[Report This]Date: November 09 2024 1:19 PM Title: Close and Unseen
Greetings aHomester,
It appears that you have been gone for a while. I hope you have been well. I went on the site after a short break and I discovered the fifth chapter of Test Subject and I just could not resist giving it a read. After reading it a couple times since then, I must say that the two and a half month gap between chapters four and five were worth it. The following review is my three cents on the chapter and it is admittedly a bit lengthy but I hope you appreciate it nonetheless.
The first thing that impressed me about this chapter was how once again you utilize the scale of size between Spencer and his environment. From body exploration in the beginning to getting candidly bullied by Brooke’s body later on, you had effectively illustrated how truly insignificant Spencer currently is to the world, and especially to his unaware loved ones.
The second thing that was impressive (related to the first) was your illustration of how dangerous fluids can be to a creature as small as Spencer. The reference to the stinging effects of the salt content of the sweat was a great little detail to include. And the fact that it was from Brooke was just icing on the cake. I recently read through your “Little Pest” comic series on DA and I now understand your inspiration for the sweat scene in Test Subject. [SPOILERS AHEAD FOR INTERESTED READERS] I must admit, as a fan of unaware vore with drawn out details of the victim’s experience, I highly appreciated the detail of vore and digestion you included towards the end of that comic and I hope it somehow makes its way into Test Subject.
The third thing that I appreciated about this chapter was the context of the sheer hopelessness of poor Spencer. That moment towards the end where Brooke coincidentally looked towards him up close and failed to notice him was especially powerful. Perhaps if she was actively trying to look for a creature as tiny as him she might be able to notice something but since she would not be thinking about that, it appears that Spencer’s odds of discovery are woefully low. The fact that Brooke even inquired about Spencer’s condition to his mother was even more tragic because it shows that she genuinely cares for his safety, and yet here she is threatening to snuff his life out with simple movements and sweat droplets. As a simple reader, I do hope if Spencer is to meet a tragic end, that Brooke’s (unaware) body be the instrument of his end. It would be too poetic of an opportunity to pass up. I noticed that when Spencer was musing about how he might die towards the end of the chapter, he did not think about Brooke on his list of possibilities. It would be greatly cathartic for a climatic event with Brooke before Spencer gets either discovered (and saved) or killed (either through mistaken identity or unaware). Perhaps an unaware vore scene with Brooke is in order (I could only hope lol)?
But as I say in my previous review, you are the author and you decide where the story goes. I am simply here for the ride. If you prefer me to refrain from making lengthy reviews in the future, then please let me know in your response. Otherwise, I hope my review was helpful.
Overall, the chapter was a fun read and I am eagerly awaiting the next chapter. I hope you do not have us waiting too long for it (but I suppose one cannot rush quality).
Thank you and I hope you have a great day.
10/10
Author's Response:
I feel as if I missed this review until now, and for that, I apologize.
Thanks again for another hearty review! Glad to see from a reader I'm able to properly convey the unfathomable differences and scale and the pathetic powerlessness Spencer possesses. I plan on having the story come to a conclusion next chapter and I hope to have it started and finished in a reasonable timeframe. Be on the lookout!