Date: April 12 2023 1:00 PM Title: Chapter 1. A Pathetic Speck of Rock.
Hope we get a sequel to this or more stories in this universe
Author's Response:
Thanks for the 5 stars!
As for a sequel or more stories in the universe. Well its a possibility, but I don't have the complete time right now to delve into this universe. However, I did leave the last chapter off in a way that kept that option open, as there is a lot I could do with this universe. Perhaps with a new cast of characters, or perhaps a continuation with the old ones. For the time being, my other story is more of a focus, which I already don't have much time to write about either.
If anything, there might be a series of one shots for this universe until I can dedicate myself to a story for it.
Once again, thanks for the review!
Date: March 15 2023 4:58 PM Title: Chapter 12. Lena's Consideration
It truly seems that she had a 'big' change of heart
Thank you, thank you, I'll be here all week
Date: July 21 2022 12:56 AM Title: Chapter 14. Soul-mates Forever.
This is probably the best chapter you've written here. You've always had good descriptive language to give us just enough detail to where we can envision what's happening, but now, the sentences flow nicely into one another. In previous entries, I had to reread some paragraphs because of a couple of awkwardly worded phrases (I have this problem as well). Now, it's smooth as butter, very easy to follow, but still maintaining that methodical approach to detailing what's happening.
Of course, the action depicted in the beginning is rather special. Salutations to Blyke; a worthy death, doing his duty down in the trenches. You paced out that scene really well, showing us how his body's contorting, before the final sendoff.
I do have a passing interest in Violena's friends, and how she interacts with them, and how they would react to Blyke. It's mentioned in the text that Aisha might be a tough sell. Overall, this was a very enjoyable tale, and one that saw a marked improvement by you, chapter by chapter. I look forward to whatever comes next, whether it be here, or your other entry.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading! It was fun to write for the most part, and I covered a lot of what I’ve wanted to write about. However, just in case I like leaving some space for a sequel or another entry into the same universe. Hence the focus on Aisha near the end.
I’m happy to hear that my writing has been improving, I hope it continues to do so as I keep writing and experimenting. Of course some will be hit or miss.
If nothing else, I hope I was able to conclude the story of these two characters well. They were the focus after all, with minimal other characters even being present at all. I’ve found ending chapters to be hard or just draining to write about. Of course I imagine that’ll come with practice.
As for future plans, I’ll probably take a small break from writing for a month or two. Or I guess that’s a bit misinforming, maybe more accurately would be I won’t have time to post stuff for a while. But after that, I would like to focus on my other story for a bit, and take a break on this universe so I can freshen my mind on it. If I ever decide to return to this universe that is.
Once again, I’m thankful for the continued reviews around my work. Your feedback and anyones really (provided I can see it being justified lol) has been a huge help in allowing me to realise what can work or what doesn’t. As well as making me see the limits of my current ability. Thanks for that!
Date: April 26 2022 8:08 PM Title: Chapter 1. A Pathetic Speck of Rock.
Really enjoyed the story so far!
Reading you critique your own writing made me chuckle as I have never been good at it failing that part of my English exam many years ago I couldn’t tell the difference between this and other stories on the site so I honestly couldn’t give you any feedback there.
I’m usually not a fan of fatal stuff or excess pain especially emotional unless the inflicter completely loved them and they could be resurrected not that I didn’t love Blyke being smashed by a huge ass. This feels like a perfect balance
Whilst like you said in a reply earlier this story is reaching its end and I really hope you either end up making a sequel or another entrance into the same universe or inspire others to write similar given its uniqueness as I’ve not seen any other stories to this scale with the kind of relationship Lena and Blyke have.
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review!
And thanks for the high praise. I still have a lot to work on, things that became more glaringly obvious to me on what I should of done better in earlier chapters now, but I still think I did at least a decent job.
I did say it’s reaching towards its end, but that still means we will have a couple more chapters to go. Blyke and Lena need more time to each other imo and a bit more development for Lena is something I want to give. Who knows, if I’m up for it, I might continue past that or make a sequel. For now, a small break from finishing what was in the scope of this story is what im aiming for. Though I’ll probably leave it with some room for if I want to continue.
I definitely want to add a more action focused chapter for Lena and Blyke. And maybe some other stuff. I guess I have a lot of ideas, but again, would probably only do some of them in a sequel setting.
Date: April 21 2022 3:20 PM Title: Chapter 12. Lena's Consideration
I honestly like the story and I love the topics you have been dealing with in the last couple of chapters.
Of course, as readers we can tell that Lena is a goddess and she has a pretty different way of seeing the world, as a society, we often forget that in fictional stories, beings from different stories will most likely have different morals, most people don't complain after killing an ant, but for Lena, all the other species in the universe are ants, so, who can blame her? I guess a entity of such power has a way different perspective of life than we do.
Of course, Blyke is watching his girlfriend doing aberrations to other species in front of his eyes, I doubt he can just think about all of this from such a chill perspective when everything is real for him, obviously he will be complained.
Lena slowly starting to doubt herself is great tho, not because of all the living beings she hurt, but because Blyke gave her a different perspective, that's true love in my opinion, not stopping as if you were living entirely for them but looking inside of you for a moment to question your own ways if you realize they're conflicting your partner.
Sometimes I feel the narrative is a little uncommon, but aside from that, it's a great story!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review! We are at the closing portion of things, (though who knows I may make a sequel at some point or add more chapters)
It may be a little bit till the next chapter, but some more progression between the two leads should occur.
Date: April 18 2022 4:16 PM Title: Chapter 12. Lena's Consideration
I rather like the direction this story is going. I don't know if this has been done before, but a sort of civilization destroyer becoming conflicted because her lover has a strong moral compass is a pretty unique relationship. Honestly, in many ways, I find it quite endearing. It's the logical conclusion of a gentle giantess situation, that such a powerful being is willing to stay their hand just because of affection. Diabeetus-inducing stuff.
While you portrayed Arios as a planet that was somewhat due for a dusting, Lena appears to appreciate the subtly and necessity of the doomed specie's attitude. They're not just "greedy, bad" just for being "greedy, bad", their inclinations were natural, perhaps even bestowed upon them by evolution. Their aggression, just like the goddesses apocalyptic duties, is in their very nature. It's a nuanced take that you don't usually see in giantess stories that tend to go full-on misanthrope.
The writing has also improved. You've established a pretty good character voice, and it is easy to follow and picture what is happening. Interested to see what the compromise/agreement will be between Lena and Blyke. Good luck pulling it off, dynamic characters are fun things to read.
Date: April 18 2022 3:40 PM Title: Chapter 12. Lena's Consideration
Even if Violena isn't completely convinced that what she does is morally unsound yet, I like that she's at least behinning to doubt her actions and role in all this since it means she's capable of change/redemption. There are way better alternatives to genocide when it comes to creating peace and prosperity. I'm really hoping she eventually comes to a similar conclusion since she's supposed to be above even some of the other goddesses. Perhaps through talking with Blyke and having some more introspection she can think of a more effective alternative that won't make her look morally repugnant to Blyke and strain their relationship.
Im really Interested in the directions this could go. Keep it coming man!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review!
I figured getting Lena more into questioning her own actions was the right direction to her character, happy to see people liked it. As for to what extent she will take that though is up for debate. On one hand it would impact her negatively if she gave up who is and what she does for a relationship, on the other it’s not like she can just neglect Blyke’s opinion. Hence a compromise of some sort needs to be made.
So who knows what’s next, perhaps she’ll give up completely on the destruction of planets and such, maybe she’ll somehow struck a balance. One thing that I will try to do is to make sure neither Blyke or Lena completely get what they want or get nothing.
Thanks again.
Date: April 02 2022 10:19 PM Title: Chapter 11. A Small Dispute.
I really liked the fact that Blyke actually questions the morality of what she does even if he stopped pushing her almost immediately. I really enjoy this type of conflict especially when it aids in character development. Im hoping he gradually starts to rub off on her once he finds the opportunity to stand his ground. Because its not like she's gonna let him permanently die. The worst thing she could do is pull a Dormamu because she'll keep bringing him back. Anyways I look forward to seeing how this story progresses.
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review. The coming chapters will most likely cause a shift in their attitudes together, but no promises. After all a massive change in the giantess’ behaviour or Blykes behaviour isn’t really possible. The next best thing is some sort of compromise. Still though, I’m happy to see people picking up on what i was trying to do in this chapter, I understand I’m still quite poor as a writer so I wasn’t sure how the “small dispute” would be received. But I’m glad I’m the end. Once again thanks for reading.
Date: March 27 2022 3:55 AM Title: Chapter 1. A Pathetic Speck of Rock.
I've been meaning to give this puppy a review for awhile. Gentle giga/mega is something that's a rare treat indeed. Too often, writers are focused on making the giantess a sadistic, or indifferent force of destruction. Sure, bobs the size of cities are intriguing, but it's even better when this force of nature actually has some concern for the near-microscopic people at her feet. That's a fun paradox and conflict in of itself.
You struck a nice balance here with your giantess character. She's not delicately gentle, heck in fact, she's dead set on ruling humanity as a goddess, but she understands that to rule, you shouldn't really ruin unless the situation calls for it. Her affection for her soul mate is just icing on the cake. Although I admit, he's not the most interesting tiny character, though I suppose that just comes with the territory.
I do reflect what other reviewers would say, in that, cleaning up the grammar, perspective and tense would do this story a great service. Some stories that aren't my cup of tea (the cruel romps, anything featuring tiny women, NTR), catch my interest when they are written brilliantly. Just keep grinding away, and soon enough, cups of tea for everyone will be sipped over this interesting story.
Author's Response:
As you said, things like grammar, flow of writing and characterisation of some characters weren’t too strong on my end. However I appreciate your kind words and feedback immensely. I suppose it’s expected to have so many flaws considering this is the first story I’m publishing, I can only hope to continue improving.
Once again, thank you for your feedback.
Date: March 12 2022 3:46 AM Title: Chapter 2- Some Playful Teasing
Reading up to chapter 3, I'd have to say I do enjoy the concept. It's pretty rare to see intimate size relationships from such a massive size difference. At least on Giantessworld, anyway. The size comparing is also really nice.
I'd say the most distracting thing about the writing itself is the random capitalization of words, and, limited to chapter 3 and mentioned in the footnotes already, switching the point of views, especially 2nd person being really odd.
For example, in "I Lower my Foot down, every so Slightly on them," there's really no reason for any of the capitalization there save for "I". Or how military and bug are treated as proper nouns every time they're used, when they aren't a specific person, place or thing, just being common nouns—generalizations—for people.
Good luck.
Author's Response:
Grammar is a weak point of mine, I’m probably going to do a re run at some point where I redo some of it. Stuff like capitalisation occurs for some reason when I switch from the original place where I write to this site for some unknown reason. But I definitely should correct that more often. Thanks for the review.
Date: March 11 2022 10:04 PM Title: Chapter 10. Merely a Snack.
So while I'm likening the relationship so far. I think you may want to introduce some conflict soon to get the story going. Maybe show one of the other Giantesses who is more disposed to pure cruelty, and have Lena not really be fazed while her husband is more put off due to not being bound to the other giantess.
Idk if you want to have him do something that will make her punish him in a sexy way.
If you make her too kind too quickly, I just fear the story wont have any where to go personally but its your story. :)
Author's Response:
These are 100% fair points and criticisms. As of this chapter there isn’t really a strong plot line going, and there really been much done to either of the two leads towards one another. Both of your potential solutions or things to do, both add a sense of conflict and will progress the story I think, so honestly they are worth considering.
The other giantess coming in and adding a new plot like of having Blyke witnessing more cruelty is something I’ve considered, but for later as I wanted a few moments or chapters of relief between the two. I’m not completely sure if a Lena could be considered kind though, she does act like such towards Blyke and always has, but has been rather awful towards anyone else. Whether she slowly changes to more kinder or not is something I also should probably consider.
Regardless for the critical review. These help make sure I know if I should add something particular or when I should. From this review it seems I may need to slow Lena being nice and speed up the pace somewhat.
Date: March 11 2022 2:42 PM Title: Chapter 10. Merely a Snack.
I see Lena as kind but obsessive. I really want to see some exploration of the guy’s size being variable. Maybe so small that he can go into her nipple or big enough to where he could hide under her clothing and discreet talking with her and pleasuring her while she goes about her day.
Author's Response:
To be honest, I really like the first idea. It’s just that I’m trying to open the two up before they can go onto stuff like that. Plus you typically don’t see that in these stories but it sounds like it’ll be great to write.
Lena herself in my opinion is kind and obsessive towards Blyke. But as shown in the early chapters, she cares about him a large deal more than anyone else. So that can lead to a bit of cruelty everyone now and again. Not to mention her own traditions and customs too which as a giantess may be dehumanising to some. Still though, thanks for your input. I’ll be sure to focus more on the kind and obsessive parts of her at some point in coming chapters.
Date: March 02 2022 9:26 PM Title: Chapter 9. The Home Date.
oh soooo excited for their evening to continue. I just hope that it isn't a 1 chapter and done sort of deal. Loved the new size and how much potential there can be.
Author's Response:
Am definitely hoping to extend this size difference for a few chapters. Try some more stuff before we move on to the new thread or stuff. I’d definitely appreciate hearing about some new ideas or tags to try from the next chapter onward and if you have ideas. Just leave a review.
Thanks for reading.
Date: February 18 2022 12:55 PM Title: Chapter 8.5. A Small Break.
excited for what is to come!!
Author's Response:
Thank you,
Date: February 13 2022 3:58 PM Title: Chapter 8: Humanity as Her Pets.
Kind of hoping she's benevolent ngl. I'd find it hard to trust someone who indifferently murdered thousands of my kind just because she was uncomfortable. I know she only directs her ire towards the politicians but it doesn't really excuse the other deaths. But then again Blyke seems indifferent about most things. Just hoping Lena grows more responsible/compassionate or Blyke actually voices some concerns for his planet/people.
Author's Response:
Yeah, I will say she has murdered only hundreds who refused to evacuate so far. And unknowingly so too. Perhaps I should of made that more clear. Regardless, I will avoid making her too cruel or mean. Only towards certain groups or people, even then I guess it doesn’t excuse her actions. Perhaps Blyke needs to open up more, or perhaps Lena should grow a heart. We’ll see.
Date: January 30 2022 1:24 PM Title: Chapter 6. The much Needed Conversation.
oh my this is so exciting to read. Love that she can modify him and can't wait for what they can do in the future. If they don't reproduce then why does she not already have a soul mate? And how was she made? Awesome job.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading.
- A person can only have 1 soul mate in their existence, at least for our pair here at least. Hence why she didn’t get a soul mate before.
- As for her creation, that is a secret for now.
hope that clarifies some stuff. I hope to release a new chapter In the coming days to weeks.
Date: January 30 2022 1:24 PM Title: Chapter 6. The much Needed Conversation.
oh my this is so exciting to read. Love that she can modify him and can't wait for what they can do in the future. If they don't reproduce then why does she not already have a soul mate? And how was she made? Awesome job.
Date: January 29 2022 12:29 PM Title: Chapter 5. Violena, The Slightly Obsessive Goddess.
Extreme-size difference relationships is a genre that is rare in the western GTS scene. So, I'll be bookmarking and checking for updates in the future.
A relationship where there is a sexual dimorphism between male and female, and the larger female's body being designed to make interaction possible is erotic. Like if someone was actually gigantic, instead of seeing less, they would see more. They have more cones in their eyes, and a larger brain to process what they're seeing. Same goes for their body; even if a lover is an ant in comparison to a nipple larger than the planet earth, the tiny hairs on her body would sense the teeniest vibrations allowing her to listen to the heartbeat of a lover embracing a never-ending plain of tit-flesh. There's lots and lots of interesting ideas to explore in this theme.
Author's Response:
Wow I never even considered some of these. But it’s definitely worth keeping mind of. I’m aiming to explore a range of genres, but ideas like this definitely are worthwhile noting. Thanks!
but I agree that the growing ones are pretty good, it’s mainly what I’m interested in. No disrespect to the shrinking fun tho.
Author's Response:
Wow I never even considered some of these. But it’s definitely worth keeping mind of. I’m aiming to explore a range of genres, but ideas like this definitely are worthwhile noting. Thanks!
but I agree that the growing ones are pretty good, it’s mainly what I’m interested in. No disrespect to the shrinking fun tho.
Date: January 27 2022 3:33 PM Title: Chapter 5. Violena, The Slightly Obsessive Goddess.
holy shit!!! amazing!! Can't wait for mroe. Maybe some breast insertion WAY down the line would be cool to. Amazing job!!
Date: January 27 2022 3:15 PM Title: Chapter 5. Violena, The Slightly Obsessive Goddess.
I’m liking where this story os headed. My one suggestion is that if you were going to do more giantess fetish stuff between the giantess and her soulmate, that she be scaled down a little in size to make it so that he isn’t so microscopic that it loses pleasure value.
Author's Response:
Yep, Duly noted. Thanks for reading.