Penname: Olo [Contact] Real name:
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Summary:

An adventurous teen who just happens to be five inches tall has been stuck in homeschool all his life.  When he finally enters public high school and a new world of friends, bullies, and cliques, he quickly discovers challenges even bigger than he could've imagined.


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Young Adult 20-29, Adult 30-39, Mature (40-49), Couples, Giant, Legwear, Odor, Unaware, Adventure, Entrapment, Feet, Gentle, Humiliation, Maternal, Mouth Play
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Lilliputian (6 in. to 3 in.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 82 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 179462 Read Count: 1058706
[Report This] Published: September 01 2011 Updated: May 26 2019
Reviewer: Olo Signed
Date: March 09 2017 Title: Chapter 62: Chapter 62: Popular Kids

Something tells me that Erica just got a big bullseye painted on her back.



Author's Response:

May be true, but Erica also has the benefit of being too tall to be picked up, unlike someone else with a target on his back

Reviewer: Olo Signed
Date: January 02 2017 Title: Chapter 61: Chapter 61: Between Tulips

Very nice culmination of events.  Particularly effective was Peter's inner narrative intertwined with the hints of Lisa's emotional states as signaled by her body/facial-language.  This allowed the dramatic exchange to carry the reader towards the embrace with the wavering, hesitant pace of two same-sized actors in a fraught scene rather than dwelling on the fact that Lisa was in complete control of just how close Peter came (or didn't come) to her.  Even if the scene and the dialogue called for Peter to physically embrace Lisa, she alone determined their proximity; if she deflated or let her arms relax or otherwise held him distant, he couldn't force the issue.  But since we were so caught up in their emotional exchange, their embrace seemed mutual rather than unilateral.

And that, my friends, is authentic characterization.



Author's Response:

Thanks very much, and I'm glad someone picked up on this. I always love when other macro stories have an echo of how the scene would play if everyone was more equal-sized. In this case, Peter has to lean forward a bit, but Lisa is still completely in control of distance.

Reviewer: Olo Signed
Date: December 28 2016 Title: Chapter 60: Chapter 60: Parental Guidance

It sounds old-fashioned, but Mr. & Mrs. Carol could really use a full and frank exchange with Suzanne.  It's not fair, but friends and family of people with disabilities are often obliged to educate others on how to accommodate them.  Also, I think that Suzanne--after hearing Mr. Carol's aspersions--would become much more supportive of Peter when he tries to venture farther out beyond her care.

But yeah, Sharon's not the first bully Lisa's had to deal with.



Author's Response:

You raise some good points. Part of the point of this chapter was to show other adults in Peter's world who genuinely don't think poorly of him as a person, but also have a healthy estimation of the stakes for Lisa. But you're right that the Carols might benefit from some outside perspectives.

Reviewer: Olo Signed
Date: December 23 2016 Title: Chapter 59: Chapter 59: Finger Combat

Erica stepping up reminds me that I still want to hear more about Dad.



Author's Response:

We will hear more about Dad eventually. It's being held off for a reason. ;)

Reviewer: Olo Signed
Date: December 18 2016 Title: Chapter 58: Chapter 58: Girl Troubles

Oh, well done!  Ms. Tritter's face settling on Peter like his own personal sunrise.  Creamy, indeed.



Author's Response:

Who wouldn't want to wake up to that?

Reviewer: Olo Signed
Date: December 13 2016 Title: Chapter 57: Chapter 57: Life Drawing

Quick, someone make a Deviantart.com account for Mandy, then send the link to Sharon.



Author's Response:

Mandy is nothing if not deviant.

Reviewer: Olo Signed
Date: November 15 2016 Title: Chapter 54: Chapter 54: Bedroom Lesson

Apology (grudgingly) accepted.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: Olo Signed
Date: February 21 2015 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27: Matchmaker Tips

I have to say, Erica seems much more mature than your average high school junior (male or female).  Even with the added detail of her breakup with Sean, most kids can't process drama like that so swiftly.  The advice she's giving Peter sounds like it should be coming from someone who's had at least a year away at college.  I fully buy that Erica's concern for Peter's safety and even happiness is genuine, but as a teenager herself she would realistically limit her focus to not incurring her mother's wrath.

Perhaps unintentionally, Cary's comment highlights the fact that I don't think we've heard a single word about Peter's father.  Not to be excessively heteronormative, but where's Daddy?  If Suzanne is the (quite understandable) source of overprotectiveness in the family, who's the source of the adventurousness that Peter is experimenting with (and that Erica is advocating)?

My cavils aside, I still think this is one of my favorite stories, and I impatiently check the site every day for updates.  Watching teenagers let a five-inch-tall kid make them feel special while they in turn try to make him feel normal is, well, special.



Author's Response:

Fair considerations; I appreciate you putting the thought into the characters that you have. My answer on Erica is basically that she hasn't necessarily processed it completely; she just tends to bottle things up and think them over in solitude, allowing her to parse out bits of piecemeal wisdom for herself (or Peter, in this case). I know she may come off as mature, though I've known plenty of people at this age with this kind of perspective. While wary of her mother's wrath, she's been in this family long enough to know that if Peter doesn't step outside his mother's shadow sometimes, he'll never "grow." (heh)

Peter's father will eventually be brought up. The source of adventurousness really comes as a result of Peter needing a break from his mother's overprotectiveness - she shelters him so much, he has to proactively take initiative to see what's out there.

Again, thanks for your thoughts. Glad you're liking the story.

Reviewer: Olo Signed
Date: August 09 2015 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33: Thespian Aspirations

"Bluebell," eh? I guess if Peter hadn't happened along, Mrs. Parks might've tried to put on A Midsummer Night's Dream. Mandy makes for a nice change of menace.



Author's Response:

Peter might've still fit the bill of a fairy in that one... :P Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Olo Signed
Date: June 13 2015 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32: Popped Question

It's unseemly (and poor plotting) to see malice in every mishap, but I can't help thinking Amy might have had something to do with that errant ball.

Nevertheless, I'll happily read any number of your fraught handheld scenes, however unseemly their origin (or conclusion...).



Author's Response:

It very well could've been Amy. Peter would prefer to think optimistically, but there's no way to know for sure. And there will be plenty more handheld scenes to come.

Reviewer: Olo Signed
Date: May 24 2015 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31: Bowling Over

Y'know, I'd be okay with Sharon or Amy or even Kimmy making off with Peter if any of them were cool enough to make a Big Lebowski reference at this point.



Author's Response:

Well, Lisa is definitely out of her element here...

Reviewer: Olo Signed
Date: April 27 2015 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30: Cold Shoulder

Ah, young love. Who doesn't remember the thrill of simply saying the name of their first love, the sparkle of touching their bare skin, or the rush of vertigo as they snatched you from the desktop and dropped you in their purse?



Author's Response:

Yes, that third one in particular is a fond memory I'm sure for everyone on this site

Reviewer: Olo Signed
Date: April 11 2015 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29: Unwanted Hands

Well, that certainly was a nice demonstration of the coercive power of a silver monopoly.  Looks like someone's had a quiet word with Lisa.



Author's Response:

Looks like that indeed...

Reviewer: Olo Signed
Date: February 21 2015 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27: Matchmaker Tips

Erica might also be one of those people who are better at giving good advice than taking it themselves. 



Author's Response:

Very possible, yes.

Reviewer: Olo Signed
Date: February 01 2015 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22: Unsportsmanlike Assault

While she retains a scary kind of attractiveness, whenever I try to visualize Sharon's eyes, I somehow always think of Christopher Walken.



Author's Response:

Well, that's a new one. I suppose they're both fairly off-putting people, aren't they?

Reviewer: Olo Signed
Date: April 04 2014 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18: Project Uncoupling

I'm really glad you've picked this back up.  The details of the physical environment are well-attended-to, but the description of the social environment is where your writing really shines.  High schoolers are very hard to write without falling into cliche, mainly because they are still developing their personalities and trying on different roles each day.  Meeting someone 1/20th your size could provoke all kinds of experimental reactions...

I appreciate the slow build, too.  I can be sustained for weeks be a well-written handheld scene, and you've already logged a dozen beauties.

On a personal note,  I'm pretty sure I had Ms. Tritter for Math, too.  I remember fondly being personally instructed in the operations of extrapolation.  I'm sure Peter would benefit from similar attention.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review. I find it interesting trying to capture the voice of high schoolers in stories like this, although I benefit from having only been there a couple years ago. I'm glad to hear you're enjoying the slow build too. You're going to see Peter get some more one-on-one with Ms. Tritter eventually.

Reviewer: Olo Signed
Date: January 21 2015 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Separation Anxiety

So thoroughly jazzed [sic] to see you back at this story.  Really enjoying the handtime.  You know, Peter could probably practice his pull-ups on an extended fingertip...



Author's Response:

Thanks man. I'm jazzed to be writing it again. There's plenty more handtime to come as well as some time with other locations as well!

Reviewer: Olo Signed
Date: January 27 2015 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21: Vixen Advice

From Ms. Tritter to Sharon; like going from the afternoon sun in July to a December moonrise.  Work those capillaries, Peter! 



Author's Response:

It's definitely an extreme turnaround.

Reviewer: Olo Signed
Date: May 27 2016 Title: Chapter 50: Chapter 50: Risk Management

Suzanne's reaction is less surprising than the logical conclusion of the long-term parenting that any parent of a "special needs" child would have to engage in.  What is more surprising is that both Suzanne and Erica have independently realized that Peter's safety is best served by bolstering his inner resources.  They see that hyper-awareness of how dangerous the world can be—something they previously thought was a necessary survival trait—is forcing Peter into a permanent flinch.  They recognize that there is an absolute limit to their ability to safeguard Peter physically, and that Peter needs to feel safe.  Whether it is developing his own physical resources (as Erica proposed) or simply taking ownership of the decision to attend school (as Suzanne admitted), a bit of bravado will be necessary for Peter to find his own path.

Unfortunately, I hope suspect Sharon is clever enough to make the same realization and exploit it.



Author's Response:

Yes, Erica and Suzanne are actually becoming a little more of the same mind on Peter's safety as this story progresses, though Suzanne is definitely the much more precarious of the two. And with every encounter, Sharon is gathering a little more information about how Peter and his power dynamics tick.

Reviewer: Olo Signed
Date: February 13 2015 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25: Extracurricular Activity

Delightful.  I continue to be impressed by the fine balance you are able to maintain between Peter's precarious situation and optimism for his future. Every person he meets is a new opportunity for aid or menace (or, often, both).

I do think it would be basic courtesy not to use the word "crush" so casually around someone in Peter's condition. 



Author's Response:

Thanks for saying that about the balance; that's definitely one of my main focuses with this story.

Luckily (or unluckily) for Peter, he's probably heard enough size-related puns by this point in his life that words like "crush" hardly register.