Reviewer: Frizzle Signed [Report This]
Date: November 12 2018 4:59 PM Title: Chapter 3 - Tinynapped

You learn a lot about these two as they chat with each other, their relationship and bits and pieces of their past. Blended very well between everything else. Nicely done.

 

Other than a few spelling errors my only critique would be to take your time. I'm a culprit of sometimes rushing through text, so I understand that it can be out of our mind sometimes. Take your time, add a bit more detail to the actions and memories. I felt this chapter had enough subjects to add at least another 1,000 words and I think it would've helped flesh it out more as a result.

 

Great character interactions and solid job on giving us more of an idea on the history of these two. Absolutely solid work.