[Report This]Date: October 01 2024 1:53 PM Title: Chapter 8: Resilience
I love how fast you have been updating, it bodes really well for maintaining a consistent style throughout the story; like you have been doing. I liked Mae’s introduction as a quiet kind but nerdy friend, and in this specific chapter I like how she dipped a little into Claire territory with the last few resiliency tests.
As for Claire, you are on a roll. I thought the breakfast scene and the subsequent just hanging out with the occasional toe prod scene was hilarious and cute. Bri standing there in complete shock and awe after being licked and then being poked in the face with milk. I would very much like to see more things like that.
Now for going forward to their first weekend together, I think Claire should really up the ante. With the whole world open to her, and her pocket-enclosed toy-sized companion, I think they should be inseparable this weekend. With Bri being in for a fun but rocky few days, as she has Claire’s undivided attention. Maybe they could go on a shopping spree for more things Claire needs/wants for the rest of the month watching her tiny pet/toy/prisoner/friend. (Whatever the best word is, Bri’s status has been all four throughout the story interchangeably!)
Date: September 30 2024 11:39 PM Title: Chapter 8: Resilience
Your writing is too good!
Since this is getting updated so fast (which is awesome), I'll let this be my review for chapters 5-8
For chapter 5, the main thing I have to say is that I love the image of Bri being carried in Claire's purse like a puppy, of course with Claire reaching to poke and prod her pet with her fingers. Too cute!
For chapter 6, I'll use this as an opportunity to say that despite how foot-focused I am, I love how you write Claire's handplay interactions with Brianna! Every poke, prod, grab, squeeze, tickle, and all the rest are simply adorable! But I like Mae's character a lot and all the little tests she devised.
The "side story 1" was a lot of fun too. I like getting a little look into the worldbuilding, and that image of Emily sheepishly nudging the little pervert away from her toes only for him to come scurrying back is just too cute (and kinda hot) in such a twisted way lol
Chapter 7? Amazing!
I love how you mixed it up with the licking from Claire! I hope we see at least a little more of that in the future, as it's a lot of fun, both the image of it and the adorably disgusted reactions from Bri. I like that Mae is sweet to Bri and encourages her, but also takes Claire's side when it comes to the teasing and playing.
Of course, my favorite thing about this chapter is how Claire simply can't keep her feet away from little Bri! It's like the tiny girl has a magnetic pull on her owner's feet and hands and I adore it!
Chapter 8 was great too! I was almost hoping that from the way Mae had described "resilience" at the end of the last chapter that this would be an in-shoe test. (Although, maybe that's what this could be preparation for? ;) )
For real though, I loved the actual tests and especially when Claire shook and tossed Bri around in her hand. I can't wait for more tickling in the future, too. The kiss was such an adorable moment, and I love Bri's reactions to affection like that. Lastly, the scene with Bri back in the purse was very cute, and I love to see both Claire unable to keep away from her adorable toy and Bri unable to resist feeling comfort and warmth from being held.
I can't wait to see more of this story! It's way too good!
Shoutout to Goddess Kelly Smith's review with the hamster wheel/tubes idea and Toothpasted's review with the doll dress-up idea! Both sound cute.
I also hope that my chapter 4 review didn't come across as too demanding or anything. I just wanted to make sure you understood me clearly.
I'd like to follow it up in a future review, but for now I'm just enjoying the ride :)
Keep up the great work! Thank you for this story!
Author's Response:
A review for every chapter? I'll try to reply separately then. I appreciate that you like my work.
There's something about multitasking I love so much. Claire's main goal is to walk from one location to another, and playing with Bri is an afterthought. You know how people take out their phones on the bus to check out socials to not get bored except playing with tiny girl in your bag is much better. There's also the fact that she does it in public while no one can see it, and even if they pay attention, they will just be slightly interested and not think too much.
Having your tiny exhausted with some simple tasks is just the best. I honestly like it so much. Did you manage how cooperative Bri was? Maybe there's more to it. Mae's character is very subdued. Claire has too much energy and is too active. Mae serves as some kind of balancer. Of course, she likes tiny things a lot. You can tell she was prepared for this and she only had a day to prepare! How did she manage to do it? She saved Bri quite a few times but is always watching curiously if she thinks there's no harm. She is also the character I created for Bri to like. Claire that is always poking her and Mae who saved her so many times and allowed to rest in her hand. Seems almost angelic in contrast. I wonder what happens if she's alone with Bri and there's no Claire to take action. Will she take matters into her own hands to explore her curiosity? She's pretty submissive tho, so I wouldn't be surprised if Bri was calling the shots.
7. Had to make a licking scene so breakfast is mostly for that. Bri trying to retaliate was so cute! Also, I kinda remembered that you need to eat to live and I haven't written Bri eating a single time, so there it is. Done! Anime about robots is the closest we have to GTS so seemed pretty fitting.
8. I can only think of in-shoe as a punishment or a dare. So Bri either has to misbehave severely or be rewarded afterward. I have yet to ponder on both scenarios as Claire is rather forgiving and Bri isn't one to ask for things or want them too much, especially in her current situation. I'm proud of the Kiss scene. Doing my best to give Bri as much affection as possible.
Side story is to cover the world-building as well as Claire's mother. I don't want her interfering with Claire too much so I decided to give her some kind of 'exhausted veteran' vibe that had some fun in the past but now is tired and wants to do her job. Feels like she needs some more plot time tho. Where is her husband? Have some idea about making him a criminal that she arrested herself in the past(But that feels like a separate story on it's own). Not sure about Emily and the 'toe licker'. I may need to expand on their relationship. Just some shoes can't stop a determined man! She should talk to him directly and hope they'll come to some arrangement.
I wanted to reply to your previous review but I wrote like, 200 words reply before sending it only for GTSWorld to lag out... :( And it was gone just like that. I forgot half of it so I will reply when I remember.