[Report This]Date: October 14 2022 4:14 PM Title: Aquamarine Commandment (Part One)
Loved it, those /d/ threads are great for motivation and ideas, aren't they? Anyways love giant mermaids, I wrote my own giant mermaid story at one point but that's neither here nor there. I'm really looking forward to that second chapter, I'm interested in how our protagonist got cursed, and what lifting that curse might entail. I'm thinking this might be a Shrek type of situation where the curse, while lifted, might leave our heroine in a monstrous form because that's what our hero secretly likes lol.
Author's Response:
Indeed, I had been secretly adding a green text here and there to keep the ball rolling. /D/ seems to be a good prompt generator.
I agree, I've also liked mermaids for a long time as well. They seem so majestic. I also did see your story listed, but never had a chance to look into it yet. I think I'll wait to check it out, I don't want to accidentally rehash anything.
I have a vague idea regarding the curse and how to lift it, but keep in mind everything I do is just improv. I'm thinking about what type of fantasy world this is like, and whether or not magic exists. Curses/occult/supernatural seem to be how it's currently heading.
And I think as long as someone's hot enough, most people could probably get behind a 'size' relationship. Even Edwin. Marina was quick to make sure he wasn't traumatized and apologized quickly. Unfortunately, writing a character with limitations (Edwin) is kinda challenging at some points. Oh well.
Thank you for taking the time to review!
[Report This]Date: October 14 2022 3:07 PM Title: Aquamarine Commandment (Part One)
This entire collection has just been hit after hit of absolute gold.
This particular chapter, in my opinion, equaled that of Chapter 5 with the astronaut stranded on the ice planet. Marina's clearly a powerful yet kind soul, and it'll be interesting to find out what exactly caused her curse. Of course, I'm a sucker for the budding romance between her and Edwin.
You've got a knack for depicting vore, despite leaning on the gentle side. From describing the strands of saliva, to Edwin traveling down her throat and esophagus, you're able to project a vivid, detailed image with an excellent sense of flow. We're not treated to paragraphs on the consistency of the mucus of her throat, but neither are you going ("and then she swallowed him"). It's probably my favorite vore scene in recent memory, and I'm not even into that kind of stuff.
Look forward to part 2.
Author's Response:
I have a loose idea of how to progress the story, but right now I'm trying to keep it interesting. Adding a short detour adventure for Edwin, etc. I had to resist the urge to nuke this chapter, I submitted it in a state which I later decided was too boring. But the handful of reviews you guys leave are enough to help dispel some of these aggravating hangups I always have.
I like vore/ass stuff, so there's always a chance they may appear in one of my stories. Unfortunately I'm not too into vaginal or feet stuff and that tends to be a huge disadvantage when it comes to reading some stories lol. Still, this site is full of soooo much stuff. Thank you for taking the time to leave a review, you're the MVP.