[Report This]Date: May 16 2021 1:44 PM Title: Chapter 10, Week 6: Spy Time
Hello again! :)
After reading this chapter, I kinda have mixed feelings.
It is very exciting, but also kinda frustrating, because reader is well aware of the fact that if some of the boys didn't decide to try and peek despite the situation being CLEARLY DANGEROUS, what was awaiting them later wouldn't have happened in the first place.
I also have to mention that I don't like the idea of characters dying (especially when thery're important characters or seem to have potantial to add a ceratin aspect to the story that makes it more "colorful", for the lack of a better word, and then we lose them right off the bat. The examples would be, for instance: "Clannad" or "Sword Art Online" (the first is visual novel, the second is light novel, and I've watched anime adaptations of them).
I know it may sound absurd, but if anyone dies in this story, I want them to at least have a proper funeral.
Also, maybe I expect too much, and this probably is a material for another story, but it would be quite refreshing to see a character who's CLEARLY OPPOSED to the way things are in a world decribed in this story.
And speaking about a serparate story, I have some ideas of my own, but when I think about some of them, I feel like they would be quite difficult to pull off, knowing my not so good abilities to think about something, or rather my lack of motivation caused by lazyness and the fact thar English is not my native language. I think I should just sit down and start writing a pilot chapter to see where this goes. xD
Those who like the idea of making criminals "disposables" and those who hate them. Those who treat "disposables" like disposables while collecting them and those, who collect them to save them and maybe prove that they still may be useful.
These motives are the factors that would add very much to the setting and INCREASE FURTHER the number of possibilities. That's a material for another story, but still useful.
Moving on to the next topic, I would like to say what way to die would I rather. I would rather be trapped in Virtual Reality MMO game, where in-game death means real death and die while fighting some strong monster than being crushed/devoured by a giant woman. That's because in the former case, I would be able to put up a fight while in the latter my ability to hold on would be pretty much nonexistent.
In this part, I'd like to come to the contents of this chapter for a moment, because I have just thought about something really weird that would probably qualify as a PLOT CONVENIECE. I thought the best way for boys to get out from this situation would be for magnifying glass to HAPPEN TO BE in the changeroom and for Noah's sister to HAPPEN TO find it and then HAPPEN TO want to use it to identity the tinies and find her brother and resolve the situation (to some extent) peacefully. They would later get an earful from Ms. Johnson (although I get the feeling that this particular event will happen one way or another).
Last but not least, thank you for writing this chapter!
I look forward to what happens next! :)
Have nice day! :)
P.S. After confirming that you're form Canada, I can say that our coutries' flags share the same colors (although with different tones of red). I think it wouldn't hurt to share with you this little funfact and a little hint at the same time. :)
Author's Response:
Deaths are certainly an interesting part of a story. They're very big and bold but as the saying goes, it's easier to kill a character off than it is to write him alive. I hate when a TV show or movie uses a death as pure shock value and nothing more. It's so obvious when they do something like that and then a few episodes later you can tell they're regretting that. As you'll see, Part 2 does include the first major death of the story. Death is sort of a natual part of the world (though some tiny men live A LOT longer than the low life disposables) so I definitely wanted to establish that fairly early on. I also don't like characters to feel "safe". I've never enjoying reading something or watching something where you're like, "he's the main character so he's invincible." But at the same time I also don't want to treat death lightly. I want any and all deaths to be very purposeful and actually contribute to the plot of the story. There's nothing worth than a meaningless death. There are always consequences to something.
I do have in my notes (among a lot of other things) to write a spinoff story from someone who was wrongly convicted of something and sentenced to being someone's disposable, and he knows that he's not where he deserves. We haven't met her quite yet, but I think I have an upcoming character who would sort of fit the main role of that story fairly well. It would be a tricky story to write well so it would definitely need a fair bit of planning haha (much like this one did).
Sadie was definitely in the changeroom for a reason, but I can confirm it wasn't to save the boys :) Glad I got you guessing a little hehe. I think you'll find how the boys escape interesting and pretty unexpected. I would be very impressed if anyone is able to guess how the boys will find their way out of the changeroom. Could maybe guess the general idea but I think my details should be a bit of a surprise.
Definitely lots more to come! Thanks for following along and always providing some interesting insights!
Hmm, the flag that first comes to mind is England's flag. Solid white with a slightly darker red cross... Same two (ish) colours as Canada. Are you British? I love British people. They have the best accents haha
Date: May 03 2021 4:33 PM Title: Chapter 10, Week 6: Spy Time
Hi AprilMJ, glad to see you are back and congrats on graduating!
I'm very curious to see how this ends up for the group. I know the threat of bad things happening was always there but I wasnt sure if you'd actually let something truly bad happen to the students! I feel like there still might be a chance for ms johnson to show up last minute to save the day, but... maybe not.
At a minimum, whatever students make it out (whether it's all or some) will have to face some punishment from ms johnson, right? I feel like an appropriate punishment for them spying on girls in the bathroom would be some bathroom related punishment I hope! I think it would be cool to have her make them serve detention inside her butt. You could even find a way to make them impervious to being digested and have her pass them through her system. Just a few thoughts!
Anyways, glad to see you back and am anxiously awaiting your updates!
Author's Response:
Thanks very much for your comments! And thank you! If very curious to see how the chapters ends as well hehe. I think it should leave the boys in a pretty interesting place. They've certainly felt the consequences of doing the wrong thing already but they're far from being out of the woods. Ms. Johnson's reaction is gonna be an interesting one. Who's to blame... Herself? The boys? The girls? It's a complicated thing the world has thrown on them. This chapter should definitely be felt throughout the rest of the story. Even though it may not be directly stated way down the road, I think it'll offer a few major life lessons for the boys and stick with them. If only Ms. Johnson would swoop in and save the day... The boys could only wish. They won't get out completely unpunished though :) Losing their classmate is a pretty big punishment in itself, but Ms. Johnson needs to make sure it never happens again... After all, can't have a bunch of tiny pervy boys roaming about spying on whoever they want lol. Love your ideas! Thanks for taking the time to leave a review! Still got a lot more left to go. Nobody is every truly "safe" in the world of tinies!
[Report This]Date: May 03 2021 6:30 AM Title: Chapter 10, Week 6: Spy Time
Wow, mistaken identity themes are very sexy especially in the giantess setting. The fact that these girls think they are disposables makes my heart race. I love it! I mean, they won't have any mercy toward these boys so it's crazy to think what they would do to them.
They inspected the guy in the sink but didn't inspect Brayden and Trevor. Hmm, I would've thought they would poke and prod their bodies to check them out. Then again, the unaware aspect of their identities makes this even sexier.
I feel like Mrs. Johnson is the only one who could save them. Holy crap, this is intense!
I hope Mrs. Johnson also has her own mistaken identity scene like this and traps a student in the crotch of her panties like Sadie, except Mrs. Johnson would know about him and keep him stuck there.
Speaking of Mrs. Johnson's tinies, the guy that Allison found must have been the guy that Mrs. Johnson probably kept inside on the way to class. Then she probably fetched him out in the bathroom and dropped him off in the sink. Nice.
I only see this going in a few directions. One way is that Mrs. Johnson could rescue all of them before one of the students dies. Another is that Allison actually swallows a student and kills them and Noah and the gang will return to the classroom and explain everything to Mrs. Johnson leading to some punishment. Last option is that one of the girls recognizes Brayden or Trevor and they stop torturing them.
Damn, either way, this is the first time this story where soemthing crazy is about to happen to a some characters that we actually care about. (The tinies in Mrs. Johnson didn't connect to me much). So to see these students actually in danger, scares me, but also excites me.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
There's sort of always some poking, proding, inspecting, and admiring going on when someone is holding a tiny but it's hard to point out everything haha. The reason for being sort of light on the inspection stuff this chapter was because I have a more detailed moment coming up later. Plus there's also that level of excitement around "holy crap, we just found two more!" So it becomes almost like kids on Christmas morning shredding the presents and not paying super close attention to each present haha.
I can confirm that the little guy that the girls found first was courtesy of Ms. Johnson :)
I actually take a little bit of inspiration from the first few seasons of The Walking Dead. I can remember watching each episode and wondering if anyone was going to die (because deaths would come so suddenly and out of nowhere). So I would really like to capture that feeling in this story. There's a sense of safety around some people under certain circumstances (ie. sex ed class with Ms. Johnson) but there are also a lot of moments of fear around someone you're not familar with or in a dangerious situation. Things happen fast as a tiny man so you better be sure you can trust who you're with (they better care for you and have some experience). Not every chapter will be super intense with the boys on the verge of death though. Just every now and then. We'll see some pretty interesting moments where they're in some pretty fun (and not necessarily sexual) situations. Ms. Johnson should have her fair share of interesting moments by the end of the story :) Thanks for the review!