Date: December 20 2019 11:29 PM Title: Chapter 4 - A Relaxing Evening
Will he be punished for wearing shoes on the couch? Loved his leaving the remote where adults can reach it. Nanny cam is interesting. Hope the wife comes home soon. Will he encounter his Aunt or a neighbor. Or maybe his wife's sister?
Loving it,
Diesel
Author's Response:
It's one thing having a fantasy, another seeing it become reality, with all its challenges. Who knows what's in the future!
Date: December 20 2019 11:10 AM Title: Chapter 4 - A Relaxing Evening
The ongoing suspence is a killer. Will she catch him and when???
My only complaint, the paragraphs need to be broken up into smaller paragraphs so it's easier to read; otherwise very gripping and well written.
Author's Response:
So, I went back to Chapter 4, and realized that you are right. The ultra big paragraphs could use some breaking up. I will edit it. Thank you for catching that.