Reviewer: banfield Signed [Report This]
Date: February 26 2008 4:29 AM Title: Chapter 1

It reads very good. Looking forward to the next chapter. I especially liked it because there wasn't too much preamble. May I make one suggestion?  Could you possibly write about actual eating and a little less swallowing?  Okay, swallowing is fine, especially when one reads of the very slow digesting process inside the stomach of a lovely girl, but as a diversion, it's also thrilling to read about a fellow being slowly...ever so slowly masticated.    Hope you don't mind my comments.