The vore lesson continues for Brooke in the School of Civil Service.
Continuation of the School of Civil Service story. Brooke has graduated and about to get her shrinking device. Just as a warning there is talk of vore, but not a whole lot of it in the this chapter. I wanted to describe the Republic in more detail and I hope I have done that successfully. Enjoy!
One of your best stories so far i think, together with part I of the school of civil service. And one of the best stories on this site i think.
I like how you slowly build up the story with lots of attention to details and mood setting.
Keep up the good work. Looking forward to chapter 2.
A different take on the Women's Republic and Brooke. Rewritten by Banfield.
Personally, not as good as the previous stories about Brooke.
I disliked the whole sexual side of the story. It's just not for me. Also the writing and story-building isn't really that good. I don't mean to dismiss Banfields work, but Doorknobs writing is much better in my opinion. The story is too short, it feels unfinished and rushed. What i appreciate about Doorknobs writing is the attention to detail and the way he gradually builds up the story. I also like that his stories are strictly about vore, without the whole sexual seduction thing. I regret that the character of Brooke is not the same as she was in the other stories, where i found her much to be more appealing.
Brooke heads to the Exhibition to try her new device.
Great writing as usual, Doorknob. You really know how to keep things interesting. I like how the story takes a little turn with the Exhibition and the introduction of Rian. I did however miss some vore action, but i guess that's for part III.
It would be a shame if the next part became the final chapter. I really like the character of Brooke and i would love to see her go on more vore adventures. Maybe she can consume her next man together with some friends. her next victim can be some a little more innocent than the man she captured in part II. Just a suggestion. I like the idea of Brooke being merciless to a totally helpless and innocent man. Anyway, great work!
Thanks for the input! Part 3 will have vore for sure. I was thinking of ending this chapter with vore but didn't want to rush it in at the end.
Any chance of a third chapter soon? Would be a shame to leave this story unfinished.
Great beginning of a story! Straight to the action, yet it didn't feel forced. You definitely have good writing skills. Waiting to read more.
On a hot summer day, Alessia decides to go to the pool with her friends. Since swimming makes you hungry, she also buys a Vortex box with shrunken people inside – including Jan, who now begins to have second thoughts on his vorarephile tendencies...
This is an erotic story that is aimed at mature adults with macro- and vorarephilia. It contains depictions of physical and psychological violence that some people may find disturbing. Minors and people who feel that such depictions upset them are therefore explicitly asked not to read this story. Furthermore, this story is entirely fictional and all erotically portrayed characters are at least 18 years old.
Tags: Aware, Casual, Crush, Digestion, Disposal, Fatal, FM/fm, Hard Vore, Human, New World Order, Shrinking, Soft Vore, Unwilling, Violent, Willing
You're by far one of the best writers on this platform.
The detailed and desciptive way you write is unmatched. I'm honestly impressed and slightly envious of your writing skills.
Love the length of your stories too. It all builds up so well and it adds to how immersive everything is.
I'm commenting on this story specifically because it is one of my favorite ones, and that's saying something with all the great content you've created so far...
The part where Lisa lays with her head resting in her boyfriends lap, grins at him and then simply opens her mouth to indicate she's more than willing to eat unfortunate little Dennis after others were conflicted has to be one of the best scenes in vore history lol.
Lisa and Konstantin, along with Hannah, are my favorite characters and I'm hoping to be able to read more about their 'adventures' in the near future ;-)
I find Lisa to be a more quiet and reserved character, but with a possible darker side to it, one that she maybe keeps a little hidden. It is clear however that she absolutely loves vortex and would never pass up on the opportunity to consume a tiny, even if it's someone vaguely familiar to her. Konzi on the other hand is more nonchalant. He doesn't really care about the fate of the unlucky tinies, but seems more than happy to help satisfy his loving gf's cravings.
Lisa and Konstantin seem perfect for writing more couple related content. Perhaps they can be featured in a story together again, where Lisa is fed by her bf like in this one. Would be interesting if Lisa and Konstantin for example come across an ex-bf of Lisa who has hit a rough path and hence came into contact with Vortex. A bit of smut between the two (or three) of them would be wonderful too.
Mentioning couple related content, I also loved the parts where sex was involved afterwards and how to story went back and forth between the perspective of the young couple enjoing themselves and the simultaneous horrific experiences of their tiny victims.
The way you switch perspectives througout basically all your stories is great btw, giving us readers an insight into the experiences of both pred and preys. And the digestion parts are *chef's kiss*.
Hannah I like because to me she is the most complicated and interesting character. As other readers have mentioned before, she is may even be the cruelest of them all. She's obviously completly conflicted and in denail about what she really wants. But gradually she puts her principles more and more in perspective in order to justify her desire. Unlike the others, she's also the one that clearly derives sexual pleasure from tormenting and eating tinies. Would love to read how she would react if she were to come across a young tiny who she knows for sure is innocent... This would put her moral values truly to the test I believe. Will she give in to her feral (and sexual) needs, or will her conscience keep her from going though with what she deep inside really wants to do. Or perhaps this will turn her on even more, as she knows that there's no way to justify her actions any longer. The innocence of the prey would also add to the cruelty of the pred.
I cannot be critical of your work, but if I were to make one general suggestion it would be to focus a bit more on writing conversations between the characters and, when fitting the story, between pred and prey. The conversations you write read so well and naturally, so I wonder why they make up such a relatively small part of your stories.
Again, truly appreciate your work! It's amazing!
Thank you so much for your kind words! :) I really appreciate them!
And yes, I have stories planned for Lisa, Konstantin and Hannah in the future as well. Lisa and Konstantin will play a role in the next story, actually, and I am going to get back to Hannah as well. I agree with you that she is probably the most complicated of all my characters and, in some ways, even more evil than Tanja. She has an inner moral voice that tells her that what she is doing is wrong, but she does it anyway to satisfy much more base desires. And then keeps twisting her principles to justify her behaviour.
I agree with you regarding the dialogue. I need to write more of it, and it's something I'm still practising to make a bigger part of the stories. Between pred and prey characters it tends to be limited because of the way normal-sized people treat shrinkies in this universe (as food that you don't speak to). But I will definitely try to expand it where it offers itself, especially when it involves characters like Tanja or Hannah.
Again, thank you so much for your lovely review. It always makes my day to hear such words of high praise! :)