[Report This]Date: February 27 2022 5:04 PM Title: Chapter 14, Part 2
Hello again! :)
That was quite thrilling, especially the part with Myles. Even though, logically speaking, this couldn't have been the case, I thought almost the entire time that his life will end. There's still some time for that to happen, but I figure the most risky situation for him is over now.
I figure that the girls will be shrunk, too. If that happens, I wonder what will happen to Candice. If she will still be stuck in place where she was when she last appeared, then she may be effectively shrunk down to the microscopic size. I don't think this will happen, but the thought is quite interesting. However, even I that won't happen, another interesting idea could be applied, like limiter that doesn't allow to shrink a person when they already have a shrunk person on them. That might quite an intersting loophole in this world's shrinking system. Using disposable in order not to become one yourself. I know it probably cannot be implemented in this story, but I hope you'll think about it just a little.
Moving on to the next topic, I'd like to speak about the state of the world in your story. When I watched videos of a certain (Polish) youtuber, he made a joke of a sentence that "There are 7 million people in the world". I'm mentioning this because I want to ask whether the world in this story is reduced to such a state or maybe not as severe. I'll seriously need an answer to this question.
Looking forward to the next chapter!
Have a nice week (or two, depending when you'll upload the next chapter)! :)
Author's Response:
Glad you enjoyed it! The Myles idea actually didn’t even make it into the first few rounds of planning but it turned out to be a pretty exciting idea once the chapter started to come together. So definitely glad it found its way in. I’m also glad to hear that we’re at the point where there’s a bit of fear around Ms. Johnson and some uncertainty around tiny people. A little suspense is never a bad thing. But I do think that’s how the boys would feel around her. Although their teacher, she’s still many times bigger and stronger and heavier than they are. So naturally there would be some nerves in there. And they’ve only actually known her for a few weeks.
Your question of whether or not Ms. Johnson will shrink the girls will definitely be confirmed in the next chapter (probably in part 2 or 3). We won’t get to know exactly what Ms. Johnson puts them through. We’ll just get a few hints here and there that should let you piece together the puzzle. Reasoning behind that is I’d like to save a surprise for the next chapter and the chapter after that.
That’s actually a very interesting point… if you shrunk someone with a shrunken person already on them, what happens to the shrunken person? To be honest, this is the first time I’ve ever thought of that question for this story. Completely overlooked it. Cause we’ve established so far that everyone shrinks to roughly 1-2 inches. I’ll put some thought to it, though I don’t think we’ll see it have an effect on the story. Or maybe it will and we can find a clever spot for it.
Population is a very good question because it’s a fundamental aspect of the story world and something that differs dramatically from our current world. Honestly, I haven’t done enough research to say with certainty what the exact world population is. I’m assuming that at this point we would need a minimum number of people to actually keep the world from disintegrating (gotta keep those power plants from blowing up for example). But I definitely picture the population having decreased Significantly during the virus 10 years ago. I’ve had that mental image since the start. A billion or so is sort of what I originally had in mind (again, not sure what exactly would be a sustainable number). And as I’m writing this, I’m also realizing that 10 years is probably a pretty rapid bounce-back from something that devastating (but gotta keep Ms. Johnson’s age somewhat realistic). So perhaps we could argue that the future technology has enabled us to climb out of something like that sooner than otherwise would’ve been possible. I definitely have more behind the question of “what fueled this story” but it’s so complex that I’m currently struggling to put it into words.
[Report This]Date: February 26 2022 1:27 PM Title: Chapter 14, Part 2
I love butt stuff in stories especially when a great writer like you does them. It's so well done, just a question though. Is there gonna be any nose or ear cleaning that the students in detention will have to do? or maybe a person anal enema that they're shoved way up Ms. Johnson's butt to clean out for a severe punishment
Author's Response:
Well thanks! I’ve definitely got some nose stuff in mind for later in the story, but nose and ear cleaning are really just notes that I’ve got saved but haven't found a home yet. I’ll put some thought to it and see if there would be a good place for them. Things related to the butt are surprisingly tricky to do in a somewhat realistic way. Because once something is inside, it’s a pretty brutal place to be. So although nothing is necessarily planned for doing that sort of dangerous stuff, I have been discussing the possibility of Ms. Johnson knowing a doctor friend (who’s already planned for a chapter in the near future) who might have a few experimental gadgets to play with.
Date: February 26 2022 12:07 PM Title: Chapter 14, Part 2
Can't wait for more! glad your back!Hope tonight is steamy for the boys
Author's Response:
I’d say the boys are about to join in on a pretty wild night lol. It’ll be a similar but somewhat different type of danger compared to the changeroom chapter.
[Report This]Date: February 26 2022 6:40 AM Title: Chapter 14, Part 2
Whoa, this chapter is crazy, but in a good way. After hearing why Mrs. Johnson chose these tasks, it made me understand how such simple daily things could be deadly to a disposable.
I also like how each task related to some orifice on her. First her pussy, then her mouth, and finally her asshole. These guys basically got a full tour, haha!
While the first half of the chapter felt like a standard class lesson, the second half was a whole different ball game!
But first, that mouth scene. I do like how Mrs. Johnson seems to be an expert in handling tinies, even on her tongue. I mean, that takes skill.
Also, the way she just swallowed Brody’s shirt. That was crazy. Imagine your hot teacher swallowing something that belonged to you. Sounds kinda hot, lol. Imagine one of the boys just jacked off onto her tongue. I wonder what would happen. Lol.
Also, since when did Brody become this bold? Either this is new, or I forgot about this factor in his character.
Oh, yeah. Also, Calvin is crazy. I remember him being captured by a girl in that locker room chapter, yet he casually charged toward her sphincter with no worry. I thought he would also have ptsd or something or be at least nervous since his twin Trevor got punished by it.
I’m glad Gatlin is still the shy one. If he starting running too, I’d start laughing. I’m always rooting for Gatlin to be humiliated, especially when he is helpless so I’m glad to see his character is consistent.
The situation with Myles is interesting. How did Mrs. Johnson know about what Myles did to Brayden? Sure, someone could’ve told her, but I think Mrs. Johnson would’ve had to have seen this in person to actually put Myles through this. I mean, imagine if Myles did nothing and got accused of it. So I’m pretty sure Mrs. Johnson saw the whole event.
Mrs. Johnson said that disposables could get swallowed, crushed, or shoved deep into her ass. Well, I wouldn’t mind being a personal tiny that also gets shoved deep into her ass. Lol. Sexual torment without death is perfect for me, so that ass part doesn’t sound that bad to me, haha!
I love how Mrs. Johnson’s ass literally swallowed Noah’s brush. That was great. Also, I can’t believe you called her asshole as a sarlac pit. It’s a great analogy, but I admit, it made facepalm. Lol.
Part of me wonders how Mrs. Johnson was able to hold her butt cheeks apart for that long. I mean, that’s gotta take some decent stamina. Or maybe she’s more flexible/fit than I thought. Especially while being on her stomach.
I also like the way you set up Myles ready to be devoured by her ass and then launched by her fart like a rocket. That was clever.
In addition, the way she put Myles in the urinal was crazy. Part of me felt like what he did didn’t deserve that punishment, but man, it was hot to see Mrs. Johnson come up with a creative form of punishment. And I like how you mentioned that the boys might take revenge on him. I was going to comment on that, so nice touch.
However, I also wonder if one of the boys could remove Myles from the urinal and torture him before putting him back in the urinal at the end of the day. There could be some blackmail exchanged or something, but then again, Myles could tell Mrs. Johnson and then she would punish the boys. So I guess there’s that. Lol
There was a statement that Mrs. Johnson said about her using her soap to clean her butt. Now I wonder, was that Myles, or was that another lucky/unfortunate soul to service her? These little comments feel like Mrs. Johnson is flirting with me. Reminds me of when she was messing with Liam. Imagine if Mrs. Johnson asks Liam: “How would you like to be my personal soap?” I would be nodding yes. Haha!
The last thing I wanted to point out was that if Myles got punished for that punch to Brayden, I could only imagine that Mrs. Johnson is only just beginning her punishment with the boys.
I’m guessing that strip club chapter is coming up. I have no idea how it will play out, but I know that I can’t wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Hah! I didn’t even realize we covered each orifice. Isn’t that convenient. Those are, after all, highly entertaining places. They’re the gateways to fun! I have actually been trying to figure out a way to have one of the boys cum inside Ms. Johnson’s mouth and then she swallows it. It’s a pretty great idea but tricky to work in. I think I’ve got a place in mind though later on. It’ll likely be in another one of Ms. Johnson’s important lessons :)
Brody is one of the boys who I’ve sort of tried to relax and portray him as beginning to accept Ms. Johnson. Really just becoming more comfortable with her. I know that I often get lost in the scenario and forget about developing the characters. But ranked from crazy to timid I picture it like: Calvin, Trevor, Brayden*, Brody, Noah, Gatlin. Brayden is an interesting one though because I’d say he was higher on the list at the start of the story, but his experience with Mrs. Hulme really took a toll on him. So he’s just starting to bounce back from that. So in that case, Brody might even be a little more bold than Brayden is currently. There’s also Ryan and Liam but they’ve really become secondary characters at this point so it’s tough to put them in the same list. I do picture Liam as being more of a strategic type of crazy though. I feel like we all know someone like that haha. Then Noah is very quiet, calculated and reserved while Gatlin is happy just doing his own thing and keeping to himself, but the group keeps him involved.
This definitely crossed my mind too, and I liked the subtlety in basically saying that Ms. Johnson has eyes and ears everywhere. We’re slowly starting to learn just how connected she is with the world and the nightclub chapter coming up soon will hopefully develop that even more. So did she see it herself or hear about it later? Only Ms. Johnson herself can answer that one.
Lol! Yeahhh, the Sarlac Pit reference was super cheesy, I admit. But I hadn’t seen an anus referenced that way before so I had to be the first :)
My peer reviewer also caught the extraordinary flexibility that Ms. Johnson apparently has lol. I did dumb it down a little from my first draft (it was pretty crazy) but there’s still a bit of imagination required for that. Don’t think too hard about that part haha. But I don’t think it’s totally far fetched and I definitely picture Ms. Johnson as being a very fit person. Not quite the same as someone like Alexis, but certainly well above average for someone her age (approaching 30). After all, she’s done a lot of travelling as part of her past job (researching and developing the shrinking tech) so all that moving around has done its job. I don’t think I’ve actually outright said it anywhere, but I also picture Ms. Johnson as being a pretty good dancer too. Sort of a part time hobby, childhood thing. So when I picture a dancer, I picture someone who’s very in control of their body. Not sure if that sort of adds to the mental picture.
I would say, yep, the boys could totally go and pluck Myles out of the urinal and do their worst to him. He’s there and completely unprotected. But the boys are also starting to learn that Ms. Johnson is purposeful and you don’t want to mess with that. As much as Ms. Johnson is punishing Myles, she’s also teaching quite a few life lessons to all of them. A) don’t hurt people and B) don’t try handing out your own judgement. There would no doubt be an urge for the boys to wreck Myles, but Ms. Johnson is slowly helping them learn to control those urges. A subtle point, but something that crossed my mind as I was thinking up a fun punishment. The soap… That’s an interesting theory. Does Ms. Johnson use just soap to clean herself, or does she also include a shrunken person as well? I suppose when you think about it, Ms. Johnson could in fact be hinting towards something more. Clever! I try to include as much subtle flirting as I can. Cause I totally picture Ms. Johnson knowing full well the boys are easily wooed by any girl who so much as looks at them. So it’s amusing for her to playfully mess with them a little, knowing the boys actually like it
Myles certainly received a pretty difficult punishment. An afternoon trapped inside a potentially busy urinal while nobody knows you’re there? Yikes. I think the nightclub chapter will be very eye opening for the boys. Dangerous, yes, but shocking would be another word. So although there might be some physical punishment, I don’t think it’ll compare to what they actually have to see. It’s actually kinda crazy how many moving parts we’ve built into this story already. But we’ll just keep having fun with it and let the details work themselves out naturally :)