I don't know if you still check this website but I hope you will continue this story.  It has a lot of promise and I love stories where people shrink out of thier clothes.

 

I'm having trouble reading your story.  A space between paragrpahs might help.  Formatting on this site is tricky but good luck.

This is pretty good so far.  I look forward to see what you can do with it. I think it's cooler if the shrinking takes longer in a slow shrinking story but still cool.  And I like the idea of them being able to control his size maybe they make him smaller as punishment :D

If could make a suggestion:

Screenplay format is cool and interesting, but it's not that big on description.  I would suggest you put this in prose form and add more description. It's way more fun that way

It's a great idea though I love shrinking out of clothes stories

PYS

An interesting story, I'm a fan of shrinking out of clothes so I thought I'd like this one a lot and while it has its good points I think you went way too fast.  I understand the desire, heck if you read my long ago abandoned story you'll see I too want to rush too often.  Still that takes some of the fun out of the story as a huge portion of the fun in a giantess story is imagining the sensations, so just saying "he was nude, she was nude" etc. isn't as fun.  Its better to describe how it feels to be getting smaller and to have your clothes balooning around you, how the girl looks nude (or better yet having her strip for him).

You mention in your reviews that your the only one who reads these before posting, may I suggest you find someone on the site (or someone you trust with relveaing this part of your sexuality too) to serve as your beta reader.  They go through and point out grammar mistakes as well as make reomcendations on how you can prove before you post.  It takes longer to update that way but the updates you do post are so much better then.

Thanks for writing this story and I hope my criticism wasn't too harsh 

PYS