Reviewer: D W Signed [Report This]
Date: February 06 2020 6:39 PM Title: A Silent Mansion

Your story's premise has a lot to offer.  Unfortunately your story is hard to follow for a few reasons.

You should break it up into paragraphs, which apparently you did but it did not come across in your posting.

You seem to be confusing the term "victims" with "suspects, which makes it hard to understand who is who.

A little clean up from a grammar perspective would make your story much easier to read.

Please do continue.