interesting plotline you have going CC. I like the idea of a reporter trying to uncover a mystery. It's a shame she spilled the beans, but it was nice twist. I hope she isn't to hard on the little guy.

great start.

Author's Response: Thank you, AF! :-D It's always a morale-booster to earn the praise of a seasoned professional like yourself.

Really great descriptions. I liked how you took your patience describing everything. It really made for a great picture.

this was a fun story, thanks writing it.  It would be interesting to see what happened to loren and megans new slave.

great start good descriptions. Can't wait for chapter two.

I was wondering when the fact in one of the middle chapters you had jack say that he had alot of time of time to think about how he shrunk and he explained to sophie how the shrinking process worked.

i have been patiently waiting for that nugget to come back into play and finally it has.

I tend to read your stories chapters in large clumps, and this one hasnt disappointed. I like the creativity of your chapters, the jenny character is fantatisc. I enjoy the personality of the carly character. I thought she was just a sadist for awhile but you reallly helped define her more in this story.

You are an excellent author, and a creative writer. I cant wait to see how you finish this off. 

Great story from start to finish, but I am curious what became of carly.  I kept thinking something would be mentioned of her. 

This was a unique premise, with a great setting and indian characters aren't used  very often so that was unique. I was left kind of wondering why she was doing this though. Is it a tribal thing? a family thing? A fun read though.

Very interesting first chapter, your writing is superb as always. One has come to expect that from you so i would be more shocked if it was anything less.

You did an excellent job defining the character of Ms. Young in the first chapter as someone clearly is a strict teacher who a students would think was a jerk. It would be interesting to hear her justifications for her teaching style. As i think it would help flesh her out as a three dimensional character. 

The unique twist you provided in this story is that atleast based on the first chapter that she has shrunk in front of the whole class. Normally in these types of stories it just one on one situation. a student is staying after, or a teacher shrinks inbetween classes and the first student who comes in finds him/her. However, the fact that the entire class has seen this makes me curious how your going to balance out the characters.

On the critical side of things I would have liked to see a greater definition of the setting as I also think that would define the characters a  bit more for you, especially when I have noticed based off your other stories they are very much more character driven then plot driven. People from the midwest are quite different from people from east and west coast. Is it a more rural area or urban. All that leads more into what type of character and people these are on a general level and also what would be excepted. So without that knowledge it feels a bit like a hole in the story.

Overall, this is a very well done entry chapter. That I think will be the start of another great adventure. The Ms. Young character has some of the makings for a great flawed hero. As at the time we have all had those strict teachers who we have hated but more often then not those turned out to be some of the better teachers when you looked back in hindsight. 

Looking forward to more. 

~Asuka

You have done a masterful job with your writing in this. Each word you use seems to fit perfectly together i dont see any wasted words or bad descriptions. In fact many of your comparisons are unique.

The role reversal facet of the story is quite enjoyable. You have me checking back quite regularly for updates. You have a real knack for writing. 10/10 from me mate.

I like the character of ryan overall the fact he is timid is something different then many of your other characters which was a bit refreshing. One thing I noticed while reading these past couple chapters was that the level of detail wasn't quite as high as the other chapters. 

I always liked the sense of impending doom and buid up of each humiliating act and it could have just been me but the couple of ryan chapters didnt seem to quite have the seem feeling and pacing of the kate chapters. 

However, even with the slightly different feel they were still very well done and a great example of literary excellence that all of us can only hope to replicate.

I found the imagery of june trapped in Ryans underwear to be fitting for the strict teacher and enjoyed how it seemed to knock her down a peg. However, between the two characters you have presented so far, I enjoy Kates character a bit more and hope to see more of her as Ryan comes off as a bit to unrealistically timid and shy. 

Thank you for the great read the nonetheless and look forward to the next chapter. As while i havent read all your stories, the ones i have always been enjoyable and of high quality. 

The few nitpicks i made, still dont harm the overall quality of this chapter. Still at 10 out of 10 in my book.