Reviewer: BoozedUp Signed
Date: June 07 2022
Title: Chapter 15: You Again
How lucky can Theo get? Apparently luckiest guy in that universe. At least he only lives in letters, or I'd be seriously jealous. I'll be honest I did not expect Roxy to be the childhood crush, thought it would be more of an explanation why the protagonist is into tall women. Of course this ties in very nicely, but writing stories that are too tied in runs the risk of being predictable. After all, not everything happens for a reason, or has a straightforward flow. Also, I do not know what kind of timeframe you have in mind, the first 15 chapters were a very rich (and appreciated) introduction. However I feel the story will need to pick up the pace soon. Unless you plan on writing 100 chapters+ which, of course, would be more than welcome.
Your effort and consistency seems underappreciated, so big ups, not many here can match it. Hopefully you'll be back soon, but not too soon to be burnt out.
Author's Response: Yeah, my characters are like, way chatty. I do want to get into more action in the next bit. I’m sure there will be more sexual contact, but not as much as most of theses stories do. I can only say that BG’s will GB, Roxanne won’t be the biggest we run into, and Theo will see that darker side of big girls.