[Report This]Date: February 08 2021 1:31 AM Title: Chapter 18: A Little Rendezvous
I love this story and get excited everytime I see an update. I love the foot crush stuff, especially the one chapter where he was crushed between her foot and the sandal's insole. Keep it up!
Author's Response:
Well, I’m glad you like it. “Feet”, especially soles, are one of my favorite tropes, so unless there is a very specific short storyline, you’ll most definitely see it in all of my stories.
Date: February 07 2021 9:38 PM Title: Chapter 18: A Little Rendezvous
Thank you for listening to our feedback and for changing ending of this story.
I really appreciate this.
Here I would like to say one more thing.
Please don't discouraged by all this feedback about previous ending. Please stay positive and continue to write new stories.
I think that you received all this feedbacks due to extremely high quality of your work as whole. When you create masterpiece you create great expectation :)
Normally when I read story and find some ending really bad, I just shrug my shoulders with some disappointment and move on.
In case of your stories, you manage to really pick my interest, you manage to make me empathize with character. To sum it up you manage to make me care about story.
I really like your stories and have very high opinion about them and you as an author.
I didn't like previous ending but I would still rate this story as 5 stars.
I eagerly awaits for next chapters and new stories.
You are really a great author :)
Author's Response:
Well, I do apologize for this whole mess, and I certainly appreciate your continued support and kind words. I’m taking this all in stride, and I promise to deliver a better ending. I just don’t want everyone to simply expect a happy ending every time, but I certainly understand people wanting one in this case. Obviously, my readers, like yourself, wouldn’t be so passionate about this story and it’s characters if they didn’t like how I wrote them.
So, just a reminder, the original deleted ending will be tweaked and reposted as the “alternate ending”, and I’m currently writing a new ending.
Date: February 07 2021 12:28 AM Title: Chapter 18: A Little Rendezvous
I've been mostly silent and watched the drama build over this story. While I understand the frustration many people felt, your ending was one you planned from the beginning. You definitely wrote yourself into a hole with the extra content you ended up putting in, but the only thing I feel you did wrong was failing to make sure your ending happened in a sensical way. Like many people said, your execution of the last couple chapters didn't make sense and felt forced. If your end goal was always for that result, it's your job to make sure you get there in a way that makes sense. You're not obligated to give people a happy ending and many of the reviews in those deleted chapters were immature, entitled, and whiny. You got people invested and that's a good thing, but that doesn't mean readers should belittle the writer for not getting the ending they wanted. Like I said before though, that could have been avoided if you'd taken a few steps back and rethought the way you wanted to get there, as it certainly seemed like you went to that ending abruptly just to say "I can do what I want with my story", which was also pretty immature in my eyes.
Best of luck with the new ending though!
Author's Response:
Yes, I realize now that my original ending simply didn’t make sense, but it wasn’t just that I initially had a sad ending in mind, nor that I didn’t listen to my readers, it’s that I didn’t go where the story took me. Sure, a few minor changes and additions to the story shouldn’t have made a difference, but they did, and they made it in a BIG WAY! And you’re right, I should’ve taken the time to take some steps back and rethink where the story was taking me. Now, I have a few ideas on how the story should end, but I’m taking the time to consider all my options. I had intended for the story to end in Cassie and Nick’s apartment, but now, I’m not so sure. This time, I’m gonna go where the story takes me. When I started writing “Babysitter Trouble”, I had an ending in mind, and that the ending that I wrote. But the addition of Rachel, Mrs. Carson, Noreen… they were all additions that I made along the way, and I think they worked, if I do say so myself. With this story, Jenny was supposed to be a throwaway character, and look what ended up happening! Everyone seemed to fall in love with these characters, and they deserve a proper ending....which I plan to give them....ALL OF THEM!
Thanks for the well wishes!
Date: January 08 2021 5:44 PM Title: Chapter 18: A Little Rendezvous
This is reall great story.
All three you stories are really great.
Your describtion of all events is really good. I also like this positive vibe in your stories. Even with ending of this chapter I still have small hope for good ending for nick :)
Author's Response:
Well, thank you for reading my stories, and thank you for the review.
[Report This]Date: January 07 2021 4:29 AM Title: Chapter 18: A Little Rendezvous
Yes....yes....(breathes a sigh of relief)
I cannot express how much of a relief this chapter was to read.
The connection between Jenny and Nick was so palpable here. Not just the physical connection, but also emotional and genuine feeling.
Jenny's concern for Nick was so good to see, how she was worried for him, but also enjoying exploring a sexual partnership with him.
(The sex scenes showcased your writing once again in writing tiny/giant sexual content so well. I loved it!!)
And Jenny reinforcing Cassie's horrible behaviour, her deplorable actions and fucking abusive actions towards Nick. She didn't sugar coat it, as said in previous reviews she abused Nick, she belittled him and gaslighted him, and straight up tried to KILL her husband.
Nick is finally escaped from the Cassie-fog of delusion, she is in the WRONG, he does not have to apologize to her! She's an abusive cunt who does not deserve him, and finally he is seeing the toxicity he was becoming complacent in, hell was craving to return to.
He's free from that delusion, and is now free from wanting it.
And Jenny pointing out everything she did, and reasuring him was so good to read. Jenny feels like an avatar of all the compassion and love that Nick should have gotten from Cassie, but was denied.
I am once again happy for this story, happy for Nick, and now for Jenny as well. Like the previous chapter I have finished this and am filled with excitement and happyness (instead of blind rage and a desire for vengeance.....well not so much XD I still want to hurt Cassie, but at the same time I am relieved for Nick)
Thank you for giving us Jenny, she is the partner Nick deserves, and is finally getting.
Now let's get those divorce papers going! XD
Author's Response:
Well, if nothing else, you’re proof that I know how to write my characters well. I really am glad that you take the time to review my story, regardless of whether you do or don’t like what happens. In retrospect, I really do wish that I’d introduced Jenny earlier in the story, There’s so much more I could’ve done with her character.