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Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: May 20 2009 1:44 PM Title: Little adjustments

Heh! Wouldn't it be funny if they met Jen at the same mall (trying on normal women's fashions)?

Reviewer: DrManhattan Signed [Report This]
Date: May 19 2009 4:06 PM Title: Little adjustments

Yeah, I figured Sarah would play with Bobby at least a little bit.  It's nice to see her come to her senses, though.  Things probably won't be so bad for him now, unless of course she loses him.

You had a lot of nice descriptions in this chapter, both in actions as well as scenery.  You write with balance, so the reader can visualize the scene yet not be bogged down in meaningless and boring details.  This chapter is one of the better examples of this.

Bobby's inner monologing once again puts the reader in his shoes.  He goes through a myriad of emotions and experiences in this chapter, so that is no small task.  I'm glad he's starting to adapt to his new size, because I've still got a feeling it's going to be a while before he sees Jen again.

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