[Report This]Date: June 20 2022 8:10 PM Title: Chapter 31
Absolutely never any need to apologise WriteofPassage - we all love your writing, but fully appreciate it takes time and life can get in the way.
Great to hear of the exciting opportunities you've had recently :)
Very excited for the next chapter, and conclusion of the best story I've ever read on this site.
[Report This]Date: June 10 2022 6:40 AM Title: Chapter 31
@Ralgar, WriteofPassage has already stated several times that they are busy with their own personal life and you go all thanks and then a few days later you come to ask "is it done yet??are you updating yet??" and is not even the first time you do it. For some reason you keep coming just to poke the author demanding updates, and at this point you are starting to be rude. This story has always managed on a slow update schedule. This is not a paid job, this is a hobby and the author can post updates whenever they are able to or wish to do so. Just wait like the rest of us, and stop coming like a child on a road trip "are we there yet?are we there yet????"
Stop being annoying, respect the author, their time and their personal life. The update will come when it comes, so for once, please, pretty please with a cherry on top wait for it without complaining.
Date: May 19 2022 7:50 PM Title: Chapter 31
Toe Jam: I feel bad for her, she seems to just want to be Leah's one and only. I like the dynamic between her and Annabelle.
Byte: He's a good boi. It's honestly refreshing having a completely able and competent tiny in such a dour environment, at first he almost felt too cartoony but I came to like that. I am glad he's back and hope he comes around more, I would like to see more of this plot line.
Warren: Put him down, kill him. Though I admit I am not as into cruelty as most people reading this story probably are, I found him to be almost too evil, though that might be because baby eating (symbolism aside) was so heinous it took me out of the story, both due to the evilness and that I don't like thinking of children in these stories.
Looking forward to see where the story goes, despite not being a fan of cruelty the narrative and Annabelle's plight has captivated me and I am very interested to see more!
Author's Response:
They'll be more Toe Jam in upcoming chapters--don't know if it will be what you're expecting though.
Byte is a good boi. He is definitely over the top, and when he starts to get more scenes you'll see why.
Hahahaha! It's so funny to see the different ways you all react to these characters. Warren and Zoey seem to be the most polarizing (Although, everyone agreed that Mrs. Gates' should've burned). I'm with you on the children thing though, I try to keep them in the peripheral--or only referenced (like in this chapter).
Thanks DarkStarGoddess for commenting!
Date: May 15 2022 1:24 AM Title: Chapter 31
I’ve been meaning to ask if this is your first story ( if so then I think u have real talent), if not where else do u have stories posted.
Also have u Thought about posting this story elsewhere, like archive of our own, or literotica. Just wondering.
Author's Response:
Yeah, this is my first story (hence the pacing and timely uploading problems), but thanks. I don't really know how those other sites work, I posted here, because this seemed like a very specific type of fetishy story and those other places you mentioned I think are a bit more broad? I don't really know enough about them though.
Date: May 04 2022 2:07 AM Title: Chapter 31
Well this was an interesting chapter. So instead of out right domination, she went for straight manipulation, yea u get a choice, ( as long as its the choice i pick). So then we go to the governor and he is about what I expected, caught me by surprise though with the other tines though. You also caught me by surprise with poppy looking to the governor as a candidate (can i just say that Poppy has very lousy taste in candidates). I liked toe jam a lot, I really am interested to see where you go with her.
Now i really hope the next chapter we see a lot more of Leah cause I was really looking forward to her and we didn't get a hole lot with her this chapter. I am very curious to see what she will do to establish that Poppy is hers and that her father has no place in that relationship. She should have known that Annabelle would never where that collar, so i am really curious to see what she does.
You also caught me by surprise with Byte and his return. I didn't expect his return until after the 4's chapters. Also I really hope that statement about killing shrunken who have been exposed to her blood doesn't include Rachel, hopefully its worn off of her by now, but we will see. Also yea u keep teasing this commander ( who is totally her sister).
So the governor is now in play, cant say i saw that coming. You have made a very interesting villain with him, I want to say he is probably a sociopath, and also a little unhinged to with his messing with Anne's mind on her mother, also the way he went after that one guy even beating him after he admitted to the raid. I get a kind of Joker vibe from him, which is good cause I love me some joker. To bad i doubt he has a Batman counter part.
So yea I see where Leah gets her attitude from, though she seems far more stable then her father. This is per speculation on my part but i have a feeling that shrunken would be better off ( for a given value of better) with her in charge of the BSA as opposed to her father. Also plz don't have let her have eaten kids ( i know that might be asking for to much) I don't know if i can stand her being redeemed if she ate kids to. I know there should be know difference from eating kids and college students and killing shrunken in general, but damn it there is, if your going to kill some one don't be sadistic about it, just do it. From what we have seen, yes she has gotten off on domination she hasn't been down right cruel except to Nich and Amy. SO she can be cruel but doesn't do it very often. I really like Leah and I don't know just want her to be better. I like how she was handling Toe Jam, they seemed to have a some what decent relationship ( if still massively wrong and messed up). I know that's after years of indoctrination though.
I am very excited for the next chapter and then Naomi well.
Author's Response:
Haha, yeah Poppy truly has awful taste. Glad to see you like Toe Jam, because she'll be making more appearances beyond Leah's chapter. And yeah the first part of of these FF's typically acts as the introduction to their home lives, or a showcase of their parents.
Byte is a super fun character to write. His perspective is also interesting, and I'm excited to share his worldview in the upcoming chapters. The Commander (whoever she may be ;)) will also be appearing soon.
I'd say the governor is a bit more reserved than the Joker. He may not have a batman counter part but that doesn't mean he's completely unopposed.
Ha, I will say the FF were not around for that specify kid-eating fiasco.
I honestly can't comment on anything else you wrote because I'm afraid of spoiling things, but I will say Leah is in an interesting position right now where she needs to consider Annabelle's feelings if she wants to successfully manipulate her, which makes for an interesting dynamic.
Anyways, thanks for commenting as always, Ralgar!
You got some interesting thoughts that made me consider some things, so thanks!
[Report This]Date: May 02 2022 7:17 AM Title: Chapter 31
Okay I have a confession to make. I really like gobernor Windsor. He is a sexy, manipulating, evil motherfucker, and from the set of parents he really is my favorite, so when the spotlight went to him I was really happy. Now, I do expected him to go for manipulation over sex or punishment/training, but I wasn't expecting him trying to get Poppy to imprint on him at all. I really doubt that will ever happen, but it showcases the weird rivalry relationship he has with Leah. Now, what does makes him worthy while the Abbots weren't?Can't be cruelty, they are cruel too, and literally ate a shrinkie like if it was the meatball scene from Lady and the tramp, can't be attractiveness since the other dads are attractive too, so, what is it?what do you want Poppy?
With that said, Leah will always be number one darling in my heart, and her seeing Poppy sing her father praises had to be awful for her. So of course she is tense and anxious and will want for Anabelle to imprint on her ASAP. Now, what will this end in?who knows. I'm indifferent to toejam, don;'t think she is a type 0 at all just some deluded girl, Byte confirming that Anabelle's blood brainwashes tinies into servitude which bodes bad for when Naomi's mother experiments on her blood and possibly discovers it??
Waiting for more of our beautiful goddess Leah next time!!
Author's Response:
I agree Naoru! There's a reason I introduced him first to Annabelle. His cruel laugh when she first tried to call for help in one of the earlier chapters was meant to be the first instance of a bait and switch from one of the FF's parents.
Hahaha what does Poppy want, indeed. The imprinting whys, whos, and hows will be explained in a few (two??) chapters. Honestly it's a huge reveal that will amaze some people and disappoint others. The clues are there, but I don't think anyone can guess because I haven't connected them yet.
Not going to say anything about the blood thing because I'm afraid I'll spoil something, but keep up that thinking, Narou.
Thank you for commenting again, Naoru, your lust for arguably one of the most evil characters in this story always makes me laugh.
[Report This]Date: May 02 2022 4:39 AM Title: Chapter 31
I called it right with Leah which means the next round of guessing should be a cinch!
As for the clothing choices I would expect nothing less from one of the fearsome foursome so Anna herself shouldn't be too shocked either. A very nice save on her reasoning to want to see the other shrinkees again but judging how you've written the nightmares it is entirely understandable how bad they'd be to Anna living them in real time.
Steven seems to have his work cut out for him after her time with Harper and especially Molly so hopefully he's got something cooked up to reach her before Poppy makes another powerplay. I do enjoy tea so I am curious to see what tea time in a nightmare scenario would be like...I'm guessing like Greta's death in Dream Child but we'll see.
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I don't mean to trivialise this tension with a fetishy wonder but I really need to know more about "Toe Jam" now and their life with Leah.
That said the Governor is a tremendous prick, kudos on his ability to truly dig in and grate people when they are at their lowest. Teasing Anna about her mother AND making her have to decide the fates of other people is really epic, he was also the one who screwed up her initial escape attempt over the phone so hopefully he has an ass whooping coming from somebody before we reach the end of our journey.
As always it was nice to see Leah stand up for Anna ever after all the degrading treatment in her bedroom. One on one or in the foursome they seem irredeemable but every once in awhile when with their parents you kind of see just a wee bit of humanity shining through the monstrous exterior.
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It would seem even Poppy has forsaken her Goddesses for this monster.
Truly dark stuff, I knew they were evil but eating kids knocks that level way higher than even I expected. Anna is a wonderful person but even she has to understand there really isn't much for these people to fight for right now.
Maybe down the road if the resistance ever manages to storm the castle so to speak but there is not guarantee of that so she could be selling them a bill of goods no matter how much she wants to help them. They've already lost everything they held dear and facing the prospect of more misery may just be better off being eliminated as opposed to having to pledge their loyalty to satan himself.
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Poppy playing very dirty here.
You're really putting poor Anna through the ringer and if she gets through this unscathed or at least unbonded really deserves an ice cream. She's been holding out for as long as she could but Poppy seems possibly the most focused she's ever been.
Though if she -were- to bond with him it would create quite the interesting rift between him and The Foursome as they would no doubt blame Leah for this. So in a way maybe if Anna loses herself she could potentially sew the seeds of discourse that could crack the foundation of the BSA if one of the girls(I'd guess Molly) were to spill the beans out of anger or jealousy.
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Once again the Foursome's actions seem to be explained by simply meeting their families.
Leah showing passion is nice given her calm demeanor most days but depending on who ends up on the receiving end it might not be great for -everyone-. At least Anna managed to save the people even if there was some shenanigans and things she is glad to not know about involved so involuntarily Poppy actually made things somewhat -better- for somebody at least...as better as they could be given the circumstances.
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I'd still like to learn more about Leah and Toe Jam's time together but judging by her attitude either she is also a type 0 or Leah destroyed her mind enough to block out anything but praise for her to mask any pain or sadness Toe Jam might have had prior. Given how far gone she seems to be it makes me wonder if -she- possibly sold out the others somehow or helped the Governor decide on eating the children in the first place and this is her coping mechanism to deal with her grief like Joy in We Happy Few.
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I fully understand Toe Jam's anger here.
Possibly years of dealing with Leah's bullshit and god only knows what level of painful tortures just to be upstaged by what she perceives as an ungrateful interloper who the girl she pledged her life to cares more about than she ever could for her.
The poison blood thing seems a curveball here but you seem to have removed the prospect of using it against the Foursome or their families. Doesn't mean it won't come up later on if needed I imagine.
Surprise appearance by Byte but always nice to see Anna get a little reprieve from the insanity with somebody who cares about her. I also have my theory on the Commander but I'll wait until the potential reveal to share it.
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Toe Jam:
The sub/footboy in me loves the name and the way Leah seemingly treats her at times. The normal human reading this really feels like she is hiding a dark secret that Leah either forced upon her or somebody else did leading to her mind being broken. It could just be from years of being under Leah's rule that she just accepted things and shut herself off but I still think there is something there behind the broken psyche.
Byte:
Always happy to see Byte, he gives Anna somebody else other than Steven to keep her grounded in this insane situation. Given his abilities he also seems like he will come in handy later if Anna ever hopes to escape or they somehow manage to bring the BSA public etc.
Warren (The governor):
A true piece of shit and this is coming from both a fan of pieces of shit in various movies/games/shows at times and somebody who has read many stories with some truly evil giant folks and rp'd with a few over the years.
Leah:
My guess is she wants to break Anna before she leaves for Naomi's.
Where Harper and Molly failed due to their underneath kindness she is definite ballbreaker of sorts and seems determined not to let her escape without full of imprintation of Anna. Perhaps she feels Naomi will no doubt do the same given they are the two alpha females of the Foursome so she wants to get out ahead of her.
Gemma: I'm not sure yet but given her demeanor maybe a former Nanny of Leah's who looked the other way on a lot of things and helped foster Leah's more terrifying tendencies whilst showing her a bit of love and care that her parents likely didn't...sensing a theme here so far through three of them.
Author's Response:
Ha! If you can guess the next series of events I'll be seriously impressed.
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Lol well I guess you got your wish about Toe Jam. She is such a tragic character, but so fun to write. If she hadn't shrunken, she would've been an honorary member of the FF, so it' s interesting to write her interactions with Leah.
Haha, I can't say anything about ass whoopings, but I will say that even after Leah's backstory chapter is over, he will still be an influential part of the story.
And the FF truly care about Annabelle more than anything else in their lives, they can justify the way they torture Annabelle, but they really don't like the unpredictability of their parents' interactions with Annabelle.
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Oh you haven't seen anything yet. They've hinted at some of the BSA's doings, but it'll be a few chapters before we really get into it.
Oof Adam, you almost got me talking about future plot points. All I will say is how the resistance and the captive Shrinkees interact will be interesting.
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Annabelle isn't really a fan of ice cream, but I agree that she definitely deserves a good book or something.
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Hee hee, I like your Toe Jam theories--though I guess now you know the truth. Somehow it's a bit worse maybe?
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Toe Jam's anger is definitely understandable, I agree. But it comes more from the idea that because of what she believes, means Annabelle's status as a beloved pet shouldn't exist. If she was taught and shown that "humans" and "Shrinkees" should only have a strict master/slave relationship with minimal to no affection, then Annabelle being coddled is in direct opposition to that belief. I'd like to think that she had dreams of Leah showing her 1/4th of the affection she shows Annabelle, but felt guilt about said dreams because they go beyond what a Shrinkee "deserves" or should wish for.
But if Annabelle just shows up and is receiving all of this love, then that means it was possible for her to receive it during all of those years (at least in Toe Jam's mind who doesn't really understand the concept of Type 0s). Annabelle's existence and perceived loving relationship with Leah makes Toe Jam look inward and question her value (even as a Shrinkee), which frustrates her and causes her to become enraged with Annabelle.
Annabelle and her blood will definitely be coming up again--along with Byte and the Commander.
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Wow you were kinda on the mark with Toe Jam, Adam!
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Yes, I also like it when Byte comes. He and Annabelle have a very natural partnership.
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Ha! I actually like Warren (I'm biased though).
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Good guess about Leah. She most certainly wanted to break Annabelle down. She had been planning since a few chapters ago when she first spoke to Oliver in the parking lot. And yeah, she and Naomi will definitely take on the more aggressive approach when dealing with Annabelle's imprinting.
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Also very close with Gemma.
You're really observant, Adam X
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I'm not sure if you'll be thrilled with what's coming next for Annabelle, but you'll definitely be intrigued.
Thanks for commenting as always. You always make me snort aggressively when I read your comments.
Date: May 01 2022 8:13 PM Title: Chapter 31
I thought we were going to Naiomi, but it looks like we're getting the 'final boss' early!
I knew the good governor was going to be a handful, which means to say, he wasn't as much of a shocker as the Gates were. Still, he has lots of dirt on Annabelle, and a mess of a mind to use it to its full potential. He's the perfect overarching villain to this tail, and you portray him to his diabolical potential.
Leah is going to be a tough nut to crack. Annabelle, despite the fact that she was submitting to Molly and Harper, also managed to get them wrapped around her little finger. Leah, however, appears to have a rather healthy relationship with her father, at least, as good as you can get with that man. She's competing with him, this means she'll be alert for any signs of Annabelle's machinations in a way Harper and Molly weren't. She is my favorite of the four, even though she's probably the coldest.
Good chapter, although I felt we got less development out of Leah than we did Molly or Harper. Looks like more character intros than anything, especially with Toe Jam. I'll be waiting on the next chapter with baited breath as always.
Author's Response:
Hey Divediveburners
Yeah I'd always planned on Leah being the penultimate FF--should make sense as to why when you read Naomi's chapter. I'm glad the governor's diabolical-ness is apparent. Though I'm not sure how ready you'll be to see the extent of his grand plans.
Yup, I put Leah and Naomi towards the end because they're more shrewd when it comes to Annabelle's motivations. They're not completely blinded by Annabelle's cuteness. Leah and her father have a relationship that works for them, but In don't know if a psychologist would label it as "healthy." They do certainly love each other though.
Hah, your comment about Leah and Toe Jam is super funny to read after the most recent chapter.
Always great to read your comments, Divediverburners!