Penname: The Intimidator [Contact] Real name:
Member Since: September 13 2017
Membership status: Member
Bio:

Just someone here for the same reasons you are to read or to write stories.


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Summary:

After some foul behavior from some brats at a nail salon, Stephanie Zhao seeks revenge. With a new invention that can shrink people - Stephanie knows what to do.

 

Please let me know in the reviews what you think of the story and if there are any scenarios you would like to see. This is primiarly foot fetish stuff.

 

2/2 update: Does anyone here do giantess art commissions? Would be interested in some art of my characters but I’m not exactly the best artist. 

 

3/1 update: I got rid of the experimental chapter (J)  - I hope everyone enjoys the new and improved Chapter 25! It's called "The Bargain". And I changed back the other Chad/Julie interaction to what it was.


Categories: Giantess, Young Adult 20-29, Breasts, Adult 30-39, Mature (40-49), Butt, Feet, Gentle, Humiliation, Unaware
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.), Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/f, F/m, FF/f, FF/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 26 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 39312 Read Count: 63274
[Report This] Published: January 01 2021 Updated: March 05 2021
Reviewer: The Intimidator Signed
Date: January 17 2021 Title: Chapter 1: Beginning of Summer

Great story and I must ask. Is your username a reference to the song by The Oak Ridge Boys?



Author's Response:

Glad you're enjoying it - and yep that's where my username comes from. 

Summary:

 

Ryan lives a normal life for a tiny: he works online, he keeps in shape at the local gym, he games online with friends he never meets, and he tries his best to avoid getting stepped on. Of course it was just his luck that the apartment he lived in got foreclosed on and now he’s been evicted.

Thankfully one of his online friends, Lena, offers to let him crash with her. Of course, having never met, Ryan doesn’t know she’s a bit bigger than he thinks.

 

 

Note: There will be no deaths in this story.

 


Categories: Breasts, Body Exploration, Butt, Gentle, Insertion, Mouth Play, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 39627 Read Count: 28984
[Report This] Published: April 08 2021 Updated: April 26 2021
Reviewer: The Intimidator Signed
Date: April 14 2021 Title: Chapter 1: CH1. Evicted

First off I want to say this a great story and I've been enjoying it very much. The concept is great and I like that you've been able to find a new take on a story format thats been around for a while. Both of the protagonists are being developed very well and I can't wait to see where the story goes.

With that being said there are a few things that I think could be worked on. One thing in particular being the references to real world things that have been slightly changed to hold a new name it just seems a little out of place, if this was a show or movies with visuals I think that could work, but for a story (or at least to me) it pulls the reader out of it.

Another thing I've noticed is there are quite a few moments where something is written but could've been left out the first of which being when Ryan goes to the gym for the first time and instead of showing us what the gym is like or what he does there it is replaced with a line having us think of an 80's montage and instead we focus on afterwards when he goes to the store. While a wouldn't say a lot of time was spent setting up the gym it certainly wasn't a little. If the point getting Ryan out of the house was so he could go to the store then having him tell Lena that he wanted to go to the store would've worked just as well.

Additonally I feel like we're being told everything instead of getting the opportunity to form our own thoughts and predictions. It's been established that both characters have a crush on each other without the other knowing it feels unnecessary and repeative to constantly remind us that they having feelings for on another. We the readers don't need to know every single thought the characters have, we can infer if we're given the chance.

This one is more a personal pet peeve but the was texts are formatted just doesn't match with the rest of the story and personally pulls me out of it. 

Those are just a few things I've noticed that I think could possibly improve the quailty of the story. Once again I think this a great story and I'm exicited to see where it goes.



Author's Response:

Thank you for dropping a review and I'm glad you're enjoying the story! I'm always hapty to hear some feedback on things like what you've touched on, so I feel I should touch on them here.

Changing the real world names was initially going to just be the games, which were pretty much entirely made up anyway. Multycoon is a tycoon game with multiple tycoons in one game for instance. I agree with you in regards to the movie though, and I'll probably just change that to Avengers when I put out the next chapter in a few days.

I didn't really go into depth with the gym simply because I personally don't go to gyms, so I don't know what sounds realistic. I work outdoors for a living so I never really needed to. That and there weren't any events at the gym that would change or impact the story. I only ever mentioned that he went to the gym at all because I wanted to establish that Ryan was in good shape without directly stating as such. I'll probably remove the 80's montage thing though, It is a bit jarring. I'll replace it with a brief summary.

Your third point: the way I wanted this story to unfold was through the thoughts and actions of the characters. And people tend to think a lot. And when you're crushing hard, you frequently think about that fact and wondering if the other is thinking about you just as much as you are thinking about them. Since we're in their thoughts so much, if I suddenly stop mentioning something that is running through their heads all day it implies that they've stopped thinking of it. And usually what they're thinking of when not thinking about eachother is a game or whatever they're eating or whatever. While I agree that readers can infer information, there are some things I'd rather not get misconstrued so I state them bluntly.

I agree with your comment on the texts they have in the group chat, but its something that will be used more sparingly from here on out, as I've used them as I'd wanted to.

Thank you for the feedback, and I hope you look forward to the next chapter! 

PS: You can dm me if you'd like to counterpoint my counterpoints