Date: October 18 2020 1:08 AM Title: The Beginning
Hi WofP. Thank you for a really exciting and very well written story. Your way of describing the feelings of the characters (Annabelle) is perfect... Chapter 4: "" but for Annabelle she would be airborne for several seconds, crash into the giantess' palm only to be lifted into the air again. This allows the reader to soak up and identify with the shrunken girl. And even makes you want to be in her place. LOL! Description is very important when there is no visual support. But I would like to ask you if it is possible to send some indication of the appearance of the characters through links to photos on the net for example. Know that I care a lot. I encourage you to continue writing this story with as many chapters as possible because one long story is better than several dozen short stories. And this is the opinion of most of the readers and writers I have contacted.P. S. I always have to translate into French. and your story goes very well in the translator. this is not the case for all the stories on this site; this is why I will be grateful if you continue to use literary language. While waiting for your answer I would have one or two proposals for the continuation if you allow it. Keep writing. Thank you
Date: October 14 2020 12:59 AM Title: The Beginning
You really are an excellent writer, you capture all the personalities really well. I love how demeaning the co-eds are to their little and how much of a desire they have to belittle and possess her. They never waste an opportunity to remind her of her place beneath them and I have to say I love Harper the most - she seems to know what's best for little Annabelle and feels like it's her right to keep her as a pet. Her jealous streak was really exciting and illustrates her drive to win ownership of little Polly. Another favorite moment: Leah scratching her under her chin... so humiliating :)
Date: October 05 2020 9:35 PM Title: The Beginning
Damn. I only read the first three or four chapters and I ended up feeling guilty all day. You did a great job of showing how insane and casually cruel the four girls are, and something about how you wrote Anabelle made me feel like a monster for not doing something to help this fictional character.
Awesome work... though I can’t promise I’ll keep reading. The horror-story style of writing and the fact that I felt like a heel after reading doesn’t make me feel... good, and that’s usually what I want out of reading. Still, just because it’s not my style doesn’t mean I don’t appreciate the great job you did.
I know they aren’t very common on this site, but I hope our leading lady gets a happy ending, away from her tormentors.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the feedback! I definitely know horror isn't everyone's cup of tea (especially the way I write it). I plan on publishing other stories that fall on the more "gentle" side of things, which might be more your speed. Also, I can't speak to the ending, but I do plan on making it feel earned.
[Report This]Date: October 04 2020 2:44 AM Title: The Beginning
Great story, loving the interaction between poppy and her owners. Look forward to seeing more :).
Date: September 26 2020 10:09 PM Title: The Beginning
Love this, brilliant story!
Date: September 20 2020 7:53 PM Title: The Beginning
exceptional. pls. continue.
[Report This]Date: September 19 2020 11:37 PM Title: The Beginning
I'm dying to see the story continue, please don't stop. Can't wait to read chapter 4.
Date: September 06 2020 4:44 AM Title: The Beginning
I love it so far but there's a bunch of weird spots where the words and dialogue become weird scribbles like "x335;x688,x376" for some reason
Author's Response:
Thanks for letting me know! I think I got them all, but when I copied and pasted my story from another word document, it turned all my italicized words into some weird code. I had to manually go back and type it into this site's word document.
I'm glad you're liking the story!
Date: September 01 2020 5:56 AM Title: The Beginning
Lots of promise shown so far, really excited to see where the story goes. Great work!
[Report This]Date: September 01 2020 3:31 AM Title: The Beginning
Incredible start and delicious trickery by our hosts.
[Report This]Date: September 01 2020 2:25 AM Title: The Beginning
ok but like... after reading the summary then the story, where's the logic in that? (other than a crush and vore fetish?) they wouldn't have to fight if they could just rein it in for ten seconds and realize there are more than enough shrinkees to go around.