Date: June 17 2021 3:09 AM Title: Chapter 1
I absolutely LOVE this story. I love the direction that you took with the new strain scenario and continuing to make John smaller. I think it would be great if he eventually ended up being Nanoscopic in size. Having no choice, but to live on his mother or sister's body like a parasite lol.
Either that, or he was forced to join a community of Nanos in a sort of vivarium petri-dish world which his mother and sister would oversee. Him, and the other Nanos would pretty much become nothing more than pets, and his family Goddesses of their new world.
Anyway, even without going that route the story is fantastic and I hope that you'll continue it soon. Maybe even using one of these suggestions in doing so lol. You're a legend though, and I hope you get better soon!
[Report This]Date: June 14 2021 7:04 PM Title: Chapter 1
First of all, I sincerely hope you're doing better these days, cancer is real s**t and I hope you will get through it !!
For the review and sugestions :
One of the best stories I have read over the years searching for this type of content. I cannot describe how well writen it is, and the reader engament is tremendous, everything feels real !
For the vote you submited in chapter 15, in my opinion the best choice for you is "same as before, men shrink, women bustier". Why that ? Because that's why i fell in love with your story : an exotic and different settings than all of the stories on this site (and lots of other sites as well). For me, women simply growing huge is quite the same as lots of stories here (but that can be very good if it's well written obviously), and your unique aspect in this story (shame that new world order stories are so few in numbers) makes me want to continue on that aspect of bustier women slowly taking control of the world.
I also think that shrinking women, also with maybe breast shrinking in a certain aspect, can be good as an instant karma for certain people, to spice up things a little !
But just women getting huge is kinda boring imo, maybe following as a second or third strain, that could be cool, but keep the BE content !
Another thing I could suggest if that's okay, maybe the new strain don't happen overnight, and the shrinking and BE can happen during the day, so you can maybe detail it more ? That could set you some interesting things to describe !
Would also love to see Allison getting kinder to John, wholesome moments are better than cruel moment imo hahaha.
Hope you have time to read that long mologue and found what you where searching for when you told us to suggest you ideas and feedback for the next chapters of your awesome story !!
Author's Response:
Thanks for all the kind words. And don't worry, for the shrunken women or growing women stuff, it would be super super rare. Like it would happen to only 1 or 2 characters.
Date: June 14 2021 5:58 AM Title: Chapter 1
First of all, thank you for continuing the story.
I love the idea "a few women grow huge". When some women grow huge, it connects every idea of you.
To them, the men shrink even more ("same as before, men shrink, women bustier") and to them the women shrink too ("some women shrink").
When they grow, they could be even bustier.
I would love to see when a mature woman grows to a huge giantess and makes everyone her slave or pet. When the mother, the grandmother or a mature neigbor or an old teacher grows so huge, that everyone must do what she says (massage her feet, polish her nails). She could put hundreds of people (man and woman) between her giant breasts.
The society could develeop into an hierarchy, where the bigger ones can do whatever they want to the smaller ones.
Date: July 21 2020 4:32 AM Title: Chapter 1
Wow great story!! I loved it. I would like to read a full story about trish, denise's daughter and her brothers and dad. Also would like to see some more humiliation, pussy and ass stuff.
[Report This]Date: July 02 2020 11:49 AM Title: Chapter 1
Loving the story! The gentle domme aspects, physical descriptions, and Allison's growing affection for John are what really sell this for me. The scene where she coos over her milk-drenched brother is aces.
If you're taking unsolicited suggestions (what with the writer's block and all) - I think you've laid the groundwork for one of two compelling arcs. The first - John's growing desperation and ultimate acceptance as the world changes and he's fully dehumanized (which is how 90% of these NWO stories end up panning out and is frankly boring).
And the second (IMO, far superior arc) - an exploration of the growing affection/desire of John's family (especially Allison) for their shrunken man, and how this conflicts with their struggle to maintain familial propriety and status quo.
How I would work this - introduce a "best girl." Someone from John's past or present, someone he trusts and who respects him. Maybe she's resistant to the infection when we first meet her (so you can cash in on a big transformation later). But someone with an easy, eager relationship with our protagonist, who can make Allison jealous and force her to grapple with her growing attachment to her brother. That gives you conflict, an arc, and a final resolution when Allison (or best girl) gives into (or reconciles) her feelings.
And if that sounds like garbage, then don't be afraid to do something bold! If you're not sure what the next day in John's life looks like, maybe hop five years into the future, or examine/introduce a different character altogether.
Hope your writer's block clears up. Looking forward to reading more of this!
Date: June 22 2020 5:14 PM Title: Chapter 1
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a very similar story to yours, hope you like it and it provides you with inspration.
Date: June 20 2020 9:15 PM Title: Chapter 1
I really like this story. I am very interested in how maternal Allison is becoming even compared to John's actual mother. As someone who felt alone as a kid this speaks to me a little. I really hope John breaks down and lets his family know how he feels before Carolyn leaves. I feel very sad when I think how Carolyn treats everyone like family including laughing and talking while Carolyn treats John like she does not care about him. She never talks with him except when she wants feet rubs and ignorse him the entire time. But this is your story please let me know what you think.
[Report This]Date: June 20 2020 8:01 PM Title: Chapter 1
Awww...Allison is a sweetheart while still teasing John. So cute!
I'm loving this Story so Far! Keep it up!
[Report This]Date: June 19 2020 2:51 PM Title: Chapter 1
Aww...allison is a good sister. I'm glad she really cares about john yes shes a tease but she loves him a lot.
Sarah....yikes...its sad how fast she became ok with murder...
I'm looking forward to more teasing interactions with his sister but she still treats him like person and consider his feelings while still teasing him.
Some more hijinks are on the way I bet just as long as Johnhas a good ending! Keep up the story!
P.s. any plans on introducing a girlfriend for John? Someone kind but Teasing? Just a Request. 😁 where allison,mom and girlfriend care for him and protect him?
[Report This]Date: June 18 2020 7:34 PM Title: Chapter 1
One of my new favourites! Can't wait to see more! *preferably more foot & nylongs action
[Report This]Date: June 18 2020 6:37 PM Title: Chapter 1
Weird chapter. But at least his grandma is nice. I really hope it's a happy ending for john hopefully he gets a girlfriend at the end someone who treats him like a person instead of a slave.
And hopefully something happens that makes him and his sister become closer. (Not in a sexual naughty way) I mean actually loving relationship. Maybe she can help him get a sweet girlfriend?
Keep up the story mate!
[Report This]Date: June 16 2020 5:33 PM Title: Chapter 1
I hope this story keeps going, it's really good. I like Allisons current attitude. Being playfully cruel - testing out things like putting her foot over him just to tease him but without crushing him and telling him she's just playing. That kinda stuff is always great, plus she seems gentle in the first place and hope it stays that way with some level of dominance/cruelty.
Also in the last chapter, I think you accidentally switched names from sarah to susan at then end.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review and for catching that. fixed it
[Report This]Date: June 15 2020 9:25 PM Title: Chapter 1
I agree with pigeon-kun. I really want the sister to slowly become more kind to him maybe is she sees Sarah almost accidentally kill allison's bro and she gets very protective of him maybe slowly falling in love with him but she starts to treat him more like a person taking his feelings into consideration? Where the mom gets overprotective and gets worse and worse so allison runs away with him and they live a happy life together? Or Maybe allison helps him find a kind and loving girlfriend? Good idea?
I'm just rooting for a sweet gentle relationship with his sister. And a happy ending for our Protagonist.
Keep up the story! I'm really loving it!
[Report This]Date: June 15 2020 8:32 PM Title: Chapter 1
Yea this is a great story so far! I love how you built the character relationships. I especially love the "carelessly unaware out of convenience" situations that you hint at with the mom telling him to stay in his house as she is changing clothes. I think it would be great to build on that with the mother, having him struggle at first with the guilt of watching her from his dollhouse window.. to slowly giving-in and eventually perving on her and jerking off standing in his window, to even ultimately following her around trying to not get caught as he follows her into the bathroom watching her shower, looking up her robe/towel before dashing back to his dollhouse.
Maybe she decides it's too dangerous to leave him at home anymore after she catches Allison being mean to him. Putting him in a little tic tac container and carrying him around in her purse, as she goes about her day. He gets super bored and is driven wild with little accidental glimpses up womens skirt and even up his mom's skirt while she keeps her bag under the desk at work. Maybe she goes shopping for clothes with Allison and sets her purse down near the wall of one of the changing stalls accidentally giving him a great view of his mom and sister trying on all kinds of bras/panties, swimwear, leisure wear. Maybe Allison catches him perving on them both and kicks the purse over intending to end his free show, but accidentally knocking his container directly under his unaware changing mother, or worse knocking his container directly into the path of one of his mother's giant feet which smashes his tiny container and nearly smashes him! Mom thinks it's an accident and apologizes profusely then having to improvise a new container for him.. sonce his tic tac box broke.. maybe something as humiliating as a tampon holder, or a container of feminine hygiene wipes will have to do.. just until they get home.. of course..
Perhaps one day they venture out for some sunshine at the community pool where he is exposed to the horrors of all ages of women torturing their brothers, fathers, and sons in the dressing room. All bragging about and describing to each other the different flavors of cruelty and new fun ideas to try on their own tinies. Leaving John thankful that his guardians are not as creative with their various interactions. There's lots of room in a world like this to play with different approaches of sharing the pool and for these women to let their tinies swim. For instance an option is to pour water over themselves and gifting a little pool of cool bottles water in their belly buttons as they tan, or keeping a cup of water between their legs as they lay out enjoying the peace and sunshine while sweat drops accidentally drip down off their heaving breasts and onto the tiny beings below. Or perhaps some of the giant family members are less interested in their tinies safety and simply fling them into the pool telling them to stay out of the pool filter this time.
Of course the old favorite.. enlisting the whole family to work like a construction crew with tiny mops and sponges in order to keep their moms / sisters / daughters covered in sunscreen as they joke laugh and talk about their tiny family members while swapping stories to each other. Maybe some of them slack off and need to be punished right in front of everyone? Perhaps there are still some full size males who had to drive their daughter/younger sister to the pool.. but is now terrified of getting to close to anyone at the pool, for fear of getting the virus himself..
I also imagine it would be interesting to follow through on the Denise story arc as John is riding in Moms purse at work he overhears talk about a new fun religious group / organization who has jumped on this opportunity to rewrite the relationship between men and women. Insisting that this virus is nature's way of showing everyone that men are here to serve women in every way and the virus is a cleansing of the planet of all the toxic masculinity which was well on it's way to ruining our fair planet. Convincing its women followers of all ages to no longer treat men as humans but rather as a commodity to be guarded as valuable property and trained. And of course they never want any men to die, that would be cruel.. but everything else women do to men or with men, is seen as a blessing that women bestow on men to allow them to serve goddesses such as them. I could see this not working on John's mother even as she and Allison attend a "meeting" with Denise or Natalie.. perhaps they run into Sarah there and find that she is thriving in this new ideology and new world order..
I also like the idea of hearing about / or maybe John catches a glimpse of one of these poor tinies at the changing room or walking around the mall, while mom and Allison are out shopping.. but the idea if a tiny being sewn into clothing seems very interesting.. one of them could be a father or a obviously older brother that is sewn into a sporty thong strap of their younger sibling under the stall of a public bathroom, with the brothers arms and legs stretched out above and below him unable to move.. screaming in fear as he is carelessly pulled up into place disappearing between his daughter's / sister's cheeks.. (gulp) John hoping the women in his life dont catch wind of these new trends.. Or the idea of a punk son with tattoos faintly visible through the sheer full backs of their mother's panties.. or John perving up out of his mom's purse under a nearby pretty girls short skirt only to find a man sewn into the outside of the gusset of a pair of cotton panties with the letters D-A-D-D-Y written in permanent marker on his chest or back (depending in which way he's facing.. I find both to be hot) and them locking eyes for a second as his eyes light up and he begins thrashing calling for help from under a taped mouth.. before she walks away.. leaving John watching her ass switch back and forth into the distance..
I've always thought the idea of "Digesta-balls" (playing on the word digestable) would be cool, where women could buy little plastic balls that are safe to swallow (or do other things with..) but protect the tiny within from being crushed or dissolved in stomach acid.. allowing mischievous sisters, punishing mothers, or vengeful daughters to swallow their tinies without worrying about their tiny being destroyed by their digestive system.. but still getting a full dose if fear out of their tiny men. Of course accidents DO happen.. but rare enough not to worry about. The company of course does not recommend eating their product with little men inside.. thats dangerous.. they are for.. uhh.. cameras.. you see.. yes that's right.. medical.. cameras..
Lastly (sorry this turned out longer than expected) I think it would be interesting to have a "treatment" be discovered, not a cure mind you.. but a way to SLOWLY restore some of the victimized men to near their normal height.. as long as their guardians keep the juice coming.. maybe it's an expensive mix of homeopathic vitamins that they have to ingest with their food at every meal, or my favorite scenario... the affected women begin lactating.. and it is discovered that there is an enzyme in breastmilk which seems to help fight off the virus... forcing the males to be totally dependent on their female family members in order to regain a height if 2 ft or 3ft.. but if it is ever taken away from them... they shrink right back down in less than 12 hrs.. I would imagine that John's mom would gladly get a breast pump and produce a steady source for her son, Allison would be willing to nurse him straight off her tit! Although John is hoping it never comes to that.. I could see a really cool situation coming from mom forgetting to leave some breast milk out for him for breakfast when she leaves to run errands for the day. John has been using the breast milk treatment for about a week now and has regained some height back to 2 inches or so.. but is used to his routine breastmilk for breakfast lunch and dinner.. He wakes up starving and worried about shrinking from his newly regained 2 inch height, and goes in search of breastmilk in the kitchen, he discovers a few drops.. albeit old breastmilk still beaded up in the pump just past the end of the suction cup.. he scurries up into the pump suction cup and squirms into the tight space and discovers the "milk" is very diluted and mostly just water.. none the less he is desperate not to re-shrink and begins to lick up as much water-milk as he can.. and gets stuck (of course!) Then after trying to free himself for what seems like hours, he falls asleep from exhaustion hoping his mother will help free him when she gets home. Only to be tossed awake by the careless movements of his mother picking the machine up and walking into the living room to watch tv and pump milk for him, but wait why doesn't she see him.. he's so much bigger now right?! Terror strikes his heart as he realizes ..he has shrunk back down to 3/4 inch tall and is trapped at the bottom of the suction cup of the breast pump! As she slowly gets it ready and turns it on the churning monster begins slurping him towards its mechanical gullet! He fights as long as he can as his mother peacefully watches the news, and after several seconds of struggling as a torrent of milk sprays him off her nopple he loses his grip and he is finally swallowed by the pump and plopped into the container where breastmilk is being showered down onto him from her giant tits above him.. She of course finds him when she pours it into a bottle as he spills out onto the counter gasping for air.. She feels terrible and promises to upgrade his dollhouse the next day to make it up to him..
Maybe the new religion recommends family members nurse their respective tinies because if the obvious spiritual connection the males need with their Goddess, and Mom begins to warm to the idea of ditching the breast pump and begin considering nursing him straight from her breast, although she tries to wear a special conservative nursing bra that is strictly functional because she doesn't want to confuse her poor boy with strange sexual connections while nursing him. I mean that would be awful.. or perhaps she puts him in a small cup/bowl and just squirts milk down onto him as she watches from above and sips her wine.. bc he's not a baby folks we dont need to worry about exposing John to small traces of alchohol! Lol #Rationalizations
Anyway, I hope some of this is useful, you clearly have a knack for writing this stuff, and I hope you continue to explore this fun little world you've created. Thanks for the great read so far!
Date: June 14 2020 8:45 PM Title: Chapter 1
I was hoping busty grandma and shrunken grandpa were going to show up after they were mentioned. Maybe grandma is a more trustworthy babysitter.
Author's Response:
I originally mentioned them just to get the mom out of the house during the initial shrinking. I havnt really read much with grandma interactions so I wouldnt know how to do it justice. I put my email on the newest chapter, feel free to email me if you have good examples or tips, and Ill try to add it. I also plan on adding one off side story chapters that could include those kinds of things with random people in the world.
Date: June 14 2020 5:42 PM Title: Chapter 1
Love this story so far. It has the potential to check all my favorite check boxes, brother/sister grandpa/ granddaughter, grandma/ grandson, mother/son, father daughter. I do usually prefer the shrinkee to be at least 4-6 inches but find that usually doesn't impact the story. I'd like to see some lack of awareness among grandma and mom as far as the shrinkees seeing up skirts, down tops, up towels. Love the writing style and excited to see what lies ahead for our little friends and their busty owners
Date: June 14 2020 1:54 AM Title: Chapter 1
Really great start. I’m hooked already! Can’t wait when the mom comes back. Also wonder where his new home would be set up. I can definitely see him forced to stay in his mom’s room to keep an eye on him. Keep up the great work!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review. I put the house in the moms room after reading your comment, hope you enjoyed it.