Date: March 01 2021 7:31 AM Title: Chapter 1: Intro to the game
I am loving this story. The different character personalities, the dynamics between the two main characters, the world you have made. Please keep going!
[Report This]Date: October 05 2020 11:09 PM Title: Chapter 2: Observing how they fare
I'm interested to see both how bad it is for the one guy during Kristi's workout and for the other guy if Sam forgets about him while that burrito affects her.
Author's Response:
You will have to wait and see. I do not know how many parts i will make, but you wil have to wait and see.
[Report This]Date: September 26 2020 11:48 PM Title: Chapter 1: Intro to the game
I'm excited to see where this goes. Being trapped in the back of panties with gas and/or sweat is my favorite concept! I espiecally like that they already warned with what types of food they'll eat and what activites they'll be doing. Really excited to hear about the potential of the guy who might get sewn to the back of the workout panties.
2 piece of feedback. It would help to break the writing down into more paragraphs to make it easier to read. Also "qotation marks" around what a character says would help with readability too. Other than those, great work!
Author's Response:
Thank you for your feedback I really appreciate it. I probably will edit this. I copied it from my deviantart. Two very different formatting websites.