Date: April 27 2022 12:29 AM Title: Chapter 30
So i as was just wondering if there would be another chapter before the end of this month, totally fine if its not, just wondering.
I am looking forward to Naomi cause as i said in a previous chapter she has in my opinion had the least amount of on screen interaction with Annabelle save for the swallowing and the makeout session in chapter 20, which is the first time anne got lost i think in her role. ALso this will be interesting because unlike the others she will have to compete with her sister and that will drive her nuts,
Author's Response:
Oh definitely, I'm aiming for this weekend actually. I only saw your comment because I've been coming back to recheck some plot details. This chapter is going to be another long one (big surprise, right?). I just checked and it's at 9,000 + words so... I have maybe two more scenes to write and that should take me a couple of days to finish and edit.
This chapter has been really fun to write (take that how you will) and I'm excited to see how you guys react to it.
Thanks again for your continued interest, Ralgar.
[Report This]Date: April 15 2022 4:01 PM Title: Chapter 30
Thinking about my last comment in ch. 30, an idea popped up concerning honesty and the next arcs. It’s not that Harper and Molly aren’t being honest about their feelings for Poppy, but that They lack a motive to really surpass that wall between. Everyone around threats Annabelle as Poppy, as a beloved pet, so they don’t have a reason to threat her any different, because really doesn’t matter what she says, since she can’t escape them anyway.
The momment Molly threated Poppy as a lover and Anna had her episode was the night she felt her grasp slipping because of the parents interference. But she soon secured Poppy, wenting back to her usual self despite the great shift in her house dynamics.
This might be even more pronounced in Naomi’s house, because she will have, not only her parents inteference, but a direct competition for Anna’s atention with her sister – and Nell uses Poppy real name, genuinely acknowledging her humanity and has a lot in common with the shrinkee (including being bullied by her sister).
My guess: the questions for the next arc will lie with the sisters feelings for Poppy and for Anna – how jealousy will affect all the imprintings.
Sorry for commenting twice on the same chapter again. And Happy Easter!
Author's Response:
You're absolutely right, Mr in A suit. I think you'll see when the FF start getting some push back how they re-evaluate their relationship with Annabelle/Poppy. Based on this comment, I'm sure you'll have a lot to say about the most recent chapter.
Date: April 15 2022 3:19 AM Title: Chapter 30
So first off thsi was another great chapter. YOU go Molly and tell your bitch of a mother ( use that term very loosely) off. I loved that she defended Poppy ( Annabelle), it does so some serious growth on her part. That talk at the end did really show that she has grown, cause she's right earlier in the story she wouldn't have cared why Annabelle was being disrespectful, only that she was. Now she does actually care about Poppy ( not Annabelle, not yet, but I do think she will in time).
I love that discussion at the end about why the giantesses think the way they do about owning a pet person, its fate/ the universes/destiny/God, if u weren't meant to be a slave/pet you wouldn't be, but since u are in that position u are meant to be that way, it finally clarified what harpers parents said both in the initial meeting ( because they can) and what they said in The Abbots first chapter. That reasoning is as old as time and very human. I really liked it, it helped to humanize Molly and by relation the other giants as well. That scene was sweet to, because Annabelle was right Molly was actually treating her like a person for the first time in this story and i loved it, i really hope this is a trend that will continue when we catch back up with molly.
Now on to the dream sequence, I loved that dream, i loved the spicy scene even if not as blunt as some others, also yes Molly's butt does need some screen time. I really have enjoyed these dream sequences for the fact that it allows you to show ( instead of tell) us her in psyche. This one was very poignant that Poppy is the dominant right not, and that ending was very scary, and I do think Molly was some what right about why the dream freaked her out, cause she does care about the 4 even though she hates them. Poor Annabelle is in trouble.
Now i do think Leah is next, would prefer Naomi because I cant wait for Leah but i think she should be the last. I am also excited for Naomi and to see how clingy she will be especially with her sister around, so this should be fun. Also i am in trepidation for the parents of Naomi, and of course the Governor. Naomi i think will be clingy and very sweet on Annabelle. Hopefully her parents arent as bitchy as Mollies but we will see.
I think Leah should be last because it fits her to have the last word I think, and also it will build her jealousy that she will not have had any interaction with Poppy at all, so i think she will feel very threatened by that, and she will have missed poppy to. Honestly i don't know what to expect from the Governor other than emotional manipulation.
Now some thing i have been thinking about is your proposed what if, (plz yes) I have a thought, i ahve two areas that i would like to see a what if on, the first is how would things have played out if on that first night she had left before Harper stopped her, and two how would Harped have reacted if Belle had chosen not to come that night. My main thing is if she didnt have the initial massacre to bring back up, i do think bell would have been so love starved that she prob would have attached to one of the 4. ALso my other big what if is if Zoey had scene her at the house. THat one I have no idea how that would play out.
SO yea still loving this story and i cant wait to see where this ends up.
P.S. How proud were you of that line in chapter 22 i think where leah stills thanos's line about not taking pleasure in killing shrunken. ( THat was a great line and i loved the delivery).
Author's Response:
Haha, I figured you would like the scene where they tell her to fuck off, Ralgar. I'm glad the ideology of the BSA is being conveyed. I think in each chapter, we understand more about about how they perceive the world. Unfortunately for Annabelle, a lot of their values do not align with each other.
And I would agree with you about Annabelle struggling with Poppy. Only time will tell how she'll be able to handle it--or if she'll be able to handle it at all.
I think you'll be surprised of the order of the remaining FF.
About the what ifs, I'm constantly daydreaming about that night that Harper and Annabelle spoke. It truly is the catalyst for everything. I don't think the FF would've allowed her to leave. This isn't mentioned (we really only see 10% of what's actually happening, because the story is mostly told through Annabelle's perspective) but there were suits guarding the perimeter of the house, just in case anyone attempted to escape. If Annabelle attempted to escape, it would've soured the night (in the FF's opinion) because they would have been forced to skip the bait and tease of the massacre, and jump straight into the crushing and eating.
Now, the story of Annabelle not coming is ridiculously interesting. I've created an entire story in my head, so I think I have to write it. It would be a mini story though--not a one off chapter. And you're not far off about Annabelle reacting to the FF differently if she were in the dark about the massacre. (Okay enough Ralgar, you're getting me too hyped--I still have to finish this story).
I'm not going to address the Zoey scenario because anything I might say could potentially be a spoiler...so take that how you will.
P.s Haha, I didn't know that line was something Thanos said (I haven't seen that movie in years--gun to my head I could not give you a single line of dialogue). But he and Leah have a lot of similarities, so I guess it makes sense .
Thanks for commenting, Ralgar, your reviews are always a highlight of my day.
ALSO!
SPOILER FOR CHP. 31
I know most people were expecting Leah to be last (I understand this), but when you read the remaining FF chapters, you'll understand why they're in the order they're in.
[Report This]Date: April 13 2022 4:16 AM Title: Chapter 30
Man, you have my utter admiration for the dedication you put in your writing. I am officialy a fan and I am sorry for not commenting on ch. 29, but I think it was for the best.
First, I never thought Poppy would give up on Molly, because I don’t see Poppy and Annabelle as entirelly separate individuals, and her imprint episodes with both Harper and now Molly are proof enough.
Annabelle interactions with Molly are, in my humble opinion, among the cutest in the series because, being who she is, Annabelle empowers Molly - she isn’t judgmental towards her and is capable of recognizing her good traits and efforts even after everything that happened (the shrinking, the torture and humiliation). I think this is a bit true to all 4 giantesses really.
And that’s exactly why Poppy’s comments about Anna not being an equal to Molly as well as Molly own remarks at the end leave a sour taste. Especially because Anna deserves her love and Molly really acted as a person in love with the shrinkee! You don’t say sorry to a bug, you don’t fight your sadistic freaking rich parents for a bug! You don’t endure chores for a bug! And you certainly don’t need a bug like Molly admitted needing Poppy!!
The giantess even says Anna should accept the feelings she secretly harbors for her... well talk about yourself. What would happen if one of the 4 actually admitted being in love with the shrinkee?
God! This chapter and Molly got me so frustrated! Would she actually punish Anna after everything if she had continued? And just as I was starting to shipp Anna with all female characters, even Anita. And the dream sequences were giving me hope... but not Mrs. Gates. Mrs. Gates can drop dead.
Molly is down to my least favorite character (I love her) and will remain there unless she confess her love for Annabelle... Now that I think about it, using her real name could be a sign of true closeness... Oh God... I am starting to doubt any of the four really love Anna again. TT_TT
What a great chapter, your effort really shone in every line.Can’t wait for the next one. And I know you said it wasn’t an invitation for predictions, but as we are entering what feels like a crucial part of the story, I have to look into ch. 2 again. I wouldn’t be myself if I didn’t at least tried LOL.
Author's Response:
Thanks Mr in A suit, your words are very kind.
I'm a bit biased, but I also agree that every interaction one-on-one with each giantess have some really cute moments. I also understand what you mean about Molly and Annabelle being really compatible in a way that affects their relationship in a way that's different from the other FF.
Ha, I agree with you about Molly's comments, there's a lot of cognitive dissonance going on with her (really all of the giantesses).
Ah, the love comment. Your comments are always so difficult to reply to Mr in A suit, because I have to be careful not to spoil anything. Okay, I'll say that there is a scene coming up in a few chapters, in which this issue is brought up. It's not particularly long, but it is commented on.
Ha! I've been reading a lot of theories about what I was referring to, and honestly you guys are a lot more intelligent than me. It makes me embarrassed to say what it was now, because your theories are a lot more sophisticated than what I had planned (actually that goes for a lot of the upcoming plot)
I mean I'll just come out and say it: It was a C plot for two of the FF. Their relationship has always been tumultuous, and it will be explored in an upcoming chapter, but it was going to reach its breaking point soon. This is the element I was referring to. The scene I was referring to that I was debating changing was essentially how that breaking point was going to be conveyed. The cannon straight-forward way I was to write it was through violence (I think it was you who commented about Annabelle being on the floor while Nell and Naomi fought, and I said that I already had a similar scene prepared with a different set of characters--this is what I was referring to).
The other way I was going to convey their climax was through well...different means.
I'm not saying anything more! I still haven't decided what I'm going to do about that scene, but it's coming up soon, so I guess I have to make a decision.
Anyway, thanks again for your comment Mr in A suit. Once again, you have given me an existential crisis.
[Report This]Date: April 12 2022 7:38 PM Title: Chapter 30
This was amazing. Very nuanced and got our girl Molly all the attention and love she deserved. I reaaaally like everything that's going on in here. Molly standing up to her parents after Anabelle went through some intense torture was as sweet as Anabelle standing up for her. It was amazing. I loved that dream sequence, Molly as an actual giantess fits really well and Poppy becoming bigger and bigger on the dream sequences is clearly an indication of how much she is winning the battle over Anabelle's mind. And well, I do appreciate some love to Molly's ass. I
Is interesting that Molly stayed nuanced; she is nice, gentle, loving, and a match in personality and trauma bonding for Anabelle but her views have been warped by her parents and the organization they created. She operates under "If shrinkies are slaves is because they are naturally weak and so deserve it because they let it happen" which is some actual rhetoric used for slavers back in the day, only with shrinkies they do are smaller and weaker so is easier to be convinced of it.
Everytime there is an imprinting episode Anabelle loses a bit of herself, and the next comes stronger. I think next will be Naomi with perhaps some Nell and their parents so Leah gets last spot and the last word unless some Zoey or whatever happens?I...don't want a surprise xD Naomi and Leah deserve their time and I'm quite excited for Leah specifically. In case Naomi is next I'll go ahead and say I'm not a Nell fan, and that I think Naomi's parents will be another nightmare.
My ranking hasn't changed much, if at all, so far Leah is still my number one, Harper two, and then Naomi and Molly. I think Anabelle imprinting with Molly could be nice if Molly keeps her parents at bay, though I still prefer Harper over her. Can't wait for Naomi and Leah!!
Author's Response:
Thanks Narou!
I love writing the one-on-one scenes of Annabelle and the FF. They're always very revealing. Those dream sequences are the most difficult to write, but they're also my favorite parts to write, so I'm glad you appreciate them (and Molly's ass).
I'm glad you said the thing about Molly's rhetoric, because that's what makes their ideology so dangerous (and we'll see more of that going forward) because it's based in pseudoscience that has proven to have been historically effective (although this story doesn't exactly take place in our universe).
I think you'll be slightly surprised by the order of the FF, but everything is done for a reason. I'll also say that I am so thrilled that although Zoey has physically been in maybe two out of 30-something chapters, everyone seems to be excited for her return--as you should be.
As for the FF, I'm curious to see if your ranking shifts after the backstory chapters.
Thanks again for commenting Naoru! I always like seeing what you think.
[Report This]Date: April 12 2022 7:16 AM Title: Chapter 30
Already torturing poor Anna?
I can't really understand the need to drill this into her head though seeing she has a one in four chance of imprinting on Molly thus possibly making this a colossal waste of their time. Anita seems on of the nicer monsters who have come to interact with Anna during her trials with the Fearsome Foursome, a rather nice lady on the surface who just happens to work for outright monsters. I do always feel bad with the Anna self harm sections as she really worked hard to try to change for the positive only to get kicked right in the stomach via her kindness with a stranger(Harper).
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Always nice to see Anna using her smarts even in her shitty circumstances, she's broken physically but her mind is still sharp at least beyond her interactions with Poppy during her daydreams/breakdowns. I imagine Poppy is hiding away since this has no bearings on her titanesses thus no reason to intervene with Anna's suffering.
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Holy fuckballs, there is a lot to unpack in this chapter piece...
Anna standing up for Molly was incredible even with their checkered past, Molly does seem like she is the least shitty of the foursome if she had a better up bringing/more supportive parents etc. It doesn't excuse what happened but explains it tremendously. For Anna to actually seemingly bond with her depending on the rest of the chapter speaks volumes for her compassion for Molly and Molly's potential goodness bleeding through the further we move on in the story.
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Another one of Anna's lucid dreams, it seems to be bringing her back to her senses somewhat after her sleep deprivation broke her mind enough to seemingly show bond like traits with Molly. Not sure if she can fend off giant Poppy so easily but the size difference makes me think this is more serious than previous attempts at taking over.
Molly once again seems the most human of the four and also I kept expecting her to remind Anna to "don't freak out" but still there seems to be a lot more in common between them than we thought.
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Ah, Harps.
Always there to look after and slightly annoy our fair heroine. Though it was nice to see the solidarity of the foursome by showing her happiness at Molly standing up for herself. Now if we could just get Naomi to be nicer to her sister.
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Go Anna, still trying to help Molly despite all the trauma she's brought upon her in the past few months. If she gets out of this mess one day she'll definitely deserve some sort of award for her dedication to helping others despite insurmountable odds and inhuman conditions.
The sins of the mother rear their ugly head allowing us to end on a cliffhanger as poor Anna's emotions tear her apart. She is right to stand up for Molly to her parents but all the same she still hasn't taken their values and beliefs out of her. It might take time to truly purge Molly if they end up on that road but Anna is truly fighting an unwinnable battle as we close up shop.
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The dream sequence was top notch as always, you always craft them with such happiness before the foreboding terror sets in. As for who is next I will take a shot and say Leah gets her moment in the sun.
Author's Response:
Hey Adam,
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I would say each of the FF's families are probably at least 35% more confident about obtaining Annabelle than they should be. Also about Anita; I think that's the dangerous thing about the BSA. Most of its members seem like normal, nice people...at first
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I love a smart Shrinkee. I've been working on other stories, and your comment made me realize that most, if not all, of the protagonists have noticeably above average intelligence. I gotta stop this though, because it forces me to do things like spending an hour researching the history of Poland's market economy.
I love reading about your imprinting theories, the answers are coming up really soon.
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I gotta say, I usually think of a specific scene when I think of how to hit certain plot points for my outline, and the scene where Molly and Annabelle defend each other was definitely one of the first things I thought of.
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I'm glad you're digging the dreams. They're usually the longest scenes to write, because sometimes they're so nonsensical that I worry you guys might get lost.
I'm glad you caught the panic attack lingo slipping in there. I wanted to show their similarities, and despite Molly's insistence, maybe Shrinkees and people without HDD are more alike than not?
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I think the hardest part of the cage scenes in these FF's background chapters has been deciding which giantess gets screen time. I think Harper made the most sense in this chapter, because I always imagine her always having the CCTV footage of Annabelle's cage on in the background--or at least checking on it more frequently than the other giantesses.
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Annabelle's morality is a huge part of this story. I don't think the story would even be still going if Annabelle wasn't as virtuous as she was. That's why I established her moral nature early with the whole Carrie and the cherry jar situation.
The giantesses and their own indoctrination is probably Annabelle's biggest obstacle.
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I'm glad you liked the dream scene. And I guess you'll see if you were right about Leah being next :-)
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Thanks again for the comments, Adamx. As always, you have some great insights.