Reviewer: Jimbob Signed [Report This]
Date: June 27 2020 5:12 PM Title: Chapter 1: Blood and Mud

Also, gotta add: It's amazing how you've managed to pull this much amazing story and world building out of a single drawing. You've got quite a wonderful literary imagination.

Reviewer: MadHatter Signed [Report This]
Date: January 01 2020 11:10 PM Title: Chapter 1: Blood and Mud

God how i've missed your stories lol

This and "we fall together" are still 2 of my top favorite tales here on the site right now and it's a massive relief to see you haven't abandoned them

Happy new year!

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for your kind message MadHatter! It really means a lot to me that readers enjoy what I love to write. I'm really motivated when I hear people are excited for whenever I post a new submission to the site. Thanks again for your review and taking the time to say something so nice!

Reviewer: Curvograph Signed [Report This]
Date: January 09 2019 3:29 AM Title: Chapter 1: Blood and Mud

The bad: minor spelling mistakes.

The good: pretty much everything else. Maybe that is the reason why even tiny imperfections stand out?

I have not written a review for quite a long time but your story demanded immediate attention. I have been following your other project from the beginning, it is one of my all-time favourites, so my expectations were very high. Fortunately, you served your readers a gripping pilot chapter and disappointment was the last thing on my mind upon finishing the read. I particularly like the way you balanced environmental details and fast action. The scene, although short, is extremely immersive and easy to visualise, the reader feels as though they had witnessed the events first-hand. And that is a feat rarely accomplished even by 'professional' authors.

The Prince is indeed a likeable character, a capable leader haunted by family issues and past he would rather not revisit... lots of potential for future development. Although we know nearly nothing about the Lady, I suspect she is not just a bloodthirsty monster who whimsically massacres encountered soldiers. Nevertheless, the relationship between these two is up for a rough start.

To sum it up, a great beginning to a new story. I am already looking forward to reading its next installment. Good luck!
C

Ps. English is not my native language, so I would like to apologise in advance for any mistakes you might find in my reviews. It is only fair, as I have just pointed out the few and unimportant ones in your work

Author's Response:

Thanks so much for your in-depth review Curvograph!

I always try to write imperfect characters, and the reserved Eliphas is no exception. You'll probably have already found that I tend to write people more complex than the typical requirements for a story, but I enjoy exploring what makes people wh they are, especially their faults and what drives their motives. Thanks so much again for your review, and though its been nearly a year, I hope you're well and still enjoying what I submit.

Reviewer: MadHatter Signed [Report This]
Date: January 07 2019 4:51 PM Title: Chapter 1: Blood and Mud

Given one of the reasons I read your stories is because of the attention to detail, I will read just about anything you post my dude. I hope to see more of "We fall together" in the future, but a new story isn't a bad idea either! Just look at Vintovka lol, he puts out random but good little short stories all the time.

 

I got a few authors I will read any story they post just about and you are one of em so do what you want man!