[Report This]Date: July 18 2020 7:04 AM Title: 11: A new setup
Very glad to see another update so soon. Really enjoyed reading about Brent's interactions with Haley and Julie along with the increase in size difference.
As for some things that I would love to see I can think of a few.
I'd love to see the measuring interaction again, but with Haley taking it a bit further. Possibly after marking her height she slightly lifts him up and down trying to guess his weight until he releases into her chest.
Another thing I would like to see is more comparison between Brent and the other guys to show how far behind he is size wise.
Maybe add in more scenes to show the power dynamic as Brent has to rely on Haley or Julie when being teased/bullied by other people.
Lastly I don't know how you would do it, but I have one sex position that I've never seen written. Have Brent sitting on another girls behind as they bend over with another girl straddling him. The first girl would start twerking which would control Brent going in and out. Just food forthought.
Date: July 18 2020 12:38 AM Title: 11: A new setup
I'm gonna be honest I was so worried for sec with the whole julia and Brent sex scene... especially because Haley said "I didn't like what I saw when I arrived back at the dorm" so I didn't realize it was a dream LOL.
Not liking the way julia went from gentle and shy to straight out considering stealing him from Haley and potentially having sex witn him against his will. Well see how it goes from here.
brent also needs to watch out for Daniella and jessica now that they have a giantess fetish...
once again my small Critique would be the non labeling of the POVs. So far it seems to be between brent and Haley but If you do end up writing from other characters POVs I strongly suggest labeling them before each part.
Other than that excellent chapter as always ;) and I'm impressed that the length in the chapters continues to get bigger haha.
Author's Response:
Haha you're responses are what I expected them to be ngl. I like using the surprise factor, makes you have to think a little bit, but not too much. That's why I refrained from labeling the POV. And I'm 99% sure only Brent and Haley will use first person POV in the story. But I think maybe in my next story I'll label the POV if I have to since I'm going to avoid writing another sophisticated story like this one. I glad you're enjoying the story!