Reviewer: Cortex Signed [Report This]
Date: May 10 2013 10:11 PM Title: Chapter 1

A lot of people noted the similarities between this story and Homunclus, although I notice them, there is a huge contrast between the main protagonists, and I love the wide range of emotions from the characters in both stories.

Dave strikes me as more passive than Ray. The big difference being, Ray had some legal leverage in knowing his family couldn't just flat out  murder or maim him without some consequence. Dave though, risked being murdered at any moment and no one would've known. And Carolyn had even less cards in her deck than Naomi.

Personally I liked Homunclus more because Ray had more attitude to him and made several attempts to fight back (figuratively speaking as he'd say) and even got the upper-hand for short durations. But, obviously Ray's situation as I noted gave him more leeway to act out.

Overall I also connected to Ray more since we got more insight into his life before living with the Daltons, his emotional attachment to his family at Spectrum, and felt his pain of him being legally forced to stay with the Daltonsm for life, as well as being GenetiTech's lab-rat.

The suspense though is what this story's strongest strength is in my eyes,  Carolyn was prone to snapping at any moment, her overall delusional frame of mind that she's being a kind owner, Eddie's descent into madness, the betrayal aspects, of not only Linda, and Eddie, but Dave for picking Randy to die.

I also loved the sense of unity the group developed later on, especially of Mr. Nichols ( my favorite character) who came off as the most unlikeable at first, to being the most sensible and self-less, willing to stay behind because he thought he'd slow every down.

I couldn't stop reading in the final escape attempt and feel sad when everyone ( save for Dave and Julie) started to die one by one. Masterful work yet again.

Reviewer: TinyMan23 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 07 2010 1:08 PM Title: Chapter 1

Congratulations cayce, on another well written story. Kinda sucked how so many of them died. Would have been nice if denny survived. Great story, hope you continue to write soon. Look forward to another amazing story.

Author's Response: Hated to see Denny go too. He turned out to be my favorite character to write, and I kind of wish I'd kept him around for the inevitable sequel ;-) Thanks for reading, TM!

Reviewer: TinyMan23 Signed [Report This]
Date: January 01 2010 10:13 PM Title: Chapter 1

Once again, you truly bring the characters to life man, especially Carolyne. She was a raging goddess that didnt give a [EXPLETIVE DETAIL] about anything in the beginning of the chapter, and now shes a feeble woman who also has her own problems.

Great story man, appreciated the quick update compared to the others. 

Author's Response: Yeah, I'm in the home stretch now. Not sure how many chapters are left, but they seem to be coming quicker and quicker these days ;-)

Reviewer: Theodous Signed [Report This]
Date: December 07 2009 10:55 PM Title: Chapter 1

Goodness, where to even begin... In the past I've always waited until a story was completed before I submitted a comment. But to do that, I feel, would be doing you a great disservice Cayce.. Because what you've accomplished here is nothing short of amazing... Your story is both enjoyable and compelling to read. Heck, I'm sure I'm not alone when Is say that it's because of your writing that I've found myself constantly coming back to this website. So hey, maybe the wait is a little longer than we would all like. But it's WELL worth it in the end. :) So please don't give in to the preassure, take your time. And do so with confidence that there are a great many of us who deeply appreciate your efforts.

Author's Response: Thanks, Theodous! You know, this story has been read 66,000+ times and has received around 40 comments. I used to find that kind of demoralizing, but I realized I really owe it to those of you who take the time to comment to see this thing through. Thanks again for reading the darned thing and for letting me know =)

Reviewer: aaron Signed [Report This]
Date: August 26 2009 10:54 PM Title: Chapter 1

well to start off im a huge fan! love beautiful toes and feet. but i prefer (taco bell)purple toe nails though. lol.
anyways im here to review... first off love all of the realism of the antagonist(Carolyn).she is everything that you hate, love, and fear. maybe more so on the ladder now.
much enjoy the day-to-day goings-on for the characters especially dave, because i love feet an wouldn't mind to be carolyn's "special little guy" lol.

question.
is it true that when you finish this story you'll combind the two of your stories? let me just say [EXPLETIVE DELETED] thats awesome!!

anyways congratulations on an epic masterpiece.. keep it coming,

aaron

Author's Response:

Yep, my next opus will feature characters from this story and Homunculus. At the rate I'm going, I should be getting started on it sometime in 2044...

Glad you're enjoying Summer Job, Aaron. I'm having fun writing it, although fatigue is starting to set in. I'm ready to get this thing wrapped up, and now I'm starting to regret having left so many loose ends.

Thanks for reading and taking the time to comment.

Reviewer: TinyMan23 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 30 2009 5:53 PM Title: Chapter 1

Thanks so much for the update, I've been waiting for a VERY long time. Great chapter, I love the way how everyone is now shit scared of Carolyn now. She is portrayed throughout your story very thoroughly, that she seems real. You are really an amazing author. I really wonder what happens next, what Carolyn is going to say to her parents, if shes going to eat the turkey. Update soon!

Author's Response: Thanks, TM. I appreciate that! Carolyn's getting harder and harder to write, but I'm looking forward to doing the scenes with her parents. They always make her a little more human and a little more accessible.

Reviewer: Canaan Signed [Report This]
Date: December 18 2008 9:49 PM Title: Chapter 1

Completely excellent story, dude!  You tell such incredible tales, your situations so vibrant, your characters so wonderfully (or in the case of Caroline, dreadfully) alive!

 

Here's to hanging in suspense and anxiously awaiting the next chapter!  Ow!  What an Excellent story!

 

Oh, and if I could make a special request, could somebody get stepped on (accidentally or otherwise) in the garden?  Soft soil, cruelly heavy bare foot, intense pinning...?  Urnf.  The thought of it just does things to a guy! :D

 

Either way, excellent stuff, Cayce!  Greatly looking forward to more!

Author's Response: You know, I don't usually do requests because I've pretty much got the story plotted out. But your suggestion was a good one, and really close to what I had in mind, so there you go. Enjoy Chapter 19 ;-)

Reviewer: deviant Signed [Report This]
Date: October 23 2008 10:06 PM Title: Chapter 1

I love this story, you're rollin' Cayce.  hot shit!

Author's Response: Thanks, Deviant!

Reviewer: Ruseraph Signed [Report This]
Date: April 23 2008 6:50 PM Title: Chapter 1

ve been a fan since the first story. And Im really starting to enjoy this second one. I love how the story will keep you guessing. And wanting to page ahead ;)

 

Keep up the awesome work. You have FANS!

Author's Response: Glad you're liking it, Ruseraph. Thanks!

Reviewer: Solar Crimson Signed [Report This]
Date: April 17 2008 2:09 PM Title: Chapter 1

Alright, I'm hooked. I've only read chapter 1 so far, but I'm liking this. :D

Author's Response: Thanks! Hope you stick with it to the end. I mean, assuming I ever get there...