Reviewer: GtsN Signed
Date: January 02 2024
Title: Chapter 1: The mistake
The story was very good in the first chapters, but the further it is going, it feels like ideas are just being recycled. It honestly got me to just skip parts, because i already kind of knew what was going to happen. It kind of feels like that holiday has been going on for months.
This part is just my personal taste/opinion and can be ignored :)// i really hope Levi gets a nice ending. i have nothing against domination i like it even, but the story is turning into just cruelty for him even if he's beginning to like it. The story is evolving into something where i cannot imagine he'll grow back ever, even if he does he's going to be completely broken. And if that happens, how is he going to face his family? Logically he'd not be able to look at them properly, besides most likely looking like a soulless human being by then. I'd be cool to see some kind of revenge actually, something where she'll understand what she did to him.
But you write your story and whatever you have in mind! I'm just some random guy on the internet!
Author's Response: Hi guy from the internet!
Thank you for your honest review. I can see where you are coming from, it is one of the reasons it took so long for me to write a new chapter.
But I had fun writing it these past couple of days and I plan to disrupt their holiday, so it should pick up soon :)
Let me know if you have any suggestions!