This chapter seemed to move a much quicker pace than the previous chapter. I would take a bit more time on characterization. It also would be nice to get a bit more description of whats going on. 

The opening sequence was a bit confusing at first. I understood what you were doing, it was just a bit hard to follow and felt a bit out of place. 

I was hoping we could find out how it felt for the protagonist to be balled up in the lint ball, and how it made him feel. A bit of anguish and struggle for him to free himself

The scene where you had the younger sister pick up the sock seems like a scene of wasted potential. As it would have been nice to get more ground level view of protagonist going from the sock to her nose. The humility of being stranded in the sock and further degradation of his humanity as he's stuck to the nose.

I don't want you think i'm not enjoying the story. As so far I really like what you are doing and where you are going. I really hope you continue this as there is alot of potential here.  I can't wait for your next chapter. The idea of being trapped in a nose is rather unique. 

The improvements you make from chapter to chapter in your abilties is great. You have a good balance of detail and progression. It sounds like you are doing multiple endings. It would be nice to see one happy ending, and then one ending where he's stuck this way. 

That way can please both sides of the equation. This has been a fun read looking forward to the finale. 

excellent story, I really enjoy how realistic your characters are coming off. The writing is top notch. I meant to comment sooner but your pounding out chapters a torrid pace. Everytime i woudl finish one, you'd have another one for me to read. 

I cant wait to see how you play all this out. The characters of steph and kat are great. 

I  must say I am really enoying the casual conversations the girls are having and how they are leading into the interactions with wanda. 

You're writing is superb, but it is always is so it almost goes with out saying. I'd rank you up their with DX Machina as some of the best wordsmiths around. 

I have really been enjoying reading this story. Overall, i really like the Ava character the best. I like how she is such a flawed character. She has done some horrible things to scott and other people. However, she was liked to by her parents or led to believe something that wasn't true. She has had rumors made up about her. She was more just following what is considered a societal norm then truly doing anything bad to Scott which is interesting. 

So to see her go down this path and explore how the other half lives is really interesting. I find it the most interesting chapters are the ones with her and seeing how this will unfold. 

I do like the scott chapters as well. But I feel his character isn't in some ways as fleshed out as Ava even though he has had more time. He is a victim as he was diseased and shrunk. However, I feel like i don't know him as a person as well as Ava. There isn't as much to relate to with Scott.

Overall, I have been reading your story for a few weeks now and definately look forward to my lunch break on friday. As the new chapter always seems to be posted when i head to lunch. Keep up the great work. Looking forward to your future installments.