[Report This]Date: March 11 2022 10:04 PM Title: Chapter 10. Merely a Snack.
So while I'm likening the relationship so far. I think you may want to introduce some conflict soon to get the story going. Maybe show one of the other Giantesses who is more disposed to pure cruelty, and have Lena not really be fazed while her husband is more put off due to not being bound to the other giantess.
Idk if you want to have him do something that will make her punish him in a sexy way.
If you make her too kind too quickly, I just fear the story wont have any where to go personally but its your story. :)
Author's Response:
These are 100% fair points and criticisms. As of this chapter there isn’t really a strong plot line going, and there really been much done to either of the two leads towards one another. Both of your potential solutions or things to do, both add a sense of conflict and will progress the story I think, so honestly they are worth considering.
The other giantess coming in and adding a new plot like of having Blyke witnessing more cruelty is something I’ve considered, but for later as I wanted a few moments or chapters of relief between the two. I’m not completely sure if a Lena could be considered kind though, she does act like such towards Blyke and always has, but has been rather awful towards anyone else. Whether she slowly changes to more kinder or not is something I also should probably consider.
Regardless for the critical review. These help make sure I know if I should add something particular or when I should. From this review it seems I may need to slow Lena being nice and speed up the pace somewhat.
Date: March 11 2022 2:42 PM Title: Chapter 10. Merely a Snack.
I see Lena as kind but obsessive. I really want to see some exploration of the guy’s size being variable. Maybe so small that he can go into her nipple or big enough to where he could hide under her clothing and discreet talking with her and pleasuring her while she goes about her day.
Author's Response:
To be honest, I really like the first idea. It’s just that I’m trying to open the two up before they can go onto stuff like that. Plus you typically don’t see that in these stories but it sounds like it’ll be great to write.
Lena herself in my opinion is kind and obsessive towards Blyke. But as shown in the early chapters, she cares about him a large deal more than anyone else. So that can lead to a bit of cruelty everyone now and again. Not to mention her own traditions and customs too which as a giantess may be dehumanising to some. Still though, thanks for your input. I’ll be sure to focus more on the kind and obsessive parts of her at some point in coming chapters.