Date: March 17 2021 9:45 AM Title: Chapter 9, Week 5: After School
I loved the story and details. Can't wait for Noah and Alexis to get to know eachother better.
Author's Response:
Thanks! Hopefully more to come soon!
Date: March 14 2021 10:56 PM Title: Chapter 9, Week 5: After School
Hello again! :)
I think it's fair to say that this is another good chapter with some lighter stuff before dropping a big bomb which I hope that won't prove fatal to any of the boys. The game was desribed quite well and I really enjoyed it (although sometimes I REALLY want to slap myself on the forehead for having a hard time at figuring out that these girls were actually playing volleyball xD).
Moving on to your question from response to my last review: No, I'm not a lawyer or law student. I just happened to play a visual novel series called "Ace Attorney". These games are about solving murder mysteries while defending people were wrongly accused of commiting a murder. Our goal is to collect evidence and useful informations from people involved in the case during the investigation segment, and then use them appropriately in the trial segment to expose lies or mistakes in witnesses' testimonies. This will lead us to proving our client's innocence and help us find the true culprit. As you might expect, there are many law terms in these games introduced in a way it is easy to understand and they later just sort of stay in your head. Some court shows from TV were a bit helpful, too. The first three games even have an anime adaptation, which was the beginning of my interest in anime, manga, light novels and visual novels, so you may call me an "otaku" if you want to. :)
And even if you're not interested in this kind of stuff, I really recommend this series. :)
When a trial was mentioned and I got a feeling that penalty was way too severe, I remembered a motive from the sixth game, which was about a country with the law stating that of defendant is found guilty, their sentence goes double for the defence and the aftermath was that there were hardly any lawyers there. I know this probably doesn't have very much in common with your concept, but I figured if people were willing to shrink criminals, then in some countries it would be no surprise to go even farther. Also, if judges aren't complaining about their situation, then the only possibility that comes to my mind is that they have less work (because, as you mentioned before, trials became rarer), but earn the same or maybe even higher amount of money as before.
I think it's fair to say that policy of dealing with criminals changed from resocialization to disposal. It feels like the first person to put this idea to use may have had very similar sense of justice to the protagonist of "Death Note". I know this question most likely calls for another story to be answered, but I wonder who was our "Kira" in this situation.
Moving on to the next topic, I wonder whether Ms Johnson can actually be moved by something, if she watched and/or read any kind of tearjackers. If she can, then I would imagine her as a kind of person who's moved, but when it happens, she doesn't cry and it's hard to tell just from expression on her face.
I also want to include my thoghts about what would I do if I were in this kind of reality.
First, I would be very afraid of dating any girl (for the record: I only have interest in the opposite sex), because of possibility that she might be enjoying trearing shrunken people as playthings and not have any regard for their lives. Even if I actually DID fall in love, I would just wait it out until this feeling will have disappered.
Second, I would start collecting money in order to move to the country where policy of shrinking convicts isn't put to use and is not going to be anytime soon.
I also think it's not exagaration to call this kind of reality a dystopia (I have a feeling that I'm repeating myself from the last review here, but even if that's the case, why the hell not? xD).
Last but not least, this universe gives so mamy possibilities, that you pretty much never can run out of ideas with it, so keep up the good job. :)
Greetings from middle-eastern Europe!
Have a nice week! :)
Author's Response:
You all need to pay attention to the chapters that come before the new ones hahaha. But yeah, I've heard a few times that I should've been clearer about what they were playing. I figured that between the tight black short shorts, the number of players, and the net between the two sides it would've been enough lol. Anyways, I'll tweak that before I release the next chapter. The next chapter is gonna drop a few big bombs for sure. I'm really hoping that I can do this next chapter justice. I can not confirm or deny whether or not someone will die though. You're gonna have to wait and tune in!
Sounds like a cool game! I figured in just the way you word things and what you seem most interested in you're someone who might be working in the law and ethics field (hence why I guessed lawyer or law student!). I've heard so many people talk about Death Note and now you're another. I'm really gonna have to check that out.
I love that one comment you made and it's had me really thinking over the last few weeks. I've been trying to think of how I wanted to reply to that. I think you're definitely right, even though I wasn't originally intending on the world being a dystopia (to be honest I'm not even sure what I was originally intending in terms of world type), that seems to be exactly where it's heading (or has already become). And that's really had my mind working as I've been thinking of new ideas and tweaking others. It raises an interesting question of, well who is the dystopia for? Cause I don't picture the government having an iron grip on society and everyone fearing to step outside their doors. It's almost a mini-dystopia for men since they're now being punished for their actions (women too, but to a lesser extent). But at the same time I'm picturing it being more of a "hawk waiting on the branch" type world where the hawk is waiting for just the right animal to pick off even though there could be a thousand pass by. People can still do bad things to one another without being shrunken and handed off to be disposed of, but every once and a while someone will do something bad enough to justify someone stepping in and putting a complete stop to it. Cause we've heard Ms. Johnson explain a little bit about the world to the disposables and she makes the point of "the government is willing to consider even the smallest of crimes." But the interesting part about that line is we're listening to her from Troy's perspective and not seeing inside Ms. Johnson's mind. Cause besides Troy, so far we've only met really bad people who were turned into disposables. So it begs the questions again, what justifies being turned into a disposable and why was Troy shrunk? Is Ms. Johnson being serious when she says that even the pettiest of crimes will justify shrinking, or could it be something else? Sometimes it's well deserved. Sometimes examples need to be made. Sometimes there's a little more beneath the surface.
And yes, I'm definitely seeing criminals being more "disposed of" than "resocialized". Which comes back to the motive of at first they were shrunken and given a second chance, but then they saw just how badly the rich and famous wanted the tiny people. So who gets a second chance now? The origin of this world would definitely be a complex one and I'm not even sure if I have the answer to it haha. I definitely have a lot of rough ideas and a blurry picture, but I'm not even sure if I would be capable of writing a convincing origin of "this is how shrinking criminals started and grew into what it is now." There would be sooo much to unpack. We're sort of seeing shards of that origin story inside this one though.
I also love your other question about Ms. Johnson. This is absolutely something I've thought of for a long time (even before I started writing chapter 1 and was just starting to outline the characters and the story). The end of Chapter 1 (before we see her in present day) was a pivotal moment in her life but it was like the tv was shut off just before we got to fully see what Ms. Johnson's reaction was to the death of Todd. We only got to see a split second glimpse. That was the first (and perhaps only time) Ms. Johnson has ever actually lost someone she cared for. Since then they've just been meaningless disposables and test subjects. This question does not require another story to answer (lol) and you will get an answer to this in a future chapter. Lets just say that Noah (or maybe Alexis) is going to be speaking with someone who knows a lot more about Ms. Johnson than he and Alexis do.
Girls are fun though! And they just wanna have fun :) I can totally see why you would be feeling this way and you won't be the only one to be feeling this way for long. I've purposefully started the story off by introducing disposables first before we get into any major personal stuff though. We'll see if you can be convinced otherwise before the story is finished hehe. Who knows, it might be a back and forth pulling though and maybe that's what the author will be going for :)
I totally agree with the number of possibilities this world has to offer though! I know you said that you had an idea that you wanted to share with my privately and you still can. I'd love to hear it! Not sure if you saw, but in one of my other chapters I posted some contact methods. This review section works for me too though! Instagram: LittleLearningGTS, Discord: AprilMJ#7988, Email: LittleLearningGTS@gmail.com.
Thanks for your interest and support! Nighty night from Canada :)
[Report This]Date: March 07 2021 3:37 AM Title: Chapter 9, Week 5: After School
Another good chapter, AprilMJ.
I'm no basketball expert, but I think that it's five players on the court for each team - not six.
Author's Response:
Thanks!! Yep, like TomSpeedy said, they were playing volleyball today. Sorry if there was any confusion there. I kinda thought that between the end of the last chapter (chapter 8), the short, tight black shorts, and the brief comment on the net and the two sides that that might have been enough. I could add a sentence or two to clarify that and get rid of any doubt though. I appreciate the review though! Glad you're enjoying it!
[Report This]Date: March 07 2021 3:03 AM Title: Chapter 9, Week 5: After School
I was expecting this chapter tomorrow, so seeing an update today puts a smile on my face.
Also unexpected was the entire chapter dedicated to this game. I thought maybe it would be just a small part, but then I remembered that you are going for 50 chapters so a sports game chapter makes sense now.
One good thing about this chapter is that it expands this giantess theme beyond the classroom and home settings. I’ve read many stories of giantess school and giantess home stuff, but not much with sports so this was refreshing.
Haha, just like Noah, I also forgot that Ms. Johnson was the coach. I’m so used to her being that sexy teacher that anything else seems strange. Lol.
Wow, that cheerleading position though. In normal real life, I would’ve said no, but in this giantess setting, I agree with Noah and Brayden and would also take this opportunity too. When Ms. Johnson was describing the details, I actually thought they would be attached to a girl since she told them not to move too much and such. My perverted mind thought they would be in some girl’s pants and they shouldn’t move much. Haha!
Well, turns out there was a third cheerleader in this game. And that’s Little T. Part of me is hoping this is tiny Tom because his name starts with T Lol. Not to mention that Ms. Johnson wanted to take him home that night too so I’m guessing this is one of Ms. Johnson’s special toys.
Hmm, I used to think that every one of these girls have their own tiny, but I guess not. It seems more like Ms. Johnson has a bunch of tinies that she distributes to each girl and then collects them back. I mean, these girls were really excited about Little T. Something tells me that this isn’t the first time Little T had to be inside a girl’s panties during a game. ;)
I also love how Alexis keeps teasing Noah throughout not only this chapter but also in this entire story. Especially in this chapter where she greets the boys by stepping on the bench close to them to scare them a bit. Later she knocks Noah into Allison’s thigh and at the end, she almost hinted at group sex play. Noah, Gatlin, Allison and Alexis. Now wouldn’t that be exciting.
Let’s talk about Allison. I like her. Maybe even more than Alexis. (But Ms. Johnson still remains my favorite). While she doesn’t seem as sadistic as Alexis, she does give me naughty vibes and probably admires Alexis’s confidence to utilize in her own way. Also, her physical description appeals to me more than Alexis. I love it when people can wear jeans and it looks amazing so I believe I have a decent idea of how Allison looks, and wow, what a first impression. Lucky Little T got to spend the game in her pants. Now that’s hot.
I found it odd that Noah seems unfamiliar with female orgasms. I thought maybe he would’ve seen some videos online, but here, he couldn’t even connect the dots when Allison went down while smiling. Lol.
Also, it’s interesting that Ms. Johnson said that she was initially taking Little T home, but since Allison orgasmed during the match, I guess Little T is being punished for doing “too well” of a job down there. Haha! I guess that’s why Alexis said “mine” in the locker room. She gets to punish him which makes sense since Ms. Johnson hinted that Alexis was more cruel to disposables/tinies anyway.
Probably my favorite scene in this chapter was when Alexis told Noah that Little T was Gatlin. Holy shit, my mind exploded. I literally stood up and began connecting dots. First off, I immediately remembered what Ms. Johnson said and that was that she was taking Little T home that night. Then I thought that Gatlin’s fate seems similar to my review for a previous chapter where I had that fanfiction part where Ms. Johnson decided to use Gatlin as a sex toy. Second, I also thought of that scene where Liam was used by Alexis as a sex toy and then Ms. Johnson almost took him home that night. Gatlin was about to complete that fantasy right here. Lol
Then of course, Alexis was only teasing, but damn, simple teases like that make my heart race faster than any horror movie. I mean, imagine if that was true. Ms. Johnson kidnaps Gatlin and told the girls he was Little T, but the girls were too excited to realize it was Gatlin and Allison quickly shoves him down her shorts without even glancing at him. Now that’s a sexy plot twist. Man, whoever Little T is, that guy is living my fantasy.
The game is finally over and Brody, Ryan and Gatlin discover a hole on the floor behind Ms. Johnson’s desk that leads right into the girl’s locker room. Now, this seems suspiciously convenient. First off, the shrink ray is at Ms. Johnson’s desk. Second, once shrunken, you don’t even have to travel far to get to the locker room. It’s just a hole in a wall. Much better and safer than walking into the hallway and through the doors.
Basically, I believe someone already tried this stunt before. Either that, or Ms. Johnson knows about that hole. These ladies probably deal with escaped tiny men all the time, so I’m sure they are watching all the holes and cracks in the rooms. Maybe they deliberately transfer tinies through that hole. Imagine Ms. Johnson tells that girls that there’s a new shipment of tinies on Monday that she will smuggle in through that hole. Now these girls will be waiting on the other side as these boys decide to walk though and once they do that....well, they are fucked. Lol.
I think it’s funny that they plan on sneaking into the girls locker room on the day that Ms. Johnson will teach the class about dildos. Now that’s a class I wouldn’t want to miss so I will gladly stay behind to attend that lesson. Who knows, maybe Ms. Johnson brings a dildo to class, but it breaks or something so now she needs to borrow a student for the lesson. Human dildo time would be awesome.
Or Ms. Johnson walks into class with a dildo already inside her so she pulls it out and lays it flat in the middle of the class so they could see. The class feels intimidated at the size of the dildo considering that it’s huge compared to them and that whole dildo was inside Ms. Johnson. So Mrs. Johnson continues talking and the whole class is listening to her, but one student gets curious and walks up to the dildo and lays down exactly right next to it so he could measure his body to the dildo. Another student spots the guy laying down and decides he wants to try it too, so he goes to the other side and walks toward it. However, this time, Alexis notices this and nudges the dildo away from him and the guy watches as the dildo rolls on top of the first student pinning him underneath the dildo. The second student pointed to the student under the dildo and looked up at Alexis, but she just put her index finger to her lips to “shh” him and then pointed to Ms. Johnson so he should listen to her. The guy glanced at the dildo once more and then finally returned to where he was sitting. Class finally ends and the second guy forgot about the guy stuck under the dildo since the class got really interesting.
One by one, the students got enlarged and left until it was just the second guy, Alexis, Ms. Johnson and the shrunken guy stuck under the dildo. The second guy walks over to the dildo to save the other guy, but Ms. Johnson quickly intervenes and grabs the dildo instead. “This will only take a second” she says. The guy watches as Ms. Johnson holds the dildo by the base so her fingers can’t feel the shrunken student. The student must have been stuck from the dried fluids which fused him to the dildo. She is still undressed so in one swift motion, she slides the dildo up inside her vagina and he watches as the shrunken guy and the dildo both disappear inside of her.
Now Ms. Johnson is dressing up and sees the look on the students face so she asks, “Like what you see, young man?” The guy’s face turns red and nervously states “there was a guy stuck to that dildo.” Ms. Johnson stops changing clothes and looks at Alexis. “Is this true? You kept watch, right?” Alexis smiles. “Of course I did. I didn’t see anyone get stuck with the dildo, however I did see someone get rather close to it, didn’t you?” She said poking the young man playfully on the shoulder.
Ms. Johnson smiles understanding the situation. “Not to worry, everyone will get a chance to play and touch with my many dildos that I have in my collection one day. But not this dildo”. She pats her crotch. “This dildo will remain inside me all day and probably all night if I’m in the mood.”
The student stood there in shock while Ms. Johnson began to exit the classroom. “Alexis, once you’re done, please lock the door. Thanks”. And just like that Ms. Johnson left with a tiny student stuck inside her attached to her dildo. Alexis and the young man walked out of the classroom together, but before they separated, she told him, “There indeed was a student stuck on that dildo. But we don’t have to let Ms. Johnson know, now do we?” She winked at him. “At least not yet anyway. Who knows, maybe I should have let you get stuck on her dildo instead. Now wouldn’t that be fun.” She teased as locked the door. Alexis then blew him a kiss and walked away leaving him speechless.
Another amazing chapter! I just added you on discord, and I can’t wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Hehe yeah I was originally intending for this chapter to be a lot shorter but about a month ago I had the idea of Ms. Johnson recruiting students to serve as tiny cheerleaders and then from there I thought it would be pretty great to have them stand on the bench, sandwiched between the girls haha. After all, I'm pretty sure no man could resist something like that, especially if the girls were all wearing short volleyball shorts who could potentially squash them at any second (as Noah points out lol). And as fun as that scenerio is, there was actually some purpose behind this chapter. Mostly to set the scene for some future stuff and to introduce Noah to the team. Sort of builds up the school a little bit too since all we've seen so far is the one classroom, the soccer field/track, one hallway, and a blurry changeroom. Slowly building up the world (rather than just a house or a room) is pretty fun for me. And options for the future is a good thing :)
I seriously considered letting the girls manhandle the two boys like they do with Little-T but at the same time, Ms. Johnson likes to feel in control of things. Especially when it comes to the boys' safety. So if she lets the girls drop them down their shorts, things could go wrong pretty quickly lol. It's also meant to build up the disposable vs personal tiny man contrast a little too by showing that taking risks with someone like Little-T is way easier than it is to take risks with someone like Noah or Brayden. Gonna be interesting to see who Little-T is! It does seem like he's a fan favourite with the girls though :)
I definitely wanted Allison to come in with a bang. We're gonna be seeing her again for sure. I'm very glad to hear that you've got a good mental image of what she looks like. In every good book I've read, I always have a crystal clear picture of what the characters look like. So I really wanted that feeling again here. I've got pictures saved of the real life people each character is based on (whether it be people I know, people I've seen in person, or people I don't know personally) so I'm curious to know how close I've been able to describe them all. It's reassuring I've been able to paint at least a partial picture though!
We're getting pretty close to some interesting conversations between the characters so I think a few of your questions are going to be answered soon. I sort of blame Noah's ignorance on being in a foggy headspace (he was surrounded by giant, beautiful, senior high school girls), he'd never seen a real girl orgasm before (they're usually fake online) so he'd be quick to deny, and just being caught up in the worry that Allison was actually injured (he's a pretty nice dude). Plus he's just an innocent grade 9 boy, as one of the girls so cleverly pointed out haha. And rest assured that Little-T eventually made it home to Ms. Johnson. He might have a little wear and tear but nothing too serious. He'll be back :)
Hehe, yeah I figured Alexis' tease about Gatlin would be a winner (it certainly was for me) haha. Just the idea of your best friend being trapped inside a pretty girl's thong with no way to help them. I loved Noah's "What?!" and Alexis' "Do you really think I'm that mean?" lol. One side is freaking out while the other is basking in the glory of her harmless joke haha. Poor Noah, that's what happen's when you befriend a fiesty young lady. And at this point (even after this chapter) Alexis is still really the only one who could actually recognize the boys. So they'd take whoever Ms. Johnson is handing to them without much of a second thought haha. They might be able to spot Noah or Brayden but it's pretty unlikely. Allison would've had other things on her mind (like enjoying Little-T's company and then recovering from it), and the rest of the girls only took passing glances at Noah and Brayden. Hint hint.
Those are certainly interesting theories about the hole in the wall! The boys did also make the comment that they had to do some digging (both figuratively and literally). Meaning that they probably had to search high and low for any sign of a weak spot and then they actually had to work on busting through to get it wide enough to even think about crawling through it. The next chapter is gonna comment on the size in more detail but think of it as being just big enough that you could poke your finger into it. There is a little bit more reasoning behind the meaning of the weak spot but we'll visit that in the next chapter :) You're pretty close! And remember that it's still an "if Ms. Johnson teaches us about dildos" hehe. The boys have spent a good while daydreaming about what they hope Ms. Johnson is gonna teach them. That lesson may not be for another few weeks though :)
Love the dildo mini story hahaha! There will definitely be some unaware stuff coming up somewhat soon. Still working on those details though. I've had my mind on this next chapter for quite a while and what the aftermath of it is gonna look like. I think we've got a lot of really fun stuff coming up soon (a lot of super sweet and gentle stuff and some... not)! Accepted your discord request. Thanks!