Date: April 30 2025 12:09 AM Title: Diminished Investigation
Great to have you back with a fresh update! Looking forward to next installment!
[Report This]Date: April 06 2025 3:23 PM Title: The Grimoire of Diminishing
A lot of fun so far! I would really love to see the exploits of more people shrunken and forced to survive on parts of her body. I also love time dilation as a mechanic in micro stories. I've actually used it myself a few times.
Date: March 06 2025 1:15 PM Title: Diminished Snacks
Well, that escalated quickly! And honstly, I have some issues with this installment.
1) The previous chapters worked very well and presented a compelling narrative, as we, as readers, could connect emotionally to all parties involved. The flashbacks, changing POV and dialogues gave us insight and enabled emotional involvment into characters' lives. Here, we have an interaction between Lily and a crowd of nameless, faceless people (yes, Cindy, you belong to that group as well), who are treated from the beginning as tools for plot progression. In the blink of an eye Lily transitions from a shy, timid girl into murderous villain, who does not discern between those who wronged her in the past and innocent bystanders - no real motivation for it apart from power trip.
2) This leads to a second issue: what character do you want your protagonist to be? In previous chapters it was easy to sympathize with her, given her background and attitude. Note, that a small-scale personal vendetta is something understandable to majority non-sociopatic members of society and even that, humiliating and mind breaking as it was, was non-fatal in nature. Exterminating a few dozen people is harder to explain and sets one down a villain's path. Best characters, villains as well, are nuanced and show multiple facets of their personalities. In chapter 4 Lily feels kind of one-dimensional and tough to cheer for - like she was a psychopath all along, but her powerless nature was what held her back from harming others (we really are given no solid reasons for anything of that magnitude).
3) Regarding my previous review, the given numbers are totally arbitrary. But for a story to be a good novel/novella you have to consider the worldbuilding, character arcs, dialogues, etc. - and they all take space. Add to it a flowing narrative and it is almost impossible to write a very short and meaningful chapeter that progrsses the plot, lets characters grow (figuratively LOL) and does not feel like going through a checklist.
Best wishes!
Author's Response:
Thanks being constructively as that’s what I need. This part was actually planned for a bit later, but moved it up a bit up and modified it to make that part a bit longer.
In the story, I’m starting to progress her from sympathetic as the start, to the power itself is changing her morals and mind.
I’m on giantessworld discord as crazy_ideas if u want to share thoughts.
Thanks again!
[Report This]Date: March 04 2025 1:06 PM Title: Diminished Existence
A nice mix of rarely utilised concepts, well done! As usual, I will refrain from suggestions regarding plot - it's you story, not mine to tell. But I am enjoying the way Jessica and Adam's plight is being handled - especially Lily's quite tender but assertive attitude towards her former bullies.
A little structural suggestion: I find chapters of word count between 2500 and 6000 best at conveying the plot while not feeling rushed or overly massive.
Author's Response:
Appreciate the suggestions. I was actually trying to think what the best word count would be. I’ll factor that up for next time.
[Report This]Date: February 27 2025 11:12 PM Title: Diminished Sentence
Wow this story has been amazing so far! Loving the extreme size difference and how the power is getting to her. I hope she ends up putting one of tinies on the string of her thong between her ass and shrinking them to nano size so the fabric is a world to them all on its own.
Author's Response:
Good idea. I may actually do something like that in final part of the story.
Thanks!