOU PROMISED!" and the "Welp, you're free," he told Tory and the answer he got... The only answer she got was the pucker above the opening and a disgusting sound.

The total best of the chapter was this cruel talk of him like with that fly transformation. I just loved how he was oh I need your held, thats all. And how dry he told her about what was about to happen. The countdown and everything...

The drunk state with the shorter SHORTER SHORTER was also so great.

There are two things I didn't like that much about the chapter, but that's just a personal thing. First the shrinking size was way too big for me, 4 inches, I just enjoy smaller sizes actually, around ant size or even smaller. Then I would liked it way more if the woman had been a jock or guy actually. But other from that... a 10 outof 10.

You stayed up with the cruel twists, the irony, the sarcastic talk of Ashely, please continue likt his. And the foul use of horror, I bite literaly my nails reading the first half of the story, wondering what was about to happen. All the vomiting gaging, screaming, the torture of the woman in his rectum was epic.

I would wish more than anything if you could use my plot ideas maybe for upcoming chapters. I totally want to see more scat, because it is the best. Turning someone into an anus, fleshlight, and also using the fleshlight as a toilet, filling it to irbs brim with creamy shit, then throwing it away, would be so dark and horrific, it would be epic. I want to see Ashely take a shit into someone's mouth somehow to be honest, a toilet is somehow not mean enough, because of how big it is, taking a shit into someone's mouth pressed against an anus would be 1000 times worse. Ending as a cum stain on Ashely bed cover, becoming a boxer short and the inner back area of the crack, another fly or bug transformation may be a little cockroach, and Ashely making a game again out of it getting to get help from the unaware dorm members. I love the idea the most though someone becomes Ashelys or Phils anus, and would lose his mind going through his first experience as an anus... and a large creamy turd would snake out of his throat, and he screams like in hell, of the turd mabe evn containing popcorn kernels, slowly sliding over his "tongue" and he smells and tastes everything, and how he would gag out a fart, with a horrible taste, and his whimper and maybe even call for his mommy t some point, and how his lips would cut off the turd in half, then it comes out again.

I like transformation way more than shrinking, still I enjoy shrinking too from time to time. Thiugh mostly just very small sizes.

I liked the chapters a lot where Ashely gets drunk and forgets what he did, thats just perfect. It could lead to some chapters, where he maybe turned some guy into his anus, and isnt aware about it, that would be so ironic. Or turned a guy into a bug or fly, and isnt aware about it, and this fly or bug was present the next day in the dorm.

And what my general idea about this story is? Youre kidding right. I cant wait to a new chaptet to arrive. More than any other story. And I hope to see lots of more chapters to come. Lots of more. There are so many cruel transformation ideas I could think of. And this character is just the best of yours, I just love Ashely.

Thanks for this chapter. Thank you for writing :]

Write back I would love to get a feedback. And if you ever would write a commission story, I would wish that so much. Leave your email maybe or say how I could reach you, that would be epic.

I forgot to review the last but I had read it when it came out and it was just perfect. What a cruel way of TF would like more of it. I also like the idea of some boy or man has to give BJ so cruel and amazing, would like to see it again and the not aware of the boys makes it so much better.

Yes, just yes. Best chapter so far. I already liked the fly and toilet one, and this now too. I have to say I like transform plots way more, but I still love this chapter. I am a true assman, and I hope to see way more scat topics. It is just too perfect with Ashelys cruelness and how he literally doesnt give a shit, and mixes even deaths up by accident. Maybe you can do one where he is totally unaware he transformed someone, that would be ironic and so kinky, And isnt able to understand him to speak, may be become his anus, or another fly, and he has no idea this was a boy before. The story is going amazing so far. I also like drunk or party plots a lot, just dorm room plots in general.

So happy you wrote back, you have no idea! I would honestly love more than anything to see these ideas I talked about as chapters, there are so many ideas to write for hot chapters. I think I asked this before but would you maybe do a story commission for me maybe by time? We could maybe talk via email if you want, how could I reach you? I cant wait for the next chapters honestly.

the best chapter so far. cant wait for more. what a story... one of the best I ever read. I enjoy blow jobs and scat plots the most.

I love how Ashely threats his playthings, I really do XD, he is so creative with them, and if we think on that a few moments, he also turn them into quite useful things (in that way they should be quite grateful with him XP)… for ideas, I imagine he can use some rude dude as his sexy underwear XD, or a couple of those as some cute pair of socks, or turning someone into a toering for Clair… but of course, Ashely seems to have more preference for more disposable things, so tampons or false nails could be a good fate for some guys (perhaps an entire gang of dudes XP)

New again highest enjoable, I like dirty plots the most, and this was totally to my taste. The guy becoming just a blow job and fuck toy for these teens, wow I love this. Would like more in this direction. I did not see any mistakes at all. Time to get ffffffffoooooked, eeeh he, I enjoy how you make them talk and the other boys, I like high school and college plots the most. I love this story. I can see it have a lot more chapters there is no need to end it any time soon, I am just in love with it. And it was not too long too I think, really good.

also liked chapter 4   alot, especialy because of the ironic vore and how he made the fly suffer for this not winable game. I am sure if he had somehow had chances of getting to know phil and the others, ashely mostly would had done something to make it against him again. I like this a lot would like to see more of him stay like that.

Aboslutely stunning. I was hoping and waiting for blow up sex doll plot, thanks for this, I loved it so much. I have actually no idea how and where to start actually again, there is so much I wished to talk about, when I read the chapter. But I worry that I already forgot a lot. I should somehow try to make marks during my first read through.

First, I absolutely loved the length of the chapter. So please dont cut them down, if they become long, than thats a plus, not a negative. You are actually one of the best authors I know so far on here, putting the most love, details and time into chapters. I want to give you like 100 out of 100 stars for this actually. And I hope you keep up on this.

The plot telling is so damn realistic again. I love how you follow up your telling style, by writing about Ashelys go through his day. The chapters of yours literally are so awesome because of this. It is "not just" some kinks, it is also the conversations, Ashely learing for exams and school, going to school, sitting in classes, doing homework and all this, I already loved it in your previous story a lot.

The idea with the gym was fantastic and great way to use this idea, with the football team and Phils friends being around at the gym. I loved the idea SO MUCH of this shithead guy being so rude to Ashely and... how he paied it back BIG time to him, so epic.

I LOVED all the little things you put in between which I always love, like "he was literally fucked"... this part, was one of the most hot I read:

"No," Ashely said putting a hand on her. "Clair if he's ignoring you than he's a shitty person. If he's a shitty person than you shouldn't give a shit about such a little shit like him."Clair frowned at Ashely words, "Why are you using shit so much?"Ashely just laughed and shrugged, "Just thinking about William bailing on you like that just make me so mad."Clair gave Ashely a hug and thanked him, "Your right, if William wants to ignore me than he can go and be a piece of shit somewhere else."Ashely couldn't help but laugh again. A piece of shit was what he was, and a lot closer than Clair knew.

And I would love to see someone turn literally into shit, and still lives through it. I LOVE your ironic remarks so much especially by Ashely... and how cruel and sadistic he is, and literally has no empathy towards the people he changes. This is the best about this story. He literally doesnt give a shit. And how he faked about asking about him, and was like oh Im sure hes fine, maybe "just going through a lot right now" and all... I LOVE these two meaningful ironic remarks more than anything "oh he is mostly just a shitty guy"... fantastic, please more. Maybe even Ashely mocking someone whispering stuff like this to someone he trasnformed.

I have to say the doll part was a bit short unfortunatly, I would loved it being way longer. I wasnt a bit not happy with the ending too. I actually would had loved a way more cruel ending. For example, imagine two of the youngest of the team... come back the other day and make a "funny prank" with the doll. Of one of them takes a shit into "her" mouth on the ground, them making pictures and post them on FB, thinking it would be hella funny, like typicall straight jocks are, especially on the football team. And they would obviously also throw the doll in the trash of course after this.

Another little criticsm I had was, the shock moments are a bit missing in this chapter. Charlie gaging, nearly vomitting with his non existing stomach, his screams, his horror moments like... n-no. no, this can- please nono NONON-- of suddenly a teens dick is shoved into his mouth. Especially of this guy was older and straight, right. He would have lost his mind, it was totally gay to him. Imagine of some straight jock being raped like this, he would scream, chock, vomit, tear up, lose his mind, even be like please kill me at some point, with a broken voice. Maybe you can adapt this more in this flesh light tf idea, I would love more than anything to see this actually. Maybe as a gift for Phil. And then... the flesh light is used as a "toilet" of the dorm toilet is clogged, and the flesh light had a nice oepning as a mouth, ironically, and Phil takes a shit into it filling it to its rim, also felt like better not telling Ashely about it. Bringine me over to this part:

"Sure," Ashely said as Phil lead him to where there were some drinks. As soon as they got their drinks, Ashely felt like it was time to ask Phil the question of the night. "You going to use it too?"This caused Phil to choke on his drink a little, "What? No. Hell no, I mean thanks for the gift to the team and all but, dude come on.""What," Ashely said all innocently. "I'd be insulted if you didn't."Phil just snorted. "Then I'm sorry I insulted you but you won't catch me touching that thing. I'd have to be black out drunk to even think about it," Phil joked obviously not serious.

I just loved this so much. You literally thought of everything. The idea could literally be left out, right? But this makes it even BETTER. Of Phil didnt mean to use it actually at first, but Ashely talked him into it actually, LOL!

Tim... I love this Tim guy. And the whole virgin idea. Totally the best part of the chapter. And how he was also literaly losing it with this "blowjob" and how he came out and told his friends about it, and them joking and all.. I just love it. Please more of the football team, Phil, and co. The idea where he tested it first with his finger, LOL! "It must have been lubricated," such a great idea.

The best again was all the conversations obvously, it is your biggest strength, and all the jock talk, so damn realistic. All you characters are so realistic and vidid, Ashely, Phil, these new guys... Tim... ALL of them.

I also loved this part

Nick let out a defeated sigh, "Figures. I'm in the back a few seats behind you."Ashely gave him an ashamed look, "Sorry, I don't tend to look behind me that often."

Haha... this somehow let me think, of someone turn into a butt, which would mean also "Sorry, I don't tend to look behind me that often." hahaha.

I LOVED the part with the bubble gum... and the shit talk, like I mentioned about, so damn good.

LOL this Bill part!!! and him sleeping in with still coupled with the sex doll... I also actually thought all the time, what if it "blew up". Like I said above, the horror stuff somehow missed a bit, like something like ".. mo...mommy..." the former giy whimpering in a broken silent voice over the snoring. I think he wouldn really shout GET OFF ME, it was a bit not fitting. Also in your previous chapters, this is like the only criticsm I have, you have to think into, what would you do or say in this parts. These people would totally break and whimper, and becoming smaller actually. They wouldnt just be like "get off me" at this point, he would mostly just be a former shell of his self, totally broken, white face, open large eyes, a horror expression literally like a fuck doll:

https://i.imgur.com/H8wlQo9.png

Do you know the movie The Ring, and its enings? Literally a disturbed broken freak look on his face like that.

And then the total ironic combination of the unaware boys of course, with their dick in his mouth, and having fun.

Maybe add this in the flesh light idea. But also, when using as a toilet "potty" box, it would literally be the worst imaginable hell I actually can think of.

MAybe even worse..someone becomes Phils or Ashelys anus.
I LOVED this idea of the "fuck the next team name" LOL! Perfect idea!

Ugh this chapter is so much full of fantastic little ideas like this one, it is actually one of your best so far I think.

I hope I didnt forgot something to talk about, thanks so much for writing. Youre my hero, seriously. Would love if you can look on the ideas I posted on the other post, flesh light+toilet, anus, maybe cockroach, hooker+mc, turd, bacteria, condom, cum stain, there are also some more cruel stuff imaginable, like turning into a hair inside a butt, dingleberry, ant, toilet paper.Thanks for writing !!!!!!