[Report This]Date: October 20 2018 11:53 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Trust
Been waiting for this story to get going and it did not disapoint. I like having the first chapter as a refferance page as well. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Date: October 19 2018 10:10 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Trust
Very enjoyable first chapter. The science was believable enough so you're solid on that. A bit of spelling errors and grammar so I'd recommend proof reading it one more time to clean that up.
Boy Sierra appears to have had a lucky little moment with her sexy friend! Though she was returned to normal I have the eery feeling that she'll be finding herself shrunk again in no time!
The only big critique I'd give is to slow down a little and pad some detail in the paragraphs, especially the fetish parts they seemed very rushed through.
Solid work can't wait for the next chapter!