Date: April 07 2022 10:29 PM Title: Date-us Ex Machina, Part 1
This collection appears to have the potential to be something special. You've said it on the tin, these are writing exercises, and for your own self-improvement. Already, between "The End" and "Date-Ex Machina" you've really cleaned up your style. Even in the relatively messy first chapter, you had a pretty good character voice that kept me involved.
Your characters are nice and wholesome, so far, but they're not carboard cutout stereotypes. Even Sarah, who doesn't show up in the chapter, from conversation alone between the tiny and Stacy, you get a pretty good idea of who she is. All your characters are likeable, and in a gentle romp such as this, that's to its benefit.
Author's Response:
Indeed! Sometimes I'll have some daydreams and I want to archive them on my profile, and usually end up reading them in the future again. Gentle is one of my favorite kinds of giant/tiny interaction. I'll read other stories and they're just so much better than what I can do, but there is a sort of liberating feeling to get these things out of my mind and into the physical world.
As for the characters in Date-us Ex Machina, I'm trying to keep them wholesome if possible to fit the gentle theme, but I don't think I'm very good at making unique characters. I'm looking forward to introduce Sarah at some point soon, and my goal is to make her act sweeter than Stacy, who does not have a secret crush on Theodore.
Thank you for the review, it means a lot to me.