Reviews For Fun with Chelsey
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Reviewer: amanda Signed [Report This]
Date: September 30 2009 3:23 PM Title: The fun begins

This is promising but i think it needs a womans touch e-mail me if fancy getting some female input.I have enjoyed whats been writen so far.


Reviewer: Stylesrj Signed [Report This]
Date: August 18 2008 2:13 AM Title: The fun begins

I know it's your first story but here's a good piece of advice:

Avoid writing like an internet chatroom.


Also, the plot (if there was one) needs more sense and the whole thing needs to be believable.

When I used to write proper stories here, I'd try my best to do such things, but I'd never know what was wrong with them, because people never reviewed them. Well, here I am giving you a review and telling you what's wrong with the story, so you can write better next time :)

Avoid chatroom writing, and make a plot and make the characters more believable and not typical, as I hate two dimensional characters 

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