Reviewer: Sheograth Signed [Report This]
Date: October 25 2018 7:38 PM Title: Chapter 2 - The Truth

This is a pretty good story so far!

You're doing well with the 1st person perspective as well.

For characters for next chapter, Olivia would be an interesting choice to me. And since she's also got the whole shrinking kink, it could become a unique dynamic. I'm sure it'll be interesting regardless of who you choose.

One thing though is that you could get a bit more into detail with what happens in the chapter. Since she's in Nina's sock practically all day, that's a lot of room to work with for stuff to do. Depending on how you wanna do things, any minor act, like going to get some water, could spawn a lot of action to write about.

But I also get not wanting to always go into detail with things, so you do you.

Keep up the good work!