[Report This]Date: May 26 2009 1:26 PM Title: Small Revelations
Well, speaking on Bob's behalf, there must be something to the old legends (within the context of your story). Otherwise, he couldn't have gotten so small just by wishing it. And, by process of elimination, that goes double for how Jen, herself evidently got shrunk, in the first place!
Date: May 23 2009 10:46 AM Title: Small Revelations
Holy hell, man! You sure know where to end 'em!
You did Kim exactly like I hoped you would. She likes to get under people's skin and get her way, but she really is a good person beneath it all. I especially liked the touch of bitterness you threw in there. It makes the idea of her caring about Bobby very believable.
Wow, I really didn't see that last twist coming. I, too, bought into Jen's fairy story whole-heartedly. The best thing about said twist, though, is that I really have no idea where you are going to go from here. I don't even know if Jen ever planned on switching back with Bobby in the first place. My mind was swimming with ideas and questions as I finished this chapter.
This chapter was amazing, and for a lot of different reasons, too! Great job all around.
Author's Response: thanks, glad you enjoyed it