Reviewer: MacroGod Signed [Report This]
Date: February 03 2019 10:55 PM Title: Chapter 11 - Choices

Okay, I’ve got to admit, that chapter was so fucking hot! I kinda like this forced-threesome/cuckold situation going on here… lol 

 

Great story so far dude! I definitely can’t wait to read more and see how this adventure unfolds… ;) 

 

Author's Response:

Thanks mate, it's a fun story to write so I'm glad it's fun to read too.

Reviewer: Ecstacy Signed [Report This]
Date: February 03 2019 3:51 PM Title: Chapter 11 - Choices

To me the best aspect of the story thus far is Ben realizing how quickly things have spun out of his control and despite the knowledge of the superiority complex that Heather has, is realizing that the magnitude of it and he's in a near powerless state while she registers him as a slave rather than her partner, plus having to resist his lust while deeling with the giants.

Jason's characterization has also made him an interesting antagonist beyond that of a meathead brute, but calculating and knowing how people tick. Not only that, you've done a good job of making Jason and Heather have different M.O's in terms of getting what they want. While Jason likes to willingly make his subjects to submit to his rule and wants to mentally break Ben down, Heather practically gives him an ultimatum to make him obey her. 

I'm curious to what will happen in the event that Jason is or isn't compatible for growth. If he isn't compatible, he runs risk to being in the same spot as Ben and even if he is compatible, will someone with as severe a God Complex as Heather will be happy to 'share' power with someone. After witnessing that side of Heather, I wonder if there's a possibility of an unlikely alliance between Ben and Jason. 

This story has me hooked.

Author's Response:

Thanks, really glad you're enjoying.

Gotta say, I dated a girl once who was a genuine sociopath but hid that side of her. Fortunately I picked up on the signs after a few months and broke things off as gently as possible. But she was legit scary and clearly had a power hungry side to her. Sexy as hell but it clearly wasn't destined to be a healthy relationship. She's probably off wrecking some other guy's life right now. Frightening to think if she ever got her hands on some growth supplements. Maybe someday I'll write a story more explicitly along those lines, but I am kinda channeling part of her hidden motives here in this story. 

Jason is turning into more of a foil to Heather than I planned initially, but you're bang on about his contrasting style and motives.

I have a definitive ending in mind for the story, but I see some possible narrative branches that I may explore in a series of alternate endings, just for fun.