Date: September 17 2019 2:34 PM Title: 2: Bad Influences
The ladies all seem well described. Hope Jasmine and her Mother come over when he's shrunk. This looks like a fun story.
Thank you for your kind words. There also images I made of the ladies. In regards to Jasmine and/or mother we shall see. I have had discussions with the person commissioning the story and I will continue to have further such discussions.
Date: September 14 2019 7:33 AM Title: 2: Bad Influences
Makes no sence. A man would not subject his wife and daughter to some unknown serum.. And, allow himself to get shrunken down, just to keep a job... I can't get into it because I would never 'Knowingly' allow this to happen. So I've nothing in common with the protaginist.
Just my 2-cents, but, would be much better if he was 'Unknowingly' tricked, or forced into this situation. No choice, but to become trapped into it... I just can't 'Believe it, Sorry.
I am just paid to write this. I had my reservations but I didn't want this to become "my story". though the commissioner agress with your sentiments. I have had discussions with the person commissioning this story in regards your review and will continue to have further such discussions. It is clear some details will have to be changed. Let me be clear: if this was my own story idea I would have done things a lot differently. He is currently trying to rectify his idea and will make changes accordingly. As I said, I have been having discussions with the person commissioning this story in regards your review and will continue to have further such discussions.
Date: September 10 2019 2:10 AM Title: 1: Lucky Winner
Good start. I'm looking forward to reading more.
Thank you for your kind words Carlos. I hope to get the next chapter out by 13/09/2019. Oh look, Friday 13th. Better hope nothing bad happens to me. ;)