[Report This]Date: January 22 2020 9:43 PM Title: Bethany
Alright. I am angry at myself for taking so long to get to this story. A lot of problems are keeping me busy right now so just managed some time now. Let me say you got me invested in all the main characters and I love the way you build the story line.
On a side note, I am also happy it took me this long to read.
One thing that always bothers me in this kind of story is the way the family treats the main character after he shrinks. Although he is her son, the mother is always cold towards him and even sharing almost all their youth together, the sisters treat him as little more than a bug, only ever seeking revenge or pleasure. That is common in giantess stories revolving around families.
And oh boy, you got me worried for some time this was going to be the case in this one: Giantess without any real emotion. But then, ch. 9 and 10 happened. We and Paul got some information on the stoic Sarah personal life - namely that the boyfriend she bragged so much prefers a tiny over her and she probably uses Barney to compensate, giving him more "freedom" in exchange. This is a turning point.
This kind of insight can be used by Paul to bound, both with her sister and Barney. Maybe, behind the stoik mask, there is a young girl who only seeks company and the approval of her mother. Maybe Barney is more than just a pimp.
Someone like Hannah might try to help in the future, but, as long as he is a tiny, Paul is his family (and mainly Sarah's) property. I believe at least one family member is going to have a change of heart and see Paul as her flesh and blood. I don't believe is the mother, who is far too involved with politics to get in touch with her emotions. Sarah is my first choice because of the mess her personal life appears to be (and thats why no tiny dares to talk about it), but judging by the last paragraph on ch. 10, the change of heart is still far ahead.
Sorry for the long review and for any grammar mistakes. English is not my primary language and I wrote this in a hurry.
Thanks for writing and sharing with us. Keep up the good work.
PS. Added you and your story to my favorites :)
Author's Response:
Thank you! The characters I write are real in my mind; I try to think of how they would realistically act in certain situations. Those other kinds of stories you eluded to tend to see their females less as characters rather than vehicles to get to the specific interactions they want to see, which I guess is fine for people who just care about smut and not story, but it's not the kind of thing I'm interested in writing.
Date: January 22 2020 1:57 PM Title: Bethany
Another wonderful chapter, a joy to read . You tell a very fine tale
Author's Response:
Thank you, I appreciate it!
[Report This]Date: January 22 2020 6:53 AM Title: Bethany
Fantastically written! One error, I think you might have had Bethany originally named Brittany - he calls her by that name earlier. Otherwise this is perfect! I have to ask though - is Brie going to be taking him in soon? Ending seems like it lends itself to that and she hasn't made an appearance for quite sometime now. I feel like she'd love to get her claws on him now that he's small.
Author's Response:
Ah that mistake slipped by me in my proofreading! I often get names mixed up in my head, even of my own characters.
[Report This]Date: January 22 2020 5:57 AM Title: Bethany
I'm really enjoying this story so far. I always like introspective ones like this that take deep looks into the relationships and power dynamics between tinies and giants to be my favorites, keep up the good work!
On the plot for this chapter, if I had to guess what's going to come craching down, I'd guess that Bethany was lying about being pregnant and she is now pregnant with his child. Could be something else though.
Also, ever since the concept of growers was introduced last chapter and that other commenter posted about Katelyn finding a cure, I've been imagining in my head Katylen not getting some scientific cure, but just becoming a normal grower. It's a fun and heartwarming little scenario to think about, her becoming a grower and then coming back to take Paul as her companion. Even if it doesn't actually happen in the story its a nice thought to have.
Author's Response:
Thank you!