Date: January 18 2020 9:01 AM Title: Welcome to Science Club
No idea when or where you want it to end? Taking suggestions? Bad idea, you'll either drown in suggestions or get complaints that you're not writing commissions for free :D
Anyway, since you asked... I have some very unfinished plots for customs that I'm slowly (think of a sloth...) finishing and may or may not turn into custom videos before the 22nd century comes; one of them involves a student framing another student, who is shrunk, but then she is caught and gets away with it by saying she did it because she wants to become a teacher eventually.
Not that you should structure your story like that but... YAFIYGI :)
Author's Response: Haha I’m not too worried about complaints. If I see something that I think would work well, I’ll write it in. If someone gets mad because I don’t write something they want to see... them I’d just recommend they write their own story. I’m just happy to interact with the people who take the time to read what I write. That being said I think our stories are already a bit similar. Camilla is a star student who manages to frame an unfortunate boy and entwine him with a future of feminine torture. I’m glad you’re enjoying it this far!
[Report This]Date: January 15 2020 11:28 PM Title: Welcome to Science Club
Great work so far! I'm liking the set up for the characters and detailed descriptions of what's happening. Also really enjoying that you cover both the gassy and sweaty side of being sat on.
I wonder if Adam will eventually have to spend gym class inside of Camilla's shorts? Or have to deal with the aftermath of a gas inducing meal from inside Mrs. Crowell's underwear.
Author's Response: I’m glad you’re enjoying this far! Gas and sweat are going to be a pretty prevalent theme in this story so stay tuned to see it all go down. Thanks for reading!
Date: January 15 2020 9:09 PM Title: Welcome to Science Club
Fantastic story. Who doesn't have a teacher they had a crush on, and wished to be used by in all sorts of ways like Miss Crowell?
You have a few typos. If you reread your story you can easily see them. That said they are nothing that takes away from your story in the least.
The overall premise is great. I myself have been slowly wokring a story called "The Trilogy Of Teachers", basically the story of three seperate shrinking episodes all happening at the same school.
I really like how you followed up with teacher Micheal Manning and his intensions with Camilla.
One has to wonder about "a slight bit of movement form Kerri’s butt" {notice "form instead of "from", that's what I meant by a few typos}. Is that movement another student being punished by the girls in Science Club? Perhaps, just perhaps, it's a teacher being rewarded inside Kerri's jeans / butt since freshman year; a teacher who helped Kerri with her studies and is now being rewarded and happy in his / her new position.
Looking forward to Camilla being a total bitch, abusing Adam, and hopefully using that remote on Kyle. By the way, you wrote "Did you just swear Kyle?.......but Mike just quietly apologizes", see the typos I mentioned?
Looking forward to finding out more about Camilla's toy, and perhaps Miss Crowell's toys as well.
You have a great story going on, please keep it going.
Author's Response: I’m glad you enjoyed the story so far, and I appreciate you pointing out typos. I try to make sure I don’t get writing too quickly, but I will often spend up to a few hours on a chapter and it can become difficult to pick up on little things like that after I’ve been staring at the screen for so long. Like with the Kyle/Mike mistake, when I gave Mr. Lanning a first name, I had to go back and change the students name to Kyle. If you see errors, absolutely don’t be shy about pointing them out to me as it will only improve the experience for the next reader. Stay tuned for the next chapter, thanks for reading!