Your reviews always keep me on my toes lol. So there are a few things going on with Calvin/Trevor/Alexis/Gatlin that I think I’ve written correctly based on the ending of Chapter 10 (but I’m far from perfect so you never know if I missed something). So the sequence that I have pictured is this… Allison takes Calvin and Gatlin, messes up Gatlin, then Alexis saves Gatlin and Noah, but Gatlin doesn’t tell her about Allison having Calvin until they’re in her bedroom in Chapter 12 (cue the drama). Alexis also doesn’t learn about the boys’ adventures until the bedroom because she was so busy chasing down everyone else. At the end of Chapter 10 Noah made the comment like, “go and save Trevor, we’ll fill you in on the rest later.” So we’ve now entered the “later” stage.

I think you’re definitely right about the meeting Allison stuff but I think I can wiggle my way out lol. This definitely could’ve been much clearer, but I think what I was picturing when Alexis asked if they “knew her” is if they knew her beyond just seeing her in the distance (like at the volleyball game). So “met her” is sort of Alexis’ way of poking the boys to see if Allison could’ve taken Calvin and got more intimate with them (since she didn’t know until now but potentially suspected). But yeah, kinda glossed over the details a bit there. Point of that part is Gatlin is having to remember who took Calvin and then Alexis fills in the details on who she is. If I go back and edit that part, I’d probably approach it like Gatlin knows who the girl is but is struggling to put a name to her, even though he knows he should know.

Alexis is an interesting character. I feel like she’s a “I need to be perfect” kind of person but then succumbs to her desires in surprising ways. We’ll sort of see why but I do plan on expanding on the question of “why wouldn’t Alexis use her tiny man for that?” Her character is almost meant to be that one who knows that abusing tiny people is wrong, but finds it too fun to avoid it altogether. There’s a real grey area in there of how much is too much. I think Alexis is also a lot more conservative than we realize. Noah, Gatlin, Ms. Johnson, and Alexis are definitely going to be the main focus now that we’ve got a solid team of supporting characters. The others will always be around though.

Let’s just say Part 3 is meant to be the climax of the chapter lol. Then we return to class and Ms. Johnson :) The events from and post changeroom will sort of always hover around in the story but we’ve pretty much finished with this sequence. Planning for Part 3 next Saturday which wraps up “Week 6” and then we’ll be into “Week 7” the weekend after. There’s about 21 weeks in a school year (including Christmas break).

Appreciate your review as always. Glad to see that the smaller chapters are working. 3000 words is a pretty good number to aim for when it comes time to break up what I’ve written. We’ll keep going with them for the time being.