Date: September 26 2015 3:52 PM Title: It starts...
Is this going to be one of those stories, I wonder, where the writer keeps repeating statements about the main character being average when they in fact are not? First, let me start by saying that start you've provided isn't too bad; I've seen worse. Way worse. However I can't help but feel that this story would have been better with a prologue. You're writing is okay but some parts I found frustrating. And I keep thinking about Nostory's character Cassie from the story Downtrodden stupidly. Although I'm a bit worried about the scat/piss tags I decided to look anyway because you're a new author here; and it's always nice to see new contributors. Plus, I can skip any parts I don't like. But, also, I know lots of people put lots of tags on and then don't use them all so I might not have to worry to much.
[Report This]Date: September 23 2015 10:51 AM Title: It starts...
*Forgot rating*
Date: September 23 2015 10:44 AM Title: It starts...
Great stuff so far!
Though I'm wondering what will happen to all the townsfolk and stuff, and whether or not the situation escalates
Aside from minor nitpicks I can't really find anything to complain about, but then again, I might be slightly biased so take that with a grain of salt.
Author's Response:
That's too far into the plot, yet, there's a lot of stuff you guys dunno yet LOL
Date: September 19 2015 1:07 AM Title: It starts...
Glad to see you back !
Your style is pretty good and it's always enjoyable to read you !
Great stuff, keep it up !
[Report This]Date: September 18 2015 2:09 PM Title: It starts...
Write off of the top of your head, and make it extremely sadistic.....your style sounds a lot like mine lol. Loving the story so far!
Author's Response:
Awww, thank you. All of this story is on the fly, just a funny little project I thought I should try out.
[Report This]Date: February 11 2015 11:18 AM Title: It starts...
I normally don't like stories like these, but the state of our little hero has gotten me interested in this story. Also, I'd personally refuse to eat or drink no matter what if I was in his situation.
Author's Response:
Haha. Yeah. You'd have to kill me, because that's a big no no for me.
[Report This]Date: February 11 2015 10:07 AM Title: It starts...
Oh, I forgot to rate it!
Date: February 11 2015 10:07 AM Title: It starts...
Excellent! :)
I do wonder what's so special about our little hero though, why she keeps him alive. Besides her sister, we haven't seen any other toy.
Author's Response:
That's a secret~