Reviewer: littless Signed [Report This]
Date: January 18 2021 10:41 PM Title: Day 8

I should probably elaborate on my previous post. First, from the description I was expecting the sister to force the brother into changing his behavior. So far, he's the one trying to change himself. That's what I meant about not expecting the plot.

The other thing I'm getting at is that so far it's just Reese gets up, tries to be nice, is not appreciated, wash, rinse, repeat. It's a bit monotonous so far and if that's all there is I will probably stop reading.

Nothing yet is R rated which I was expecting at least, maybe a little more skin. Perhaps some down blouse views or her catching him naked, say maybe humiliating Reese about his size while nude, or him catching her in the act with a boyfriend or girlfriend, or vice versa, or something. I suppose it's coming and I'm still reading and waiting eagerly for that.

I do like the gentle giantess approach but even some violence is okay, however it's your story. It has potential and I'll keep reading. I was only conveying my thoughts as a reader in my last comment, not trying to criticize. You could say I'm too impatient and its moving too slow for me but I'll keep giving it a chance and I'll keep reading.

I know how hard it is and how much effort it takes to write stories so I do appreciate what you've done writing and publishing.

Author's Response:

ahhhh ok thanks for clarifying. i think trying to change his behavior would be like... backwards? like wahts his behavior, that hes a perv? cuz then itd start at the climax, with all the naughtiest stuff suppoesdly, but by the end when hes fixed he wouldnt be a perv anymore right? so i feel like thatd be kinda backwards and get MORE boring as time went on, if i understand u correctly. or i guess it could be like that one story where the older sister trains the brother to not get turned on by everything, but i didnt want to write any kind of like explicit attraction between the two of them.

it definitely is monotonous tho i wont argue with you there lmao. i mean some have said they like it so thats cool but i feel like for the vast majority of readers it wont be for them. luckily i think im improving in my writing and verison 2 seems to be a lot quicker paced. version 1 i was just trying to fill out the days and now in v2 i might have too much content for the limited number of days i gave myself. the plan was v1 is 23 days and v2 and v3 are shorter but in retrospect thats kinda stupid shkfhskhfkshks like theres more content so why would i try and shorten the amount of time they have together? ya know? anyway yeah i think v2 is definitely better but ill add some better disclaimers over how boring v1 is LOL

Reviewer: Dawger2 Signed [Report This]
Date: June 29 2020 1:17 PM Title: Day 8

Awwww! Why does Reese hates his sister so much? I wouldn't mind having a sister who forces me to smell her feet. 

 

Great work on this chapter btw. Hope to see more Olivia's feet

Author's Response:

thanks